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Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:18pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: Nilla's. How did the reverend Paul of "the fighting temptations" put it? Let's see. . . They know how to make a man say "Amen!" when he's at home. By the way, the next sentence also refers to the same part of the anatomy. Nilla's a beaut, isn't she? nilla: Yes, please. Thank you. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:26pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Beauty? lets leave that for the beholder . will put my critique for those 3 poems later then. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:33pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: I am the beholder. That is the essence of the poem. It attempts to show you a picture of words. As far as the poem is concerned, I know Nilla more than anyone else (including yourself). Are you saying that I have not succeeded in making you think of Nilla as a great beauty or [for the male] have I not succeeded in making you wish for a more informal (and perhaps more intimate) rendezvous with her? If I did not succeed in doing that, then the objective of the poem is lost. It was a failed attempt. Now put me out of my misery, Nilla. Did I succeed? |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:35pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: Misery be gone. you succeeded. it wasnt a failed attempt. Are you feeling better now . |
Re: Poetry Contest by monister(f): 6:38pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Tribute Mother though you're gone, Thoughts of you are ever fresh in me, I still hear your loving voice, Feel your tender touch, It feels like you're still there, Till realization hits me, And I discover you've been snatched by death as it slowly ate you While I stood helpless The night before I remember you say goodnight as if you knew it was to be the last Adieu Adieu dear mum: Though you're gone, I know you watch me Up there in the Grandstands, As I run the race of life. Soon we shall be together never to part again Till then, |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:39pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: Yes indeed, thank you. Though whether that is due to your reply or to the cyber kiss is another question entirely. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:40pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
monister:monister, good work. very touching and moving. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:41pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: ok what is it due to? |
Re: Poetry Contest by mukina2: 6:42pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
@monister that poem made me cry i also have one i wrote for my mum |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:43pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
ok guys pls dont get me crying too. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:43pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
monister: Quite emotional, Monister. Was that an error? |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:47pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: You know what I think of Nilla, and effect she has on [i]man[/i]kind. What do you think it's due to? Better still, what would you have it due to? Wipe your tears, Princess. It will be well. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Oracle(m): 6:51pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Monister, i love the natural nature of your poem i hope you understand what that means |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:52pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: your the poet. you should answer what you want it to be due to. i think i will be fine with either. and now I'm thinking somebody else should judge "Nilla", "Madre" and "Deja vu", cos i wont be fair |
Re: Poetry Contest by monister(f): 6:52pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nope no error Genial |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:54pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Ok, Monister. I apologise. You probably wanted to use the characters ". . .", and it was converted to ",". |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 6:56pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: And now I'm thinking of Nilla. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 6:57pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: Meanwhile you didnt make any comment on my first ever poem |
Re: Poetry Contest by somegirl(f): 6:59pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
My mother will never die and if she did, I'd cry but she won't, never, so we'll be together, for ever. Monister, thanks for your poem and welcome to this thread. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 7:01pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
somegirl: your very good at using a poem to respond to other poems. |
Re: Poetry Contest by somegirl(f): 7:06pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Nilla, I am enjoying it. Gwatala set me up on this game. Hopefully, he'll be back one day. I miss him --- |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 7:10pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
nilla: I'm sorry, darling. I suppose I should still have commented, even though I felt somegirl and macalurs had done you some degree of justice with their comments. I think it was a really good first attempt. I also love your unabashed declaration of love for the motherland. Good one. Has that by any chance straightened the furrows of displeasure on your forehead? |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 7:13pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
somegirl: cool. will check out his thread sometime. Can see your having fun Genial:good, no more frowns, only smiles |
Re: Poetry Contest by CrazyMan(m): 7:55pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Recently I overheard two lovers in their last moments together. They had announced her departure and standing near the security gate, they hugged and he said, "I love you. I wish you enough."She in turn said, John our life together has been more than enough. Your love is all I ever needed. I wish you enough, too, Sharon." They kissed and she left. He (john) walked over toward the window where I was seated. Standing there I could see he wanted and needed to cry. I tried not to intrude on his privacy, but he welcomed me in by asking, "Did you ever say good-bye to someone knowing it would be forever?" "Yes, I have," I replied. Saying that brought back memories I had of expressing my love and appreciation for all my beloved john had done for me. Recognizing that his days were limited, I took the time to tell him face to face how much he meant to me. So I knew what this man was experiencing. "Forgive me for asking, but why is this a forever good-bye?" I asked. "whan am gone she lives much too far away. I have challenges ahead, and the reality is, the next trip back will be for my wedding to her he said. "When you were saying good-bye I heard you say,'I wish you enough.' May I ask what that means?" He began to smile, "That's a wish that has been handed down from other generations. My parents used to say it to everyone." He paused for a moment and looking up as if trying to remember it in detail, he smiled even more. "When we said 'I wish you enough,' we were wanting the other person to have a life filled with just enough good things to sustain them," he continued and then turning toward me he shared the following as if he were reciting it from memory: I wish you enough sun to keep your attitude bright. I wish you enough rain to appreciate the sun more. I wish you enough happiness to keep your spirit alive. I wish you enough pain so that the smallest joys in life appear much bigger. I wish you enough gain to satisfy your wanting. I wish you enough loss to appreciate all that you possess. I wish enough "Hello's" to get you through the final "Goodbye. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 8:06pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
crazykid thats interesting. Is it original? |
Re: Poetry Contest by mukina2: 8:20pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Mama why? Mama why did you have to leave me all alone? When I was on the shores of adulthood Why didn’t you wait so I could make you proud Sitting here remembering all the days I made you cry,smile and played silly games on you Remember how you used to scold me when I was wrong Applauded me when I was right Sing for me when I was down Laugh at me when I was also tricked I wake up each morning hoping to hear you call me Glance at my phone every minute waiting . . . . . Mama I cant believe that you are gone People tell me to learn to cope with it How can they say that? Don’t they know that I miss you so much I cried myself to sleep for days after you left I stopped eating,couldn’t sleep, I stopped talking altogether Instead I let my fingers do the talking for me on the computer I am afraid to open to mouth cuz all that comes out is Mama why to no one but you I love you miyonta and I will always do, ok guys this is not for the competition but for the Queen of my heart |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 8:31pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
mukina girl, very very lovely. good one. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:02pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Like I said earlier, i don't think i'm fit to judge "Madre", "Deja vu" and "Nilla". somegirl, chiluv and mukina help, Anyways my comments. "Nilla" ofcourse we know i already like it and have already over commented. "Madre" But her eyes seem focused, dirty and focused.And we all wonder where is Nigeria going. whats our future going to be like. She is dirty, she must smell. But she's in my arms smelly or not.thats just it, Nigeria needs to be quenched of her thirst. thirst for good. thirst for the will to move forward. those were the parts i really really liked. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:07pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
"Deja Vu" 'Deja Vu' Your poem lived up to your title. I must say i prefered the first and last paragraphs, and thats just because I'm more of a hidden meanings person. Would have loved it much more if the middle paragraphs weren't so obvious. But it is a good one. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 9:09pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
*Applauds* Good going, judge. Perhaps we shall together analyse all the poems starting from page 1. What say ye? Still thinking of Nilla. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:12pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: we can analyze all of that if you want to. I've got time on my hands. why are you thinking of me. Meanwhile i sent you an offline. dont you use your msn? |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 9:16pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Poem: Toni Author: Franc1982 " Toni " Shall we begin? *You sent me an offline? I've been online all day on my msn. Perhaps you should let me contact you?* |
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