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Re: Ask For Feed Here by FLOWSHOW: 10:09pm On May 12, 2008 |
hi shaz, can u pls judge this 2 verses against each other. honest opinion based on normal judgement criterion @F-show Bitch da name is MALTHUSS better remember that better yet forget that mess that u's a malfunction so r ma fix that i got that sic wit it flow u just a sick homo flowshow should've done a no show 'cause am stealin this show leave him screaming oh no! only time u flow is when u blow nigga poles Malthuss known for rippin many foes battling me is like tourists visiting ghettos, bitch that a no go Bleep flowshow put ya in a 'ho'show got u fuckin for no dough leave you stranded like ticket touts 'cause am making this a free show this nigga cumin at me with 'em fcukin trash lines You need more than braces to straighthen up your wack rymes stick to what u know best keep givin niggaz head shines am gathering nairaland clouds to watch me reign on this fool King Malthuss da mic checker u's a court jester only fit for ma footstool kick freestyle that'll cause heatwaves in radio stations leave u several shades darker than slaves in plantations u want to battle Malthuss 'cause u think it brings u fame u can bounce on trampolins and still fall short of ma game against this verse : @malthius flowshow be da master~ flows unbelievable~ drop more rhythms than id kabasa this matth nigga raps like simba da lion king , animalistic momphassa lyrical show caster~ flow makes mallthius motionless like an NTA newcaster flowshow's heavyweighted ~malltius bars are bantam weighted~ a total disaster mallthius be the hoodrat~ like hoodboi talking trash ~u shld get the skin rash punk this rat~ make him fart~ like hummer exhausts puffin super mario kart malltuis bars are like hybrid judgements delivered without analysis, simply lame! flowshow da majesty~ matthius quacks like wack ducks~ what a shame this fool is an irony like 2face preaching condoms ~what a felony am diabolical like 9ice speaking vernacular~lyrical melody like ruggedy baba ft eedris ~this nigga collabo infects others with lyrical wackness matthius defeating flow is unheard of ~like noises made by deaf silence rhyme schemes intelligent~flowshow da word doctor like the general vent like mallthius rod, his rhymes are similar to his manhood ~simply bent flowshows daisy~malthius bars lazy~ like morning fogs ~so hazy like ''others people property'', ama run this nigga down like am ''crazy''** wordsplay iller than thuggacations pap~slay this dj like kay slay twice ma flows comes first ~matth second~ama make this nigga come third like ""obie thrice"" (3times) lyrical sickness~none iller than flow~my shows postpone like soap opera intense metaphorical giant ~i keep more nairas than hybrid's bank accounts in suspense i spit ill~more retarded than bjbroke~my multis make u choke~like a nigga on coke your punches vague~ so extinct like the girl group en-vogue ~flowshow multis are like spirits invoke! your punchlines are decayed~ like the nigerian society mallthius is a bitch~ his pussi shaking ~like he got anxiety my bars are processed`like pentiums in mode9 ~ bars deeper than six foot add plus to my shit and get six foot + like am flowshow from da swat root** big mouthed matthius is an easy nut to crack ~you is like julius agwu~simply a joke old sch battle giant now a fcukin dwarfer~nigga is hard to break like an egg yoke ! my last bar leaves yall wondering~ is flowshow a fortune teller? i play this nigga like my tarot cards~because with hyrid's extra 48hrs~ he still wouldn't reply |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 1:05am On May 13, 2008 |
I'm sure this verse was on the Star Wars thread, I hope you're not asking me to counter Brid's Judgement here because the grading system depends on the judge's mind most times, and he's not a machine, you should expect flaws of some kind. Anyways, here goes. . MALTHUSS' VERSE Bitch da name is MALTHUSS better remember that better yet forget that mess that u's a malfunction so r ma fix that That was a very weak opener and the rhyme scheme was crap i got that sic wit it flow u just a sick homo flowshow should've done a no show 'cause am stealin this show leave him screaming oh no! Just a filler. . nothing to pen home about only time u flow is when u blow nigga poles Malthuss known for rippin many foes If Mal thought this was a wordplay/punch bar, he must have been mistaken. . the line could have been worded better, e.g. Only time u make flows is when u blow (nigga) poles The addition of the 'make' added more sense and humour to it. . and basically, I wasn't feeling the next line, it's something a toddler could come up with battling me is like tourists visiting ghettos, bitch that a no go Bleep flowshow put ya in a 'ho'show got u fuckin for no dough The simile was there, twas nice, a nice punch leave you stranded like ticket touts 'cause am making this a free show this nigga cumin at me with 'em fcukin trash lines Now, how the hell does 'free show' and 'trash lines' rhyme?? Without rhymes, you are lost, although the first line had a clean punch in it You need more than braces to straighthen up your wack rymes stick to what u know best keep givin niggaz head shines Two good punches but they are not properly worded am gathering nairaland clouds to watch me reign on this fool King Malthuss da mic checker u's a court jester only fit for ma footstool In attempt to make a line, Mal just killed this bar. . i mean he ruined it kick freestyle that'll cause heatwaves in radio stations leave u several shades darker than slaves in plantations Why you talking bout radio stations in a TEXT 'BATTLE' for?? The next line was great but I really wonder, could it be that ol' Malthuss has gone all rusty?? u want to battle Malthuss 'cause u think it brings u fame u can bounce on trampolins and still fall short of ma game 'You can bounce' . . that should have been 'If you bounce'. . Anyways, it was a nice closer for me FLOWSHOW's VERSE flowshow be da master~ flows unbelievable~ drop more rhythms than id kabasa this matth nigga raps like simba da lion king , animalistic momphassa Dunno who 'id kabasa' is so that I can't judge properly, I'll just take it to say he deals with beats/rap or something with rhythm, and the 'flow was on show' but not used properly, you got your Lion King facts twisted lyrical show caster~ flow makes mallthius motionless like an NTA newcaster flowshow's heavyweighted ~malltius bars are bantam weighted~ a total disaster How can you come to battle and can't spell you opponent's name right?? And nice comparison mallthius be the hoodrat~ like hoodboi talking trash ~u shld get the skin rash punk this rat~ make him fart~ like hummer exhausts puffin super mario kart 'getting a skin rash' for 'talking trash', understandable. . but the next line was just forced to make use of multis, well, that din't work for me malltuis bars are like hybrid judgements delivered without analysis, simply lame! flowshow da majesty~ matthius quacks like wack ducks~ what a shame You dissed your judge, which is an unstated rule in battles, never, ever cross your judge this fool is an irony like 2face preaching condoms ~what a felony am diabolical like 9ice speaking vernacular~lyrical melody Nice multis and similes, seems you're taking the Rap basics into consideration like ruggedy baba ft eedris ~this nigga collabo infects others with lyrical wackness matthius defeating flow is unheard of ~like noises made by deaf silence great bar. . no more, no less rhyme schemes intelligent~flowshow da word doctor like the general vent like mallthius rod, his rhymes are similar to his manhood ~simply bent You could have worded the first line better, e.g. flowshow the word doctor, treat this stray dog (Mal) like the general VET flowshows daisy~malthius bars lazy~ like morning fogs ~so hazy like ''others people property'', ama run this nigga down like am ''crazy''** 'Flowshows daisy'?? I'm sooooooooooo not feeling this bar, ty wordsplay iller than thuggacations pap~slay this dj like kay slay twice ma flows comes first ~matth second~ama make this nigga come third like ""obie thrice"" (3times) Could have been better, but i luvved the second line lyrical sickness~none iller than flow~my shows postpone like soap opera intense metaphorical giant ~i keep more nairas than hybrid's bank accounts in suspense Dissing on your judge again! That is a no-go area . . apart from that, the bar itself din't really make sense i spit ill~more retarded than bjbroke~my multis make u choke~like a nigga on coke your punches vague~ so extinct like the girl group en-vogue ~flowshow multis are like spirits invoke! I must say you really got the multis goin well your punchlines are decayed~ like the nigerian society mallthius is a bitch~ his pussi shaking ~like he got anxiety You don't diss (disrespect) your country, bruv, that's another point to mark you down my bars are processed`like pentiums in mode9 ~ bars deeper than six foot add plus to my shit and get six foot + like am flowshow from da swat root** didn[t get were that was heading to, sorry big mouthed matthius is an easy nut to crack ~you is like julius agwu~simply a joke old sch battle giant now a fcukin dwarfer~nigga is hard to break like an egg yoke ! 'nigga is as hard to break as an egg yoke' . . i know that's where you were goin. . nice simile ther too, great bar. . prolly my feav. bar in this verse my last bar leaves yall wondering~ is flowshow a fortune teller? i play this nigga like my tarot cards~because with hyrid's extra 48hrs~ he still wouldn't reply you spoilt your whole bleeping verse by not rhymin this last line. . the most important bits of a verse- opener and closer, then the middle piece is next. . anyways, I wasn't feeling this closer, it's not on the level of the bars above STATISTICS Punchlines - Flowshow Personals - Both Flow - Flowshow Metaphors - Malthuss Similes - Flowshow Opener - Flowshow Multis - Flowshow Closer - Malthuss VERDICT This might be due to the fact that Flowshow had a lenghtier verse but I think Malthuss din't put no effort in this and that's why it ain't really to brag bout schooling people and all that shit. . Brid might have graded you on his mood/perspective and you won but evreyone else knows who held this for real, innit? Case Closed. lol |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by HYBRIDX(m): 7:50am On May 13, 2008 |
hmmmmmmmmmmm . . . . . . . |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by FLOWSHOW: 10:28am On May 13, 2008 |
HYBRID-X: @hybrid and shaz i actually wanted to see if i was the only one feeling cheated. shaz analysis says it all. i guess hybrid was too busy with work so he couldnt read or analyse both verse hence he just dozed out 4,4,4,4, to flowshow and 7,7,7,7 to mallthius. anyways the result of flowshow vs mallthius is now clear with shaz analysis. i am not a trouble maker so i will accept the result by hybrid in good faith so that we can have peace and the star wars thread to progress. at least i am compensated openly by shaz analysis and result respect shaz and hybrid . good job well done. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by makavele: 7:00pm On May 13, 2008 |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Crude(m): 12:52pm On Jun 13, 2008 |
Oh! Shaz, i presume u would've been the world richest, if there had been a course like "Lyrical-Surgery" Cos u're really holdin it down up in here. More grease to ur elbows girl. . . . . . . . . . . . Keep on keeping it real. . . . . . . I think everybody needs u. Do some operation on this for me pls, it's a dance track. . . Huh, huh, check ds out, check ds out, Yo! I've seen wars that chokes and ones that killed dreams Ones that murders ambition like it's some war films And now d war is over maybe it's taking a break, Dude Go get yourself spruced up put on your stepping shoes It's gon be party party party, if u're down for d groove If u can't move, i'll suggest u tap your foot Party poopers are not welcomed, No! It's out of bound Get crazy when u hear em beat, and rap sound It's getting hot right on here, d.j's puttin it on d ground You can bounce all u want, u can step all u want You can move & groove all u want, but don't carry no guns Under this roof u may find 'em LI0NS 'n' em pest No bulshittin, no killin and no bloodshed I'm flaggin d white banner, i got peace on my chest Drop d hatchets, drop your mallets for your best interest I've been a soulja all my life now i'm taking a short rest U know i've got more comin. . . . . i'm sorry if i've got too much on ur desk |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Crude(m): 1:16pm On Jun 13, 2008 |
And this. . . . . . . . ___________Alexpissu_________________ Forbiden sins am clenching fist to weaken this midget He his back to his usuals spitting flawless like pregnant Bridget I hear his silent screams cause he be soaked in his dream This newbie aint getting d picture like smoked screen Am ever current like electricity am sending shocks 2 his feets This gay on Rap section trying to turn pro raping cripples in streets You voicing da rock-band chorus won't entitle a record deal I got lotta cats wanting to murder u have to tell them 2 chill Son i drop science like a kid who was born in the Lab You aint worth my bar i'mma get u evicted with my shift Tab Wave your shadow goodbye cause am operating your brains wit slug Ask Nairaland am more dreaded than a Jamaican thug My words are too vivid for this punk 2 capture This rap is my creation I'mma have him ready 4 rapture Against this. . . . . . . . . ______________Crude_________________________ Dawg u're making me feel like a heavy weight champion But a cat and his back-ups can never murder this Lion I'm a newbie, soaked in my dream to put u off d throne You don't belong there, u gotta get your ass on the phone And call em, kingmakers tell 'em the rightful king is in the zone Go ask 'em in Jamaica, i kill 'em thugs for game your ma let u out, but she dint say, "Cross crude's lane" your fist is hard, for my 2yrs old baby not to feel the pain From your punch, now u Sucker aint that a dissappointment? D only bar i see u got is located in the local pub I'm cleanin up my kits ready to slash your filthy ass up Watcha got to say, Hey u got to say it quick Dawg I'm tired of watchin u dumbin n mumblin out faint words Ok, i'ma close my eyes i'm not lookin, 1, 2, go, burst My flow is petrifying and scary enough to seal up your lips This guy's libido's high, he come when Shakira shakes her hips He's not a rapper, he's a bugger tryin to feel among the streets I can step on u bare-footed, attack u without my fleet your homies'll dedicate a track for u titled, "Crude aint good" Sorry, it aint my fault, in my hood it aint good to be good |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by nosa101(f): 11:11pm On Jun 13, 2008 |
I haven’t done this in like three years. But I was doodling in class and I kept think up funny lines so I figured I’d write them down. BTW…I couldn’t get the ROC boys beat out of my head so that’s kind of like a template. Here goes I’m in the building tonight Oh what a feeling, I’m feeling nice You aint even gotta bring your boyfriend out We could turn the lights off and play “who’s in your mouth?” Spit game, I’m filthy Need shower? Bruh I’m grimey Slimey? Flubber like, I’m ashy crack elbows,dry skin see me Need mana? Eat rappers No silverware, lack manners 2 girls 1 cup sick dirty like Kirk Hirnrich Plague sick, yersinia pestis lyrical assault charge? don't press this Like Kim Jong-iL, not humane in your girl's face, guess who came? I'm retarded bruh, staright insane Rap detox, y'all cranked that cocaine yea boyyeee!!! I'm building tonight Ooh, I'm flav feeling nice love rap like chinaman love rice Mana - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mana Yersinia Pestis - http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yersinia_pestis |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by JUNIT1(m): 2:28pm On Jun 25, 2008 |
SHAZ WHAT YOU THINK OF MY DISS OF MAKAVELE your lucky im not your kid dam right god forbid ok kid ill tell u now Just leave your computer and walk away from your seat because my rhymes are to complicated they'll make your brain over heat make your brain get easily snapped eaisy hacked passwords easily cracked my location never tracked in s.a but my lyrics continue to make u feel attacked can’t even sleep because your brain is being lyrically slapped all over the place to be honest that is the end of the case because its hands down who one this lyrical race its me and I easily stormed 1st place |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Crude(m): 1:48am On Jul 19, 2008 |
Why u gon dark on me like that? I read this thread like ei'day to know wat's up, i mean where i'm wanting, but it's like u dont wanna do it for me. . . . . . .Whhy? |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 10:37am On Jul 19, 2008 |
@shaz Please and Please can you analyse any of my verses, on any of the rap threads. I know they aren't much but i'll appreciate it. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 11:13am On Jul 19, 2008 |
@crude -- the winds blown, your yash as shown crude dude/ your just another hoe on naira land, never breakin ground, yet u claim to be on D 12's band, with lines so bland i don't think u'll make it to jand? u'll never cross that kine, because your a shame to my home land. your so fruitless, even when u work on fertile sand, u bring no milk, even if your fixed with breast glands, am not your average type, UR A HYPE, so don't xpect me to shake hands, i don't make friends just foes thatz why am satan's Dad. same nigga askin 4 collabo, crazy nigga thinkin am Donell Jones, forgettin am d custom of rap, u don't even make d borders, i fly first class/ while u still suckin on your momma's chest, pest coackroach, baygon(be gone) before u get Raid. even if u take a rap test with dumb(p)s/ u won't still pass son, on your wedding album/ u still not be in d picture , am the judge of this case/ your just a witness on the stands, like an iroko tree, roots so deep, i don't shake on my stance, quit rapping and maybe go in to dance, maybe then u just might appear on TV by chance, in one of them kola olawuyi series, lookin like a farse. @crude now u 've been killed on a Friday |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by JUNIT1(m): 12:53pm On Jul 19, 2008 |
LET ME JUDGE YOU QUICKLY, YOU ARE WHACK |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:18pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
Sorry I aint given feed on ya stuff. . I'ma do it now that I'm less busy Crude: Yo! I've seen wars that chokes and ones that killed dreams Ones that murders ambition like it's some war films Cool And now d war is over maybe it's taking a break, Dude Go get yourself spruced up put on your stepping shoes Hmmn. . okay It's gon be party party party, if u're down for d groove If u can't move, i'll suggest u tap your foot Normal, nothing 'WOW' Party poopers are not welcomed, No! It's out of bound Get crazy when u hear em beat, and rap sound Awful, i'm being honest, G It's getting hot right on here, d.j's puttin it on d ground You can bounce all u want, u can step all u want 'Ground' and 'Want' don't rhyme - this is just like a freestyle verse, it ain't got no elements of rap You can move & groove all u want, but don't carry no guns Under this roof u may find 'em LI0NS 'n' em pest Still no rhymes and no elements No bulshittin, no killin and no bloodshed I'm flaggin d white banner, i got peace on my chest Normal filler Drop d hatchets, drop your mallets for your best interest I've been a soulja all my life now i'm taking a short rest Not a good closer at all, step up brah |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:29pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
___________Alexpissu_________________ Forbiden sins am clenching fist to weaken this midget He his back to his usuals spitting flawless like pregnant Bridget Nice multis, and nice opoener I hear his silent screams cause he be soaked in his dream This newbie aint getting d picture like smoked screen I felt that punch - lexy, get ur butt to the TTT. . nice metas too Am ever current like electricity am sending shocks 2 his feets This gay on Rap section trying to turn pro raping cripples in streets Nice flow You voicing da rock-band chorus won't entitle a record deal I got lotta cats wanting to murder u have to tell them 2 chill Send em baq to the papaz Son i drop science like a kid who was born in the Lab You aint worth my bar i'mma get u evicted with my shift Tab Nice punches Wave your shadow goodbye cause am operating your brains wit slug Ask Nairaland am more dreaded than a Jamaican thug Nice punches, again My words are too vivid for this punk 2 capture This rap is my creation I'mma have him ready 4 rapture Didn't really feel the closer but the verse was cool in totality - 8/10 Against this. . . . . . . . . ______________Crude_________________________ Dawg u're making me feel like a heavy weight champion But a cat and his back-ups can never murder this Lion Filler bar. . nothing special I'm a newbie, soaked in my dream to put u off d throne You don't belong there, u gotta get your ass on the phone Nada! And call em, kingmakers tell 'em the rightful king is in the zone Go ask 'em in Jamaica, i kill 'em thugs for game You don't kill no jamaicans, lying makes your bars weak your ma let u out, but she dint say, "Cross crude's lane" your fist is hard, for my 2yrs old baby not to feel the pain the Punch was in the last line but you need to restructure it From your punch, now u Sucker aint that a dissappointment? D only bar i see u got is located in the local pub Needs some re-wording I'm cleanin up my kits ready to slash your filthy ass up Watcha got to say, Hey u got to say it quick Dawg Shit line I'm tired of watchin u dumbin n mumblin out faint words Ok, i'ma close my eyes i'm not lookin, 1, 2, go, burst You tried with multis but they were forced. . tryin makin them flow properly, G My flow is petrifying and scary enough to seal up your lips This guy's libido's high, he come when Shakira shakes her hips Re-word! He's not a rapper, he's a bugger tryin to feel among the streets I can step on u bare-footed, attack u without my fleet Just a filler your homies'll dedicate a track for u titled, "Crude aint good" Sorry, it aint my fault, in my hood it aint good to be good Nice closer . . I'd say a 5.5/10 |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 3:33pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
@Shaz - Thumbs up. Ok don't analyse my RAP, just CRITICISE IT. Am not a real rapper like that (OK). But I'll like to know how I fared. I love listenin to RAP and I tot I might as well write some few lines., Thx |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:36pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
Nosa 101, before I read your verse - it's easy to tel that ur structure ain't right and you're using elementary rhymes. . I'll give u a link later. I’m in the building tonight Oh what a feeling, I’m feeling nice Filler You aint even gotta bring your boyfriend out We could turn the lights off and play “who’s in your mouth?” Re-word! It's a good bars but needs words Spit game, I’m filthy Need shower? Bruh I’m grimey Duh! Slimey? Flubber like, I’m ashy crack elbows,dry skin see me Nah! Need mana? Eat rappers No silverware, lack manners ?? 2 girls 1 cup sick dirty like Kirk Hirnrich Boy. . you're dullin this thing Plague sick, yersinia pestis lyrical assault charge? don't press this Like Kim Jong-iL, not humane in your girl's face, guess who came? I'm retarded bruh, staright insane Rap detox, y'all cranked that cocaine yea boyyeee!!! I'm building tonight Ooh, I'm flav feeling nice love rap like chinaman love rice In all nice vocab, but pretty elementary |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:39pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
J- UNIT your lucky im not your kid dam right god forbid Nah! ok kid ill tell u now Just leave your computer and walk away from your seat because my rhymes are to complicated they'll make your brain over heat make your brain get easily snapped eaisy hacked passwords easily cracked my location never tracked in s.a but my lyrics continue to make u feel attacked can’t even sleep because your brain is being lyrically slapped all over the place to be honest that is the end of the case because its hands down who one this lyrical race its me and I easily stormed 1st place I can't be bothered to decipher the strucutre cuz it's messed as hell. . Elementary diss. . 1/30 |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 3:47pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
@Shaz Good work. But whenz my turn? |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:48pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
Javaprince @crude -- the winds blown, your yash as shown crude dude/ your just another hoe on naira land, never breakin ground, yet u claim to be on D 12's band, Lies spoil bars. . And this aint an opener. . juss a filler with lines so bland i don't think u'll make it to jand? u'll never cross that kine, because your a shame to my home land. Didnt' feel nothin your so fruitless, even when u work on fertile sand, u bring no milk, even if your fixed with breast glands, Nice punches, they just need re-wordin am not your average type, UR A HYPE, so don't xpect me to shake hands, i don't make friends just foes thatz why am satan's Dad. Baby punches same nigga askin 4 collabo, crazy nigga thinkin am Donell Jones, Filler forgettin am d custom of rap, u don't even make d borders, i fly first class/ while u still suckin on your momma's chest, Duh! pest coackroach, baygon(be gone) before u get Raid. Shit! even if u take a rap test with dumb(p)s/ u won't still pass son, on your wedding album/ u still not be in d picture , Re-word am the judge of this case/ your just a witness on the stands, like an iroko tree, roots so deep, i don't shake on my stance, Filler quit rapping and maybe go in to dance, maybe then u just might appear on TV by chance, Re-word in one of them kola olawuyi series, lookin like a farse. Nada |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 3:49pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
Javaprince, It was first come, first serve |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 3:57pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
@Shaz Thanks so much. I'll score myself 1/20. And that means I should change my Department(Java) or go on Probation. When I showed my friends they all started laughin like wats a Programmer doin on rap section. Thing is I love Punches/wordpalays and multis nut creatin a Verse thatz d difficult thin To all u Rap Headz in Nairaland - Much Respect. I admit am no Rap "Anything" @Shaz - Thx. I'll be postin more shit 4 u to analyse - but promise to improve. Thx again. But U didn't analyse my "best" versed. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 4:00pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
yeah, yeah, the prince of rap is back, all u wacks better disperse, this a SARS letter, go on a adjust, or u might be d latter, back to the former, hear dumb-ass, is been on d rattle, bitch quit the sulkin, this battle is uncalled for, your not on my altitude, am way too fly for u to explore, am a veteran at war, u just a post-thread fighter, a fake poster, cheap nigga seekin publicity, u wouldn't even get that from your toaster, 2 minutes nikkur, comin at me, like i was the next gay on the roster, pleease, don't make me child-molest u, i spit adult contents. Am the Spartan warlord, my job is to extinct u, lyrically emblaze u, blow your ashes to the cruising high-way, then re-incarnate u, bless u, re-state u as a doorway, make u an eye-opener for the upcomin wack-MCs, diss a sample, a lesson, for the new generation, the prince of rap is back, applaud in admiration, in desperation, am sure, u want to do a comeback, try to counterattack, now your defense is at my dispense, too late to seek recompense, your dead now, no more pensions. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 4:01pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
and the second verse - king crude, king dodo, you just a kid from outter space, battling a self-acclaimed ace, is like fightin a lost case - u'll be left defaced, erased,disgraced, like the rest of your wack-races - i'll leave u all debased, calling me for battle(LOL), dude DO You think this was some WAR FILMS? am REALITY Nikkur, am NOT some Jamie Foxxie on JAR HEADS, You's a JOKER, charging at me like You got TIGER HEADS? Am an ACE Nikkur, going to discharge u in a FLASH, am the illest RAP HEAD. You is a Sewage, no need to waste time on you, i got a show to Catch, my manager's callin, my fan's are waitin, its time to let the stage BLOW. epilogue, your not coming back, ensured no post-attack, bygone-be-bygone, BANG!!!, CLICK!!!, BANG!!!, You'll never mess with an Ogba Boy, No more soilin of nairaland, Rest in Pieces, some business needs my attention. Don't laugh guess their lame lines but at least their my ORIGINALS |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by JUNIT1(m): 4:52pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
shaz feed this dis of you by whackelele this aint about a tourney ~ it's nothing but a journey makavele will reach the end ~ so there's no need for me to worry am da next lyrical illest ~ and am spitting ma ' lines on shaz put 'em on the scale ~ her weight aint up to ma' bars i'ma go "boom" on her and make her my dog's bride reduce her to nothingness and strip the hooker of her pride* wack babe be getting paranoid, brain's empty~ but this is just the intro am more explosive than TNT ~ aggresive than fans of WCW Nitro * shaz' pride is her p****y |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 5:09pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
@Javaprince, sorry I am very busy, I'm just ruishin thingz through 4 y'all yeah, yeah, the prince of rap is back, all u wacks better disperse, this a SARS letter, go on a adjust, or u might be d latter, back to the former, hear dumb-ass, is been on d rattle, Yo, you need to get your rhyme scheme goin and your flows too. . And yeah, your vocab - ain't no thin as a SARS letter bitch quit the sulkin, this battle is uncalled for, your not on my altitude, am way too fly for u to explore, am a veteran at war, u just a post-thread fighter, a fake poster, cheap nigga seekin publicity, u wouldn't even get that from your toaster, Punches are embedded but they don't hit hard 2 minutes nikkur, comin at me, like i was the next gay on the roster, pleease, don't make me child-molest u, i spit adult contents. Am the Spartan warlord, my job is to extinct u, lyrically emblaze u, blow your ashes to the cruising high-way, then re-incarnate u, bless u, re-state u as a doorway, make u an eye-opener for the upcomin wack-MCs, diss a sample, a lesson, for the new generation, the prince of rap is back, applaud in admiration, in desperation, am sure, u want to do a comeback, try to counterattack, now your defense is at my dispense, too late to seek recompense, your dead now, no more pensions. I lost the structure again. . But i read thruogh. . get your flows in gear. . the thing is you got the LL Cool J's sydrome - you waste most bars talkin bout you and wht you gon do that you end up not doin it, d'you get me? |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by JUNIT1(m): 5:13pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
shaz stop wasting time with javaprince, pls put a poll in beat down pre lim, thanks, or how can i do that myself |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 5:14pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
Lol. . I don't laff at peeps lines because to be honest, it aint beans to bust 16s, people without the knowledge of the basics of rap usu make the mistake of thinkin it is. . king crude, king dodo, you just a kid from outter space, battling a self-acclaimed ace, is like fightin a lost case - u'll be left defaced, erased,disgraced, like the rest of your wack-races - i'll leave u all debased, This is one line short of two bars. . you can't just switch rhyme scheme in the middle of a bar. . punches and metas are there. . calling me for battle(LOL), dude DO You think this was some WAR FILMS? am REALITY Nikkur, am NOT some Jamie Foxxie on JAR HEADS, You's a JOKER, charging at me like You got TIGER HEADS? Am an ACE Nikkur, going to discharge u in a FLASH, am the illest RAP HEAD. Just fillers You is a Sewage, no need to waste time on you, i got a show to Catch, my manager's callin, my fan's are waitin, its time to let the stage BLOW. Fillers and no rhymes. . try using multis and in-rhymes. . Slant rhymes would do you good too epilogue, your not coming back, ensured no post-attack, bygone-be-bygone, BANG!!!, CLICK!!!, BANG!!!, You'll never mess with an Ogba Boy, No more soilin of nairaland, Rest in Pieces, some business needs my attention. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Shaz(f): 5:19pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
The Beat Down pre-lim doesn't need any poll. . it's a qualifying stage. . and the votes oin the main pre-lim will be decided by Hybrid-X and him alone. this aint about a tourney ~ it's nothing but a journey makavele will reach the end ~ so there's no need for me to worry Cold opener. .' no isht in it am da next lyrical illest ~ and am spitting ma ' lines on shaz put 'em on the scale ~ her weight aint up to ma' bars How do weight and bars correlate. . that's no punch. i'ma go "boom" on her and make her my dog's bride reduce her to nothingness and strip the hooker of her pride* How can you go boom on someone one. . Makavele lacks the right use of words and he knows it. . he''ll find out in the beat down and he also lacks structure. .The last line of this bar was a punchline due to the use of wordplay. . that was the only place an element was used. . Makavele has no control over in-rhymes, multis, flows, metas and sims and personals wack babe be getting paranoid, brain's empty~ but this is just the intro am more explosive than TNT ~ aggresive than fans of WCW Nitro Forced simile. . In all I'd give the verse a 4/10 |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by JUNIT1(m): 5:27pm On Jul 21, 2008 |
shaz's p |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by javaprince(m): 9:26am On Jul 22, 2008 |
Thanks Shaz. I so much appreciate. I think I need a lesson on Rap. |
Re: Ask For Feed Here by Crude(m): 6:24pm On Jul 22, 2008 |
@Shaz Well, i'll say u're indeed a Godsent to all Nairaland Netcees, some might just frown at this, but deep down in there heart they know i'm right. Thanx Shaz, i really appreciate it. You got me go back to my Carban and Re-shuffle my lines, flows and rhymes. But, i got a question, is it really bad if one to rhyme three lines? Cos i did that and u said it aint right. . . . . . . . . . |
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