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Broken, Not Shattered... A Short Story. / Shattered Dream (episode 1) / Unveiling The Truth(shattered Heart) - By Olarhtunji (2) (3) (4)
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Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 12:48am On Dec 06, 2015 |
MZnelly all that very detailed office noon delight actually took place in your head. Mehn am loving your imagination. 2 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Shattered Glass by saraphina(f): 10:38am On Dec 06, 2015 |
Cutehector:hw did u no z me? |
Re: Shattered Glass by HelenBee(f): 8:20pm On Dec 06, 2015 |
Cutehector:Hmm 1 Like |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 8:27pm On Dec 06, 2015 |
Your story can be tagged as a very nice one, the story line is awesome and as well as very captivating, some parts of the story can actually create a tear or two in the eye of the reader, its really nice that your added some picture illustrations and that is a plus for you, I can never forget to speak about the Nigerian humour and sarcasm in the story that was one of the reasons that kept me glued. Although your story is nice but there are some areas that are actually not worth being mentioned, first of all I must complain about your mechanical accuracy, you type as though you are an amateur when it comes to writing especially when it comes to conversations, your conversations always makes me feel lost, as well I must speak concerning the way you express the feelings of your character, they do not portray the fire that would make the reader place himself in the situation and feel the way the character feels, another thing is lack of suspense: though the story is captivating but their is little or no suspense in a lot of scenes which is really bad, in conclusion I must say this, although you have a nice story but it does mot have what it takes to be made a blockbuster movie. I give this chapter a 3/5 star rating. 5 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 11:20pm On Dec 06, 2015 |
lordseb: Thanks a lot. 2 Likes |
Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 5:49am On Dec 07, 2015 |
HelenBee:any problem? |
Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 6:11am On Dec 07, 2015 |
saraphina:ur pic duuuh |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 1:00am On Dec 09, 2015 |
Mznelly you open the fridge and put the elephant in it. |
Re: Shattered Glass by oscarlloyd(m): 9:00am On Dec 10, 2015 |
That office romance tho, reading with serious imagination in this hamattan... Chai, I wish I have a sure bae |
Re: Shattered Glass by Norenal(f): 1:49pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
n finally @Mznelly came back to my story.... thanks Ma'am missed dz so much, waiting 4 d next update tho |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 5:39pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Mznelly i got ur mention on your diary, am a lil bit surprised tho. U sure sey na me u wan mention? Cos I really doubt that you have heard me speaking. |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 7:16pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan: I have, actually. You sound like a typical Warri boy |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 7:18pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 7:28pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 8:45pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 9:00pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan: Lol, I'm serious |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 9:44pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 10:00pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan: No |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 10:22pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 11:29pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan: Lol, lead the way first, mister Besides, you should've heard my voice before now |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 11:39pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
MzNelly: lead which way? ...i am busy running my mouth on ur fone saying only God knows what, which way u wan make i lead again kwa? I yaf not heard ur voice, so be nice and do a vn. |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 11:40pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan: Lmao.. So you know you've done a million of these VN's all over Nairaland. Anyways, I'll send it in tomorrow. 1 Like |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 11:43pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
MzNelly: No take style yab me oooo Aite, looking forward to hearing ur voice. 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 11:50pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
MzNelly:send my own voice note too 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 11:52pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 11:53pm On Dec 11, 2015 |
kinglekan:. I knw say u go quote me. Mission accomplished 1 Like |
Re: Shattered Glass by Joizy(f): 11:03am On Dec 15, 2015 |
9ce story mzNelly.patiently w8tin 4 d next update. |
Re: Shattered Glass by kinglekan: 7:24am On Dec 16, 2015 |
Dis Mznelly can like to break her promise oooo |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 3:13pm On Dec 16, 2015 |
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Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 3:38pm On Dec 16, 2015 |
MzNelly:hi.. Weh happend |
Re: Shattered Glass by Nobody: 3:48pm On Dec 16, 2015 |
Cutehector: I'm greeting you |
Re: Shattered Glass by Cutehector(m): 3:52pm On Dec 16, 2015 |
MzNelly:greetings my sister in christ, how is everythn ? |
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