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Kk,thanks for advice *noted*[quote author=Mynd_44]Watch the punctuations and please spell your words out fully. Other than that, great stuff[/quote]

Is it getting better[quote author=Mynd_44]Hmmm[/quote]

At the first crow of the cock,the priestess set off to the house of femi,as she walk through the village the wind that blew accross showed evidently dat it ll bring the rain to visit very soon,it was cold but she was far from feeling cold,what she had seen and what was about to happen made her blood boil,she ll try hard to stop it.
She was lost in thought dat she did not notice neither did she hear de greetings of the hunters and farmers and they were scared cos de priestess always responded to their greetings,whatever it was that on her mind might be very serious.
As she walked on the birds could he heard chattering and singing praises to their maker,but she had too much on her mind to appreciate it.When she got to Femi's doorstep,she said in a loud voice,
I came this early morning not for a visit,but to warn you to keep off the woman that lies on ur bed cos she belongs to the gods,what u plan in ur head ll bring sorrow not only to her but to all of us in dis village,the gods has spoken to her she shall regain her speech,but be careful what u do,cos ur love and passion ll bring nothing but calamity to all of us.the gods has spoken,let him hear he who has ears.
So what i'm i to do,he asked.
I know not i only say what i ve been sent to say,nw ur fate,datof woman who lies in ur room and de entire village lies in ur hands.u ve been warned.
She walked away briskly and Femi was left confused standing rooted to where he stood as he watch her disappear.He must take the princess back to her father,when he entered the princess had left using de back door.
It was better this way but he was still confused,as he thought hard the cock crowed again and the darkness the other night had brought slowly began to rise and the wind that was blowing had become very strong but in it walked princess of Yomiland thinking about what the priestess had said and also feeling dejected.

The priestess of Yomiland was a very petite woman de flesh on her body was very dry and wrinkly like all water has been squeezed out of her and years had not dealt leniently with her either,walking through de evil forest for so many months and going on for days without food,what else would u expect.but she was de eyes and ears of the gods and was respected in Yomiland and de neighbouring villages becos she alwz says exactly what she saw and spoke exactly what she heard.
But she has not alwz been lyk dis,all wrinkly and dried up,she was not born a priestess,but de gods loved her,she had alwz been their favourite.her parents were poor farmers who could barely feed themselves a three square meal but all that changed when she wa born,she came with so much luck but she herself was unlucky in life.
She married at de age of fifteen,den a very beautiful and vibrate young woman to the richest man in de village who already had three wives.Although she never lyked de man who were u to oppose ur parents back den and if there was happiness in marriage she never knew what it was.she was maltreated in her own home by de husband and was alwz sent back anytime she run back to her parents.she never knew hw it felt to carry a baby and her sorrows never seemed to end but gods had seen her woes and had already chosen her as their mouth piece.
She went to de farm oneday,never to return to her matrimonial home for she kidnapped by dwarfts into de deepest forest where it was forbidden to go where she was trained not only as de mouth piece of de gods but also to be able to cure with herbs,herbs dat she has never seen before .After soo many years when ppl had presumed her dead and brokenheartedness had taken her parents to de land of the ancestors she resurface,but she had changed a great deal.
For her hair was locked in dreads and her beauty had faded,but she was now de chosen one,de eyes of gods.at first de villagers were scared of her,thinking she was a ghost but dat changed when a young man who had been struck with a terrible skin disease was healed by her.she later begun to see and explain things dat could not be even explained by de wisest once in de land and gradually she had gain de trust,love and admiration by her ppl.
But dis this night what she was seeing was not good,she had to warn de hunter to thread catiously cos what she was seeing if it came to pass could be very disastrous not only to him but de entire village,she had to warn him fast.
I ll go to house first thing tomorrow morning,she said to herself.This must not happen,it should never happen.

I ll try to change de direction,dats my aim

omidhe: Am an aspiring author, you v got to still learn how to write , am doing same to . U r not building suspense, I can tell where ur story is going . U choose to write about everyday thing , ur suspense shud make it new . Learn more

Thanks soo much,i apreciate[quote author=Mynd_44]I will mail you[/quote]

Lyk hw,what scandals,i dont want de story to be too predictable[quote author=Mynd_44]Do some character development.....go back to their past and write stuff on what made them turn out the way they are.....introduce some scandals too.[/quote]

Thanks,but thinking of ways to increase de suspense[quote author=Mynd_44]This is some nice stuff here[/quote]

Thanks

natkel1: Sad! Tearz! Wonderful

Femi got home feeling very excited but he could not ignore de pain in his groin,hw could he forgot her,the scent of her perfume had made him want her and those firm bossoms could drive any man crazy,her skin felt very smooth to touch,is it love or passion i'm feeling,he asked himself.
I ll meet Fumi tomorrow,just her guts turns me on.i really want her he said to himself.
But things were not going to rosy and he knew it.he was a common hunter and she was de princess of the land,the eyes of the king but he was determined to go on this journey and the idea of it not been achievable even made him more determined.

Meanwhile,Fumi was struggling with sleep,tossing and turning,thinking what she can do to prevent this marriage.runaway,to where,and leave her daddy behind,no she could not bear it.it was not a good idea.
She thought hard,get pregnant,dat was de only solution,but with who,just who?
She picked a cloth and covered her unclothedness,rushed off,to where?she knew not,but she run with wind,her speed like dat of de cheetah,and her mind clouded with thoughts not knowing if her decision was right.she kept on running till she got to de river where she stopped for breath.she walked straight to de river and went in straight.
But what she saw frozed de blood flowing through her veins.what eyes could not see,and mouth cannot explain.
She tried to shout for help but her voice was gone,she tried again but she couldnot hear voice,she broke down in tears,what was dat she saw that made her lose her voice.hw can she explain dis to de priest when her voice was gone,hw ll she knw what she saw.
She cried her heart and did not when sleep came,for she woke in de bed of the man she nearly lost her pride to.