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Re: Evergreen Memories by MumZ(f): 5:10pm On Aug 27, 2013 |
Sad story, dnt likey. Sorry 4 ur loss. Like sme1 said, u ll av 2 work on ur tense. Weldone. D arabic phrase "Allah we cme 4rm n 2 Him we ll return" is used 4 d dead, nt as an exclamation. 4 exclamations most times we say d arabic phrase 4,"I seek refuge in Allah 4rm all d antics of d devil", "allhamdullilai" or "Allahu akbar" dependn on wat news we r reacting2. 1ce again kudos, look 4wrd 2 ur nxt story. Hpefully it won't brng a tear 2 my eyes. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 8:22pm On Aug 27, 2013 |
Mum Z : Thanks Mum Z. But as I said (from Allah we are and to him we shall return) can also be as an exclamation especially on hearing bad news as Allah has said in the. Holy Quran surah 2 verse 156 (I hope you don't mind checking it up )while Alhamdulillah and Allahu Akbar (We thank Allah and Allah is great respectively) are used to praise Allah especially during happy moments, if u could read thru the story once more, I believe u'll understand why my mum (in one case) exclaimed such. Sorry abt the tear |
Re: Evergreen Memories by MumZ(f): 9:52pm On Aug 27, 2013 |
underage: Ok noted, mayb its cos I'm used 2 seeing it on funeral annoucemts n invites. We most use "Ahusubillahi mina shaitan ragihum" (pardon my spellings)4 sad or bad occurences. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 10:03pm On Aug 27, 2013 |
Mum Z : R u Nigerian? |
Re: Evergreen Memories by MumZ(f): 10:05am On Aug 28, 2013 |
underage: Full" blooded", born n bred in Nigeria, still in Nigeria. Y do u ask? |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 11:52am On Aug 28, 2013 |
Mum Z : Because of the way u spelt d arabic phrases but I guess u r not from d north, ryt? |
Re: Evergreen Memories by MumZ(f): 12:38pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
^^^ No am not, bt am a muslim so I'm suppose 2 knw d right spellings, bt sadly I dnt. Try 2 spell it d way I pronounce it, bt I knw d spellings r wrong. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by harlos: 1:21pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
*sights* Allah knows best. Nice story from you underage. Though i'm not used to reading long stories but i did this one and enjoyed it. Kudos. May his soul rest in peace. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 1:41pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
harlos: *sights* Ameen. Thanks |
Re: Evergreen Memories by harlos: 1:44pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 1:57pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
harlos: Watch out for my next story soon |
Re: Evergreen Memories by harlos: 2:21pm On Aug 28, 2013 |
underage:No prob, i'm with you |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Ishilove: 4:42pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
underage: "He sure needs your help", the strange caller responded. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 5:55pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
Thanks Ishilove. But could you be clear about why you bolded the last few sentences? And could you please site a few examples within the writeup about tense confusion/inconsistency (as in the wrong one and den the correct one). Thats what I don't get. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Ishilove: 6:46pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
I bolded the last sentences because I was trying the illustrate the ideal line spacing when writing dialogue. You jammed the lines together so I separated them. Spacing them makes it easier for the reader to follow. When writing, stick to one form of tense. If you want to write in present continous, stick to it. If past, stick to it. Switching and mixing them up is wrong and makes your writing look amateurish. For example: "Earlier in the day,I have been feeling kind of strange, acting wierd and worrying over nothing in particular. My face was gloomy and I hardly paid attention to anything because my mind was carried away thinking of Basheer. I was that kind of a person who finds it hard to hide my feelings. I was always lively, you can call me a talkative who knows when and where to talk. This is how it is supposed to read: Earlier in the day, I had been feeling kind of strange, acting weird and worrying over nothing in particular. My face was gloomy and I hardly paid attention to anything because my mind was carried away thinking of Basheer. I was that kind of a person who found it hard to hide my feelings. I was always lively; you could call me a talkative who knows when and where to talk. You will notice I used past tense because I am giving a despcription of my temperament. I didn't switch from past to present, then back again. I was consistent. Nice intro, by the way 1 Like |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 7:30pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
Ishilove: I bolded the last sentences because I was trying the illustrate the ideal line spacing when writing dialogue. You jammed the lines together so I separated them. Spacing them makes it easier for the reader to follow. Thanks so much Ishilove, with people like you going through my works, it'll be great. I really appreciate it. May God continue to bless you with these talents, ameen. I hope u'll be here for me next time. Thanks once again |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Ishilove: 7:35pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
underage:Amen!!! And you too |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 7:39pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
Ishilove: I hope to know you better; people like you inspire me |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Ishilove: 8:02pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
underage:I am glad lil ol' me inspires you. All thanks be to God. You have it in you. Consistency and hardwork will see you being the best of the best |
Re: Evergreen Memories by yemi2plus(m): 8:26pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
With ishilove, you have it all |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 8:28pm On Sep 01, 2013 |
Ishilove:I hope so |
Re: Evergreen Memories by MacT33(m): 11:40am On Oct 07, 2013 |
I got to see your work through this: https://www.nairaland.com/1466615/most-painful-death-loved-one/1 I could not afford to have pass by this thread,after reading,without attesting to the fact that U're a good writer. Accept my sympathy @ Ur frnd Basheer...May he rest in Peace... |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 3:18pm On Oct 07, 2013 |
MacT33: I got to see your work through this: https://www.nairaland.com/1466615/most-painful-death-loved-one/1 Ameen and thanks |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Miracy(f): 9:23am On Nov 03, 2013 |
...sooo touching!i couldnt help myself withold the lil tears that came dripping on my face... I wonder why death takes away our loved one without an opportunity to say goodbye... May the soul of your friend rest in perfect peace!! kudos to this great work,you’re a great writer;its in you...i can see you excel in it... i really admire your qualities and i wish to be like you someday... BTW,you’re Nai’mah or.... |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 10:29am On Nov 03, 2013 |
Miracy: Thnx and ameen to ur prayers . Yes I am Na'imah |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Miracy(f): 12:30pm On Nov 03, 2013 |
underage:thats nice ma’am |
Re: Evergreen Memories by lolabridget(f): 1:37pm On Nov 03, 2013 |
Wow Madan underage, this is anoda wonderfull story. So sorry for ur friend |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Nobody: 10:19pm On Nov 10, 2013 |
Y did I read it n d nyt? Y did u(underage) av to take tears 4rm my eyes tonyt? Wallahi,I felt my h@ constrict n d tears fell freely... Ya Rabb |
Re: Evergreen Memories by Jhymrod(f): 2:57pm On Nov 12, 2013 |
Sorry for your lost ma'm,may Allah grant him Aljannah Firdous. |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 1:18pm On Nov 13, 2013 |
lola_bridget: Wow Madan underage, this is anoda wonderfull story. So sorry for ur friend Thanks |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 1:21pm On Nov 13, 2013 |
Candis009: Y did I read it n d nyt? |
Re: Evergreen Memories by underage(f): 1:22pm On Nov 13, 2013 |
Jhymrod: Sorry for your lost ma'm,may Allah grant him Aljannah Firdous. Ameen, thnx |
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