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When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AlPeter: 9:31pm On Jan 09, 2016 |
When the Heart bleeds,,,, and there is no one there,,,,,, when silent cries are made,,,,,, in the depth of the night,,,,, when the soul's desires,,,,,, echoes in the chambers of despair,,,,, then hope arises,,,,, and faith encourages,,,,, but in your eyes only will i see comfort. 5 Likes |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AlPeter: 9:39pm On Jan 09, 2016 |
Joseph1832, theagba,afroxyz, amberacious, flow1759, ayonbobo, ginaz, emulate99, eureka123, Nubian113, scholarincharge...... How do you guys see this it's my first time of putting it in the open |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by joseph1832(m): 10:24pm On Jan 09, 2016 |
You did well. Next time, try and arrange your poem in stanzas and lines... 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by emaculate99: 11:52pm On Jan 09, 2016 |
First of all, I'm Emaculate99. Nice poem. I think Joseph has already said my mind. But let me ask, are you trying to achieve anyhing with that arrangement? 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by Nobody: 1:09am On Jan 10, 2016 |
Love the words but your arrangement is a distraction. Use one coma and it will look more presentable. I'm a newbie and that's poetry 101 for you well done otherwise 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by joseph1832(m): 9:40am On Jan 10, 2016 |
Nubian113:LMFAO!. |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by Qaisar1: 12:57pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
emaculate99:Emulate 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by Nobody: 2:51pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by Ginaz(f): 3:12pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
AlPeter: Its nice dear, thump up 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by emaculate99: 5:10pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
Qaisar1:gay-sir 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by Qaisar1: 5:27pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
emaculate99:lol.. Ema E-mad 1 Like |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by emaculate99: 6:16pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
Qaisar1:.... See this boy ooo! it didn't go well sha! Ema doesn't end with D... |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AlPeter: 6:25pm On Jan 10, 2016 |
Sorry everyone i posted it using my phone which usually doesn't give room for paragraphs, that's why I use the commas. Thanks for your time |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by joseph1832(m): 12:06am On Jan 11, 2016 |
AlPeter:How about I show you how to structure this poem? |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AlPeter: 3:57am On Jan 11, 2016 |
joseph1832:yea i will really love that |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by joseph1832(m): 7:17am On Jan 13, 2016 |
AlPeter:This is it, now the poem is structured in quintain form, that is, five line poetry with a single stanza. NOTE: In the 3rd line I didn't put a full stop because it will make the line run into the 4th line. |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AlPeter: 6:48am On Jan 15, 2016 |
joseph1832:thanks a bunch |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by joseph1832(m): 7:33am On Jan 15, 2016 |
AlPeter:You're very much welcome. |
Re: When The Heart Bleeds (my First Poem Ever) by AmaUwana(f): 11:09pm On Jul 20, 2018 |
Wow.... dis is very nice |
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