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LarrySun..Wow..I'm speechless

That necklace will surely be a huge problem

one update isn't enough ooooooooo

Larrysun and suspense... A very good piece..Now the story just started...

Been a while... What a wonderful update

Real awkward...Now i know David and his dad's intentions.They are after rhoda's position....Sometimes when i'm trying to understand a person's motives,i play a little game.....I assume the worst...

There is only one suspect here that wears Okrika..And that's Souloho19...Na im dey Twist the story...

Fiyah..Fiyahhhhhhhhhhhh...Superb work...More Grace..

Apollo apollo apollo apollo apollo apollo apollo apollo apollo......

Abeg oo who help me see Fiyah?...I'm hungry na..

Nmaglit:
i concur with u

Seconded

vivienD:
Why do i feel David is after Rhoda's money,that is why he wants to do anything to get bk her position.. And i think peter is always going to see his mum.. Nice one madam fiyah

I was thinking same thing..I don't trust David a bit..Why would he get angry because Rhoda didn't tell him about her step bro?



i concur with u[/quote]Seconded

Hope i'm not late...Nice piece fiyah..where the bartender dey? I need ice cold....

souloho19:
Lols..thanks boss, u're too much. I'm currently on the road travelling back to ppa(ebonyi)
I'd try and update bro

Journey Mercies bro..We will be waiting patiently for you..God will guide you through..

Now i know why it's titled,"Unites In Betrayal"
They all betrayed claire,there is only one person left....#PHIL

souloho19:
Lol...greetings boss..food is ready pardon the lack of spices tho and the ration

Spices kwa?whatever a father gives his child,his child appreciates..Ration ogini??Even if you give us raw,we will thank you..Souloho19,you are mouthed..God bless you sir..

souloho19:
Lol...greetings boss..food is ready pardon the lack of spices tho and the ration

Spices kwa?whatever a father gives his child,his child appreciates..Ration ogini??Even if you give us raw,we will thank you..Souloho19,you are mouthed..God bless you sir..

Abeg,na who helep me see souloho19...I don dey find am since make he con give us food...Abi Make i go meet BaBa ma he helep us do small shoutout for am?

I'm damn sure stevenso n is not the devil...he has some dirty secrets hes keeping but he's definitely not the devil....souloho19,abeg no stop here na..why you con dey punish persin?

Wow...Magnificient..More grace to you Apollo

More...more...more...more

zelaws:
I think the Muk-Anolis fight reading the minds of their opponents.

I think you're right..they need to fight without any emotion and make their minds blank

Now...This is where the war begins..i hope the fight will be long enough..

Karma is here at last...Karma always has its way of catching up on people... Now someone will say Kelvin is a bad friend oo..

Stevenson is a suspect for now...But why use P.O as his initials ..I guess he's hiding something...

Wow wow wow wow...This story is getting more intense...the killer now knows that what he is looking for is with ezinne..Who dies next Souloho19 souloho19 souloho19,you are awesome...

Apollux:
Lol, your points are valid and all these are weaknesses in the story I took note of.
Anyway, I wanted this to be a short story, it's actually a spin off from a much larger story.
Well as for the suspense, the story has a little too much suspense that can't all be covered here.
As for the characters, I have bigger roles for them, I wanted my readers to get a lot more feel for them, their strengths and weaknesses, get to like them too. While I can't allow any of them to be really hurt or killed at the moment (this is not A GAME OF THRONES after all) is, I created these characters knowing the extent of their powers , skills and abilities. Nothing they have faced yet have really challenged them very well, but soon they will meet their match. ( also note that Ruel while picking this team, didn't do that carelessly, he had an idea what the problems are about obtaining what he wants and took his time to select highly skilled people that have the best chance of achieving his goals.)
Stick around, a whole lot is about to happen in a short while and I guarantee you, the results will surprise you (if not shock you, that is) .

I trust you,you won't dissapoint me..And please,lets know how frequent you will update...Ghemmaria canticles should be brought here ooo

You're a very good writer...Your works are really awesome..But think the way you're trying to portray the characters,they are very good and can't be defeated..I think that should not be so..

About the leech, i think you should have allowed it to really hurt one of them..And the fight ended too soon.they ought to fight it for like 17 minutes before the sorcerer can remember how it can be defeated..

And lastly i think the story is just full of actions..it should be filled with suspense..with little romance at least..

EVEYTHING I POINTED OUT IS JUST MY OPINION OOO..SHALOM