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Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 5:41pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
plainmirror: @omolola I liked †нэ way you criticised my work word for word. It is obvious you are not a fan of adventures hence ur unfavourable appraisal.could you be a darling and remove those blackberry characterised letters |
Re: Short Story Competition by sambroose(m): 5:42pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Judges you guys are breaking ma heart..........if I knew that I would be lashed like dz, I would av pulled out earlier..........All izz not welllllll |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 5:45pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
MOMENT OF TRUTH Damex33 I have a few questions - when was the moment of truth? - Is Tonia a mistress or a wife? (Because you referred to her as a mistress somewhere in the story) - what's the wife's name? - is there a wife and also a mistress? If there is, you mixed them up. I would advise you re-write this story because it wasn't arranged properly. Honestly, I got lost in the story because I could not identify the characters. Poor dialogue, bad punctuation and no paragraph. I've observed these are most of the problems in this competition. Anyway, it would make a nice plot if properly developed and planned out. |
Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 5:52pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
sambroose: Judges you guys are breaking ma heart..........if I knew that I would be lashed like dz, I would av pulled out earlier..........All izz not welllllll It is well |
Re: Short Story Competition by Kslib(m): 6:04pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
HumbledbYGrace: What lurks in the dark1.. So cos you've never read any vampire stories in Africa, now means any story that involves vampires should be shoved aside? Besides,i never included any vampire in my story. I only described the old woman in a way i thought was scary,i wonder where you got your vampire theory from? You said even if it's just in dreams:: Like seriously? I have dreamt about UFO's and i'm sure many people must have dreamt about many strange things also.. THIS FIRST POINT OF YOURS HOLD NO WATER AT ALL.. ##No offense## 2.. You just said spacing and you didn't specify where in the story lacked space when there should have been one.. 3.. I never wrote at any point in the story that mike was bitten. I didnt say he went to his friends house cos he couldn't sleep. He wanted to visit his friend who just flew in and for some strange unknown reason,he felt that was the right time.. It was a dream and strange things happen in dreams that's why i said his reason for deciding to go out that time was strange.. Well,i guess you were in a hurry to just finish with my boring story,that's the reason why you rushed through the whole thing.. Its fine though.. 4.. What does Ishi has to do with my work? No wahala. Lastly,you placed my work at 9th position.. Well,its not easy to come 9th out of 15 sha BUT honestly,i would have preferred it if you had placed me at 15th but critiqued my work accordingly.. Pls learn from @omolala.. Erm,look at the bolded and learn from your mistakes. That's not how to spell. .. Thanks for the critique though. ... ... All izz well! |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 6:05pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Omolola1: MOMENT OF TRUTHi am 110% sure you neva read d story. Gush. Bleep this. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Kslib(m): 6:09pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Omolola1: WHAT LURKS IN THE DARKThanks for the correction/analysis. I've learnt from it.. .. .. All izz well! 1 Like |
Re: Short Story Competition by OMA4U(m): 6:10pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Kslib: My guy don provoke... Tak am easy o |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 6:13pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
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Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 6:13pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Omolola1: MOMENT OF TRUTHi am 110% sure you neva read d story. Gush. Bleep this. I regretted joining this, instead of helping me, its actualz breaking me, breaking lots me writers morale. You are asking of the name of the wife? Wait, is this a joke or something. Asking if Tonia was mistress. As in? Oh my God. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Kslib(m): 6:16pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
OMA4U:Lmao!! Abeg oo.. Why i go provoke na? I didnt know i sounded harsh ooo.. Abi you wan set me up? You wan make me look like sore loser shey? .. Your pan no go work..lol I was just pointing out things . Its no that serious nah. HBG,no mind this guy oo .. .. All izz well! |
Re: Short Story Competition by AbuMikey(m): 6:22pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
No analysis on my job yet,except Mazi's own,as for HBG,the previous analysis you gave with "red biro" to me is Pure thrash!!! |
Re: Short Story Competition by FoxyFlow(m): 6:34pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
I dey come... All the writers dey vex. Make una relax until I reach house. I dey wedged between two fat men and my testicles dey feel like say e wan burst. I must get car this year... Baba God, bless your pikin hustle... |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 6:45pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
HumbledbYGrace: Search for Mona lisaI'm not writing for lazy readers but for those who would take their time to visit their lexicons over and over again(like the Whites). That's why the short story is set in the US and Paris. You can agree with me that foreign stories are even more complex than this. More so, I wrote it based on what miss Efemena said "The more complex, the better." |
Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 6:47pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Kslib:ok 1 Like |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 7:12pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Omolola1: THE SEARCH FOR MONALISA |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 7:13pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Omolola1: THE SEARCH FOR MONALISA |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 7:14pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
DARK CHOCOLATE Tflow I want to be your dark chocolate It's hard to criticize your work because you used real plots and so it was easy for me to imagine. I like your style of writing, it looks easy when reading but it's actually very difficult to write. I loved it. But hey, take note of your paragraphs and spacing. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 7:18pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
plainmirror: @omolola I liked †нэ way you criticised my work word for word. It is obvious you are not a fan of adventures hence ur unfavourable appraisal. U are welcome |
Re: Short Story Competition by repogirl(f): 7:26pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Lol, na wa o, writers are not finding this judging thing funny o. guys, it comes with the territory, we have nothing against you. The harsher it is, the move you are to improve. Sorry, take Panadol and you'll be fine. mazi I thought we were supposed to include scores? Lemme know, I compiled mine with scores. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 7:42pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Don't blame our judges o. U know they're green in this business of censoring. Glossary green- inexperienced censoring- criticising(doing the work of a critic) Hope I'm safe cos glossary is included now ; D To be frank, our judges need to get themselves prepared for some other times. Judges, go step up your vocabulary...read your dictionary like story book. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 7:43pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
JOURNEY TO GREATNESS NumeroUno I love your story, really, I do. Though, the first paragraph wasn't that catchy, I was eager to know how the journey came about and I wasn't disappointed that it turned out to be a flash back. You were able to talk about Jide's upbringing, his life in school, the ordeal he passed through, his mother and still end the story with that touching footer. Thank you for that educative piece! |
Re: Short Story Competition by AbuMikey(m): 7:48pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
I though the Judges decided on choosing their Top 5 based on scores The Judges are confused I must say I'm sorry if the post might offend anyone |
Re: Short Story Competition by repogirl(f): 7:50pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
, writers go soon lynch judges o....Sammy hoe ..... Pelepele, it ain't personal. Even best selling authors haven't seen those kind of words in that your short story. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Nobody: 7:50pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
The harsher it is, the move you are to improve. I can't comprehend this grammar o. Could you please reframe it? Glossary Comprehend- understand |
Re: Short Story Competition by OMA4U(m): 7:51pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Kslib: okay o. Don't mind me jawe. But I actually thought you were vexing... In your voice: "all zzz well" Whatever the judges say, my guy u try ooo. I swear it's not easy to write. Writing is just one herculean task |
Re: Short Story Competition by repogirl(f): 7:53pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Sammy Hoe:ehya, person don really vex o. |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 7:59pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
POWER HUNGRY AbuMikey Abu Mikey can DESCRIBE! Your illustrative skill is just perfect. However, be careful on how you use punctuations. I'm very sure your work was rushed, because if you had taken time to write this story, it would have been a master-piece. You really did not organize this story well, I wish you took your time. I enjoyed your story though |
Re: Short Story Competition by Omolola1(f): 8:09pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
OMA4U Three words for you. YOU ARE GOOD.. It was a bit long..but make no mistake, You are good and I loved it. Content, illustrative skills and organization was excellent. What's the title of the story though? Or should I give it one |
Re: Short Story Competition by Ishilove: 8:15pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
plainmirror: @omolola I liked †нэ way you criticised my work word for word. It is obvious you are not a fan of adventures hence ur unfavourable appraisal.You don't handle criticism well, do you? |
Re: Short Story Competition by glowingscenes(f): 8:22pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
I just found out im enlisted in the judges list... im so early...#.takes a seat and tries to make a straight face #hope it works |
Re: Short Story Competition by Ishilove: 8:40pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Sammy Hoe: Don't blame our judges o. U know they're green in this business of censoring.Tsk tsk tsk, Sammy Hoe, you don't have monopoly over big grammar. One thing you haven't realised, or are too stuck up to realise is finesse is needed when using these dictionary grammar; something you are yet to acquire. Your work was chock filled with unnecessary grammar that lacked the finesse that would have made your work enjoyable. Let me refer you to a nairalander named Jakumo. The man is a master of 'big grammar', but he uses it in such a way that any one who read his post is left very impressed. You, Sammy, left your readers confused. That's a big difference. All I saw in what you wrote was unnecessary bombast and circumlocution that made reading your work quite a herculean exercise. I will get to that when I submit my analyses. Have you read Amos Tutuola's sories? I think you should. 1 Like |
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