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| Please, Critique My Poem by spizzlenik(m): 3:40am On Oct 25, 2009 |
I write mostly short poems. here is one for y'all HEARTBREAK Beautiful lashes Someone pondering Awesome beauty Emotion clashes Love wandering Something building Money splashes Heart thundering Love budding Stale bashes Nothing gathering Everything breaking Ugly gashes Dull blundering Heart broken |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by gbolahanh: 6:26pm On Oct 25, 2009 |
cute. |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by POSAKOSA1(m): 10:13pm On Oct 25, 2009 |
nice. I like |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by spizzlenik(m): 10:17pm On Oct 25, 2009 |
gbolahanh: POSAKOSA1: thanks |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by bluespice(f): 4:23am On Oct 27, 2009 |
i'm not sure how i feel about this  |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by daylight03: 5:25pm On Jan 22, 2010 |
This is very concise and yet captures the whole story of a relationship, beauty and money can never be a good basis for a lasting relationship right? |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by Dimka76(m): 6:58am On Apr 03, 2010 |
I don't know if it qualifies to be called a poem. More like a collection of phrases. It should flow, not leap from thought to thought. |
| Re: Please, Critique My Poem by Enddysun(f): 11:01am On Sep 28, 2011 |
Yes. It doesnt qualify 2 be calld a poem at least 2 me too nd to think i was d only one dat saw it dat way. Dough am not an expert but it did nt pierce my heart. A good poem should work on our emotion. Ar u a poet? |
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