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chuddyot:
Attuned to words


Believe me when I say am done doing favours for people. Abraka-da-brah after this I guess I can then change your mind, amazing as a feeling, wonderful as a feeling,great as a feeling,i pray it would be glorious like a. Feeling.
I never. Intended to hit you hard!!! Now we approaching year 3000 the year we all fear God would be alive...
Move it am not on that do it later shit anymore, i guess procrastination is my weakness! Woe trying to live my life not to disrespect church people opinions but I guess my WORD ain't lyrical enough just at the end Right before I met you... an epitome of creation, admired by creator, enthusiastic beauty... oh how I wish to love you every now and then MY DEAR PEN.
I would admit it I would it my hands ain't soothing until I discovered you-WORD.
Nobody really liked us except for us-WORD.
Am so addicted to this-WORD.
If I had to do this again I had start with you-WORD.
I could go on and on an on-WORD
Am going onnnn-WORD
The nice times we had still haunt me-WORD
Am not a man I can do this on my own-WORD
Am now a man I cannot do this on my own-WORD
Now we. Blowing up she's telling she needs the whole thing-WORD
At that point in my life I appreciate honessty-WORD
I could go on and on and on-WORD
Bleep it am going on-WORD
Am so ATTUNED to YOU-words

miclez:
Surely you aren't going to just cut me off, are you?

miclez:
Surely you aren't going to just cut me off, are you?

miclez:
Gracile I'm following your work

TheAgba:
It's a cool piece .

Although , you painted a picture in the end that's different from the picture you painted in the beginning. It's not OK to me .

This is the message I got

Stanza 1 : About being amongst poets who also writes .

Stanza 2 : Using of your skills in the work of poetry

Stanza 3 : Here comes the question starting from even stanza 2. What are you to tell ?
What's the bouncing baby ?

Thanks

mazado:
First off, you've got the "literary flair", obviously. And bravery, for putting your write up in the public space but it also shows naivety. Naive in the sense that anyone can "steal" your work here and claim ownership. I could be wrong though, because this may just be a casual, fun catching adventure to you and you have no plans of turning it into a financially viable endeavour.
Now, instead of pouring out all your thoughts and emotions here, be selective of what you post here. The bulk of it should always be emailed out to one or two people whom you feel can appreciate and critique your work, a sort of mentoring, editing etc. For instance, you could begin by exchanging email addresses with the fellow who has graciously agreed to work with you here; every once a while you email him a piece or two to read.
Besides, every time the writing fever or inspiration comes upon you, don't worry about spelling, punctuation, choice of words, structure etc, just allow your thoughts and feelings to flow. Editing and corrections come much later when you are relaxed and not in a hurry to get something off your mind.
Someone once said that to a writer, the best critic is him/herself. Never be satisfied with your work rate or the quality of your output. And never expect motivation from everyone, if it comes, accept it and enjoy it. Your motivation should come from inside you, from nature, from God.
Best wishes always.

TheAgba:
Sure it has been . Hope you are cool ?

TheAgba:
It is "mien" ,it ain't a typo .

"Plastic smile " is just to say the smile is a fake one.
"Made of rubber" is to say the smile is flexible and of any rubber attribute . Also it's seductive, so could rob a man's heart .


What do you think ?

TheAgba:
Ladies Of Babylon
White turned black Eyes shut down Like a switch was off
Darkness fled Consciousness adjusted The earth yet spins
Plastic smiles Made of rubber Robbed man's engine
Called by its name; Lively unconsciousness Devil also's loved
Wrinkled mien Portraying innocence Stereotype of'em all
Samson already died Next in queue, Hitler of your own
After World War 3 Believe again Be robbed again
Dimples at first sight Pimples at last fight The ladies of Babylon
~Agba Sixtus ©2015
Cc gracile

TheAgba:
I sure will . You be the one to tell me how we can go about it .

TheAgba:
You should know I am also a learner like you . I can share ideas with you and possibly also receive from you,but tutoring ? I don't think so .
It's a yes ,but it's not tutoring oh . I never sabi reach that level . lols

TheAgba:
Here is this little ditty I wrote yesterday as a friend was in your shoes too. But it isn't about poetry but a work of it .


I Am

I am the beginning of my end
The end of my beginning
I am my own loneliness
The island in the desert
I am the sixth of the six
The difference from the many
I am the god of my choices
The love of my life
I am the sweetness in my distress
The love of many lives
I am the creator of my destiny
The role model of orators
I am a Moses to my people
The activist of the mute
I am my own story
The reality to the listener
I am my influential power
The one in my tongue