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Liz
When I got back, the room was suspiciously quiet. Mille was asleep while Brian and Liam were acting strange.
“Why are you both acting so cold?” I questioned with one hand on my hip.
“Nothing. We’re okay.” Brian answered.
“Liam?”
“Your brother just told you. We’re just a bit tired and worried.” He replied but his eyes were telling a different story entirely.
“You taught the kids that lying is a sin and…”
“I better go check on Elliot.” Brian excused himself.
“William what is going on?”
“Sweetheart, you’ve already heard…”
“The truth.” I narrowed my eyes at him .
He took a deep breath. “Mille knows that he’s gone.”
“What?!”
“Liz, it’s not what you think.”
“What do you mean it’s not what I think? I knew I shouldn’t have left her side. I’m sure it’s that brother of mine who opened his wide mouth once again. How could both of you do this to me?”
“Darling wait…”
“I’ll listen to you once I pull off Brian’s ears.” I turned to leave but he gripped my wrist.
“We didn’t tell her, she knew already.”
My knees went weak instantly. “She…she…knew?”
“I think she actually saw it happen.”
“Oh no, please it’s not true. Did she tell you that?”
“She didn’t say anything after that. She cried herself to sleep.”
“My God! Liam why is life like this? When her mother died, it was hell. I don’t know if she’ll be able to make it through this kind of shock.”
He patted my hands. “She’ll be fine, darling, she’ll be fine.”
I sat beside her all day. When she woke up, she ate very little and cried more, no amount of consoling seemed to work for her. She continued that way for days and days. She cried the most on the day that was supposed to be her wedding day. We couldn’t leave the hospital because her health was deteriorating.
Elliot came to her room in a wheelchair once in a while, he kept pleading for her forgiveness.None of us understood why because they never told us what happened that night. She never spoke to anyone. She would just stare at nothing in particular so we were surprised when she spoke about a week and some days after the incident.
“I want to go home mummy.” She said.
“Sweetheart but you …”
“Tell the doctor I’ll die if I stay here any longer. I want to go home.”
Fear gripped me. I left to talk to the family doctor. He was reluctant to let her go at first but he later give in. He assured me that he would come over from time to time to check on her. He felt so much pity for her. He said he would discharge her the following evening.
“Baby, you’ll leave tomorrow.” I smoothened her hair.
“Thank you mum. I could die here.”
“Shh, don’t talk about lying my love.”
“I want to see him before I go.”
“See who?” Jason moved closer to the bed.
“Niel.”
“Baby, I don’t know if that’s a good idea. You know you’re not feeling well.”
“Aunt’s right, Mille. I don’t think I approve of it.”
“Approve?” She scoffed.
“Watch your words Jay, she’s fragile.”
“Mille, I’m sorry but I still stand with Aunt.”
“Nobody’s stopping me from seeing Niel, mum, nobody.”
“We know you want to see him dear but it’s not good for you. Your health will get worse.”

“Then so be it. I want it to get worse, I want to die mummy. I can’t take this anymore. First,mum and now, Niel. Why me?” She broke down again, weeping loudly.
“Oh sweetheart, please don’t say that. You want to die and leave your father and all of us broken? You’ll see Niel again someday. I promise you that.”
She jerked away from me. “Don’t promise me anything, mum promised me so many things and yet she was taken from me, same happened with Niel. Why didn’t they shoot me? Why him? Why didn’t an angel appear and stop them? Why mum, why? They took my joy, how could they be so cruel?” She yelled. Gloria and Kara came in to console her but she just kept crying. She cried till there were no tears to shed anymore. She leaned on me and I patted her quietly till her sobs reduced to hiccups. The atmosphere in the room was beyond sorrowful.
“Mummy, please take me to him.”
“That will be tomorrow dear. I need to speak to those in charge. Brian can you do that for me?”
“Sure, excuse me.” He replied.
“Thank you mum.”

Jamille
Night was approaching and my fears increasing. Words cannot describe the pain of losing a loved one, not just any loved one but my fiancée. I wish there was something I could do better than crying. I felt like climbing the tallest mountain and screaming to the world that my Niel was taken away unjustly.
In the day and night, I always heard his voice around me. I was somewhere near insanity. I wanted him to come back to me. I heard his deep voice and laughter. I saw his face all around me. Elliot made my predicament worse each time he came to my room. I would close my eyes and wish he could transform to Niel just for a few seconds but when I opened my eyes, it was still Elliot. I prayed for death to come for me too but death went on leave.
No one could understand the hell I was going through. I needed to see his body once again. I didn’t care if they thought I was crazy. I just want to feel my knight once more. I never thought I would face this type of heartbreak. This heartbreak hurt a lot, it felt like not just a part, but the whole of me had gone away with him. Patiently, I waited for night to pass and a new day to break so I could go and see the remains of the one who took my heart away.
“I slept off baby, I’m so sorry.” Mum apologized as she woke up,distracting me from the thoughts of Niel.
“Good morning mum.”
“Good morning sweetheart. Did you get any sleep?”
“Mummy, I want to see Niel.”
I could see the sadness sweep through her features but I wasn’t so interested.
“Baby are you sure of this?”
“Yes mummy.”
“Fine, we’ll get ready and go.”
Indeed, we got ready and in a few hours I was on my way to see Niel, supporting my weight on Jason. He asked to come along, Kara, Rachel, Gloria, Elliot and aunt Charis came too. His body had been brought out already. Yes, I saw what I went there to see. The body of the one I would forever love as cold as death itself. He looked so calm and peaceful laying there. I stared at the body for a long while and everyone who came along stared at me in turn, waiting to see my reaction. At long last, the tears came gliding slowly down my now bony cheeks. I cried, not the loud cry that left me with headaches but a gentle, soft and painful cry. He was gone. If only, I could take his body with me and stare at it all day, I would have done it.
I dropped a light kiss on his forehead. “I’ve seen enough mum, I’m ready to go.”
She looked at me as if she was expecting me to act a little drama before leaving.
“Hold on sis.” Jason pulled me close to him once again as we turned around to leave.
I halted and turned to the attendant. “He’s the one I love, handle the body with care.”
The middle aged man nodded and I continued on my way.
“Aunt, have you fixed a date for the burial?” I asked aunt Charis.
“No,my daughter. He was your husband to be so I want you to pick a date.”
“Niel wasn’t my husband to be. He is and will always be my husband.”

Update is surely coming today. I just need to finish up today's episode. I'm stepping out for a while so it'll come at night. Thanks for your patience. Horladstar and patotelli, I'm enjoying you both around here since u came aboard. God bless u both for me.
See y'all later

Dessydemmy:
Eva!!1 this is so cruel, you kill Niel. Maka why na? how will Mille survive this now and you want her to end up with Elliot abi? it is well o.

It's not me that did it o. Maybe she'll find happiness with him. I donno o

queenitee:
Eva, on top all the begging, you finally killed my Niel. Thank you o, ose gan

I thought u were tripping for Elliot na

donsanctus4real:
@jane1234f don't b jealous am here to gv u a warm kiss even French kiss... hoping my first lady @Evajael won't b around to witness it

Ha! You people should not spoil me o. I'm an innocent girl abeg

Mynd44, I dont have much to say about him but when I was a guest, I thought he was a god of nairaland. I always wondered why people kept mentioning him left, right and centre.
I've read a piece from him and indeed he's a god of words

Queenitee, she's the queen of nairaland. She can read a thousand stories and remember all. She has always been a pillar of encouragement to me from day one. I love this lady like my own sister.
There's barely a day we don't talk. We've never met but she's like the big sister I never had. She's very pretty too.
She'll kill me for this but I've read one of her write-ups and I must say there's a lot of hidden diamonds in her...lolz
Queenitee darling, thanks for encouraging me and all the other writers here. Literatureland loves you sooo much

Patotelli:
HABA!!!, Una don take comment full the whole space now, eeeehnn pls e don do oo so my Evajel go see space ost the next dope episode... Dear can't wait biko, hapi sunday.
Hope you went today. Sermon na about you o, 'giv Ceaser what is 'CEaser and 'giv to us Nairalandiers wat is Ours,......
#TEAMJAYGLO

Lol abeg till tomao or tuesday

virtuedagirl:
Such a nice piece,though I'm pained that Niel has to die,Mille I can feel your pain just be strong

Thank you dear. Sometimes life just goes that way

crislyn:
Evajael why?? After so many years together.. is this how u do??

Not me o, life can be funny

Jane1234f:
I am very very angry, that's why I have not commented since, I don't know why Evajeal killed Neil

Ouch! Abeg don't be angry with me o

Jane1234f:
I am here, but am jealous ohh...this one you want to kiss Evajeal

Which kiss? Lol...I no dey do abeg

greatface:
I probably would believe you and I do but not totally. How fragile Mille is, her arm, the fact that she is just waking from coma, then the news of her better half gone for good is more than enough to send her the path of her fiance. This explains why we most times keep potential life threatening news far from patients till they are strong enough to handle the feelings/emotions.

Sending love your way Evajeal. Just close your eyes and receive it in your heart.

You have a point though. Awwn thanks

greatface:
If I am to be in Liam and Brian's position, I would have chosing lies (grave lies) over truth just to save Mille from everlasting Amnesia.
I just hope she comes out of this stronger.

Am loving this Evajeal. I will be back to give you a kiss but let me brush first. Or is it clean like this

By The Way, Where Is Jane1234f

Haba when she finds out nko, she will be both angry and torn. Also, remember she knows that if she wasn't dead, it means Niel was killed in her stead. Lying would have been the worst option

cbella:
lolzxx!!!! Do i have to get a dictionary? no vernacular please

Lol iyammi is used in exclaim in Ibibio

Fshalom7:
Keep it up ma'am Evajael,more inspiration and more strenght to ur hand

Thank you but please I'm not a ma'am. I'm a small girl o

Mille:
All of you mentioning me for the past couple of days, there is God o.

Lol. continue with your story. Seems everyone is enjoying it. Cheers

Ohhh we're so sorry Mille. Forgive us all

HORLADSTAR:
U are welcome but to be sincere u gat one of the best story here mehn.lots of kisses fall on u Jor.I REALLY LOVE DIS GREAT WORK FRM A GREAT AND INSPIRING PRETTY SEXY WRITER WHO HAIL FRM A GREAT NATION.KEEP THE GOOD WORK ROLLING MEHN COS I DEY UR BACK LIKE NEVER BEFORE.

Hahahha and you've not seen me before o. Your adjectives aren't me at all. Thanks tho

uchihaclassiq:
nice update

Thank u

donsanctus4real:
lol

me not afraid to die cos of u Evajael

Hehehe we shall see

SurestG:
I've viewed this story severally but just got to read it. I was enjoying every part of the story until Jathnhiel was killed. even though its fiction, his death hurts(my eyes was teary reading that part). Evajael you're such a wonderful writer, more power. My condolences goes to my darling Mille, you've got to be strong.

Thank u SurestG, you're one of those I look up to here

cbella:
Wow thanks mom....

Mille is a strong woman/gurl!!!

Iyammi mom indeed. Please lemme study my medicine and finish then you'll bless me with prince charming and twins

Hantonia:
haa moved wit tears poor mille

Yeah she's really broken

Leesah:
hahahahahahahahahaha u actually got me cbella am waiting for an update but I truthfully wasn't expecting happy ever after for mille and Niel everything was moving too smooth like a fairytale and what evajael did just brought in real life situations.. Awesome evajael I love the twist

Thanks dear

Xteljay:
Evajael why did u kill niel is nt fair o.

Lol I'm sorry

Pynkylypz:
Evajael! Why?

Me sef donno why he had to die.
Eddyella, thanks too and sowi.
Sorry if I havent replied u, the comments get plenty sometimes. If I haven't replied abeg holla me again

HORLADSTAR:
Now is the time to drop something for mai crush jare.

IN DAVIDO VOICE.

Eva baby am loving this ur WRITE-UP.
Ur fans love this ur WRITE-UP.
Ur knowledge no go DRY-UP.
Eva baby am loving this ur TITLE.
Ur knowledge no go FAIL YOU.
Ur ego no go CRUSH YOU.
This ur story too GALLANT.
Nairalanders gather ROUND.
They wan know if you ve come AROUND.
CHAI! O LORD HAVE MERCY.
HOW WILL U FEEL IF AWARD FALL ON YOU LIKE PLENTY.

Awwn thank u.

donsanctus4real:
wow after 24hrs I was able to read from page 1 to page 77... @EvaJael I recommend you for dis wonderful story indeed it doesn't look lyk ur first story..more ink to ur Biro and more mb to ur phone... pls I don't want Neil to die.. pls wit dis bring d family together... @EvaJael I wish to b ur bestie.. ur story ve made me to b a registered member.. due here to read d tradition when sum1 recommend ur story.

Awwn I'm touched. The problem is I have one bestie outside nairaland, a very jealous bestie that can cut person head because of me

swiz123:
I must admit, killing the dude made the story more interesting.Good Storyline shouldn't be predictable.I know most people of y'll already predicted mille,neil happy ever after. Congrats Evajael,you took the story to another level and I hope you pair mille with elliot to make this piece the story of the year.

Thank you. Pairing Elliot and Mille, maybe or maybe not.

cbella:
So this thread is still here, well i promised a new story on my next birthday even when i knew my next birthday would take years to come.


Well, that story has been ready long ago, it went through a lot of Ctrl and D then Shift and the Recycle bin until i almost decided not to release it. i'm still in the phase.

The bottom line is we could start any moment from this year



Pearl05, thanks( don't come and launch next)

EvaJael, thanks for the go ahead (you understand)

Gloryejims, lets get ready to roll

Pinkfeet, "yellofeet", hope you are ready.

Purple25, my personal personal person!!!!!! i can't forget love and snake tho.

Deejah, so you still haven't started that story.

Sure I understand. I cant wait for your birthday

pearl009:
Evajael kilo Sele gangan?... This is the 5th time am visiting here today, I beg na

Sorry for the wait. I should have posted since afternoon but I was rushing off to somewhere

Liz
The minutes of waiting soon turned into hours. I sent Kara and Rachel home with the two sleeping children. I tried to make Charis and Liam go too but they wouldn’t budge. I didn’t even bother asking Brian to leave because I knew he wouldn’t move a muscle.
My whole body was tired, my mind was too. I didn’t quite understand why life would keep throwing stones my way.
“Sweetheart, what’s running through your mind?”
I hesitated a bit.
“Don’t even try saying you’re only worried about Mille and Elliot because I can see there’s more to it.”
“A thought crossed my mind.” I paused.
“Go on darling.”
“Do you think God let this tragedy fall on Mille to punish me for the life I once lived?”
“My goodness! Where did that come from?”
“I don’t see any other reason why she should suffer like this. Even if she’s done a couple of wrong things in her life, she’s not a bad person. I think she’s the sweetest girl I’ve ever known.” The tears came again.
“I think the same goes for you too, darling. You may have done a couple of wrong things in the past but you’re not a bad person. You’re the sweetest woman I’ve ever known. I don’t think God is punishing Mille because of you. He had a reason for taking Jathniel and if he pleases, he’ll tell us that reason here on earth but you know he could still decide to tell us why when we get to heaven. So don’t torture yourself wifey.” He pulled me closer to himself.
“Thank you Liam.”
“Mille and Elliot will be fine. I’m sure of it.”
I nodded a response. I saw two doctors walking towards us. I searched their faces for something I could hold on to but they maintained a blank look. We all rose to our feet at the sight of them.
“We apologise for taking longer than we informed you. The truth is that we almost lost the gentleman but I’m pleased to tell you that for now, they are both doing fine.”
I think everyone in the room released their breaths simultaneously. I sat down and buried my face in my palms, rendering my silent thanksgiving to God.
“We still need to watch the knee of the gentleman really well. The shot he got to his knee must have been from a super trained hand.”
“Doctor, when can we see them?” Brian asked.
“You can see them just as soon as they are taken to their rooms. They should be awake by tomorrow.”
“ I suggest you all go have some rest after you see them. We wouldn’t want to admit a whole family please. It’s almost midnight” The other doctor spoke up with genuine concern in his eyes.
“Thank you doctors. We appreciate your help. May God bless you for us.” I said to them.
“Glad to be of service ma’am. Excuse us.” The second doctor replied. After some minutes, they were wheeled out of the operating room to their respective rooms. Luckily, the rooms were just opposite each other so we didn’t have to cross country to visit the next person.
I forced Charis, Brian and Liam to go home while Jason, Gloria and I stayed on.
“Don’t take Charis to her house please. She just lost a son and the other isn’t awake yet.” I told Liam.
“I know. She’ll sleep over tonight then I’ll take her there tomorrow to freshen up before we come back. Take care okay? We’ll come as early as we can.”
“Thank you darling.”
“I’ll call at intervals. If anything comes up, let me know.”
“Yes dear.” I escorted them outside before going back to Mille’s room.
“Aunt, let me check on Gloria since you’re here.” He got up as soon as I walked in.
“Okay son.” For the remaining part of the night, Jason moved between the two rooms. I also went to check on Elliot a couple of times. Sleep was very far from my eyes. I spent time looking at Mille’s gentle sleeping face. More than once, I checked her pulse to be sure my baby was still alive. I couldn’t close my eyes for one minute because I feared she would die on me. It felt as if her being alive depended on me staying awake to watch her.
Daybreak met us still afraid, hanging on to a loose thread of hope. Everyone came back around 7 am. They all looked horrible except the kids. They didn’t understand the gravity of what was going on and for a while, I envied the peace they had. Only me, Brian and Kara were in the room when Mille opened her eyes. The others were with Elliot who was still unconscious.
“Mille? My baby.” I called to her softly as she turned her head to face me.
The doctor came in at that moment.
“She’s awake doctor.”
He smiled as he greeted us and walked to her side to inspect her arm. He examined quietly for some minutes. “How are you feeling Miss?” He asked.
“Arm.” She replied weakly.
“We performed surgery on you to remove the bullet that lodged in your arm so you’ll be feeling pains there for a while okay?”
She nodded in understanding.
“You’ll be fine, trust me.” He smiled and exited the room. Kara dashed out and came back with Rachel and the rest.
“How are you feeling sweetheart?” I asked.
She scanned all the expectant faces awaiting her reply. “My arm aches and I’m weak, very weak.”
“I’m sorry sugar.” Everyone was all over her, pretending their ‘sorry’ was for the bullet wound, leaving the main reason untouched. I saw Charis slip out of the room, I was guessing she couldn’t hold back the tears. She couldn’t say much, she only managed a smile that bore pain and sorrow. After a while, I decided to go freshen up and bring some food for them. Jason and Gloria accompanied me. We stopped at Gloria’s so she would get some things before we moved on to my house.

Liam
Brian and I sat beside Mille quietly. I would have loved to engage her in a conversation so that the worried expression would leave her face but she obviously didn’t want any conversation. Rachel was seated on the other side of the bed.
“He’s awake.” Kara burst into the room.
“Oh thank God.” Rachel said as she stood up to follow Kara out of the room again.
“Tell him I’m fine.” Mille spoke up, loud enough for them to hear. They halted in their tracks for a minute.
“Okay, I will.” Kara finally replied and they stepped out.
“Won’t both of you talk to me?” She questioned.
“I… erm…we…” Brian was stuttering badly.
“We just want you to know that we love you Mille and we’ll always be here for you as long as God keeps us alive.” I came to his rescue. The words were so heavy but they eventually came out.
Her expression became more sorrowful and I wished I didn’t say anything at all or I had stuttered like Brian.
“He’s gone, isn’t he?”
None of us could find the courage to raise our heads.
“I can feel it. He’s gone with my whole heart.” Her voice broke as she let down the tears.

Shewrites writes in simple words. It's very easy to relate to all her works. More grease to your elbow ma'am

Creeza:
Congrats Evajael. You just graduated to that zone where 'readers will HATE to Love you' But ' love to HATE YOU, for killing a favorite character.

We've all been there..

Then again...oh she is staring at me to know if Im overwhelmed . CONGRATS! I AM . But dont smile too much, lemme tell you something.

I'm guessing you havent been shot in the arm before( God forbid, neither me!) but that part where mille was shot on the arm, you made it look flat.. Like you dont care.
The character just experienced something painful. Yes show her reaction.
Emotions! Darn, A gunshot will really hurt she is human na.
The unusual feeling alone should be heart wrenching...

The agony, the travails and pumping-adrenaline for survival.

Trust me a bullet is not a piece of cake.
Nice update dear. Im still here.

Just a rough review. Creeza may be Creasy but Not crazy.

THANK u.

Whew! That was quite a review and I can assure u I agree with every word. You're right about Mille's bullet. I must admit I was in a hurry to update so I forgot about her emotions.
Thank u Creeza. Your review was timely and helpful

greatface:
Hey Guys, Just Chill. I am just coming out of closed door meeting with Evajeal and she assured me that just as she killed Niel, so will she resurrect him because Mille can't cope without him. Maybe Liar Muhammed type of promise.

Thankfully, Elliot lives.

And for those shouting @GloJay, no, it is @JayRac.

But more importantly, for those fighting Hadampson over Evajeal, I will let you fight and kill yourselves then I take my Eva home in peace. @EvaGreat will then be trending. Hope am saying your mind Evajeal?

Lol. You have a nice battle strategy there. I hope you won't beat me for killing Niel

bilirayz:
Am in a pool of tears right now seriously but
I still want some romance to console my self.So team@Glojay. More dearie

Sowi dear. I've been weeping too

yewande1234:
Evajael i think i will sue u

Abeg o, no money for lawyer