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[quote author=Foxy_Ultimate]Ayodele na hero[/quote]Kill Ayodele...
#the end#

HumbledbYGrace: Larry I switched places with Oahray and I was to write chapter Ten!! Don't you try to upset my stomach! If its not chapter ten then count me out! The given date is my birthday. No can do

Lol!
I guess 'Birthdays are not for writing'...
How are U, HBG? Long time.

firestar: -Chewing some tasty radioactive meal-

-waiting for da crew to show-

...firestar! firestar!!
...where have u been?

Ishilove: Nigga, she's a married woman.
D

lol!
I like you too.
If I shd marry everybody I like...King Solomon's harem will be a yard in my empire.

Rap maestro: seconded

Will see what i can do...
This thing should be a full time job but its wont pay the bills that well!

already working on mine and will post before my date is due...maybe Sunday latest.
Read the whole thing the first time yesterday and copied it in word.
Larry had the easiest part i must say and his delivery was good.
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Frank did well but he made Lucan too young (28, IMO) and rather short(5ft6)...i cant add to those! Err, is that ur height?!*pls ignore the question*
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RedMoss was a clown!Guessed he rushed it and didnt read thru. Lines like 'Rubbish old man, thank God say death don catch am' in the narrative are 'offsides' i dont think any officer worth his mettle shd be ruffled and then suspended because his name and number was found near a dead body.
He left us with the Enigmatic Ayodele(300level!, whats that?!) which i think he created on a whim! He was actually stuck...and used the next guy that came into his hostel! I dont like the Name for My killer/psychopath.
To his credit, he established a link btw Ayodele and Lucan...but the Guy fall my hand joor!
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Efemena...i really like you by the way *that aside for now*
Yours was a herculean task and your delivery was good...and lengthy!
Ur delivery was 14pages and the 3 before you combined were 13! You created interesting characters and the network of powerful women. I love the quotes, nice touch. It will be hard keeping that up. Conversations, excellent.
I have a feeling you would av finishd the story if u were writing it alone.
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Mazi!Mazi!!...Ishi and Larry pointed out most things already e.g evidences, full-blown suspect. I like the way u removed Lucan from the scene. Good flow.
Further scrutiny reveal cracks...the case is NOT open and close. Tracy died in his room while he was away; Lucan has an IRON-CLAD alibi. He is a suspect, but they've got nothing on him*but we will continue to work with ur premise* He's a decorated officer and not stew*pid! Wont kill his GF in his own house or drop the sim card in his bin! Circumstantial evidence. He shd be out on bail with a half-baked lawyer...perhaps we will need to consult a lawyer. Zolpidem is a sedative and not a mild antidepressant...no consultation needed there.
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Oahray my guy...u killed me!
I will ignore the HIM. Nice twist. Let Ishi or another person swim with that.
Your lawyer does not know the law...technical, consult before you venture!
...and then u allowed Lucan 'Prison Walk'...was actually expecting a break!
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Good job so far, we will work with what we have.
I think i have found a way to make Larry/Lucan's dream come through or close *btw, why do u all keep mentioning the dream as if its impt?!*
CHAPTER 7
DEJA VU...
Stay tuned!

Ishilove: The jail break: It was too easy. Damn too easy.
Aside this, your work is great. Keep writing darlee, it's in you

God bless you real good!!!!
The guy just walked away...was expecting some classy stunt to break him but lets see where we go from here...

[quote author=Larry-Sun]Are you aware that you're to post next on the collaboration thingy? Please check your date and start preparing. The writer before you has already posted his.

Thanks.[/quote]Thanks Larry,
Will Hurry;
Dont Worry.

Oahray: Critique time... Blessing time! Each time I read it, there is always something to correct. I know there are more. Please help...

Good job as expected!
Are you done? Or u still gonna update later?
Lemme know so i can start...
Will post my critique when am done.

Cuddlemii:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ng8J6wG_-So

Very funny!
Where is everybody? Are we on break or what?

Ishilove: Lol. Once I post, I will unfollow the thread.

Seriously though, I don't claim to be all knowing or perfect for that matter. I but I do lay claim to being thoroughly thorough.

?Obsessive traits...your strength is sometimes ur weakness!

natkel1: My profile:

Name: Natkel Kelvin

Age: 19 soon to be

Appearance: short, small, light, brown eyes, long eyelashes, meduim girly body matters, off black, natural, thick hair.

Marital status: in a relationship

Occupation/ education: B/A socialwork

Parents: both alive, healthy and energetic

Siblings: 4, 2 boys, 3 girls. I'm th third

Childhood: quiet, satisfied and cool

Personality: observant, quiet, reserved, unique

Special skills: sing, write, intelligent, bead

Strength: self drived

Weakness: self pity

Any other detail: sweet, fun, a lil old fashioned, if I believe in smthn or set my mind on smthn, I'm on it till the end

What if i offer u saltychocolate?

natkel1: Names Natkel, I love to read, n write. Iv written a few random poets, but run out of inspiration, hoping this room will help me reach out, capture and dominate that inner poet deep inside me...

...hello Natkel, good to have you here. There is something inside all of us waiting to be expressed...
...
listen.

[quote author=Larry-Sun]The cookie never crumbled. She was only pulling our legs. [/quote]Saw that too...she got me there!
...but we are building a mud house...
I think everybody shd relax!

Oahray: lol... A bet sounds nice. I bet Redmosquito and yellow are operated by the same person. I bet my ******* on it

...And I will add my ******* too.
(whatever that is!)

Ishilove: I am getting really tired of the whole drama so I'm bowing out. Larry, please find a replacement for my slot. I'm sorry.

...'and thats the way the cookie crumble'!

white mosquito: Freud,freud! Oya patewo for u! You sharp die o. So sharp you will soon cut urself,cos i wud like to know wat ur punishment wil be wen u discover we r all diff?.

...feminine content of post= 2%!

*'Babel' comes to mind...*
(Or maybe a novel within a novel)
So will Larry kill Frank's Efe or just change the name to Cynthia?!
Is there more to Efe's reaction or shez just being Frank?
Can HBG be persuaded? Will she express her real fears?
What do the Mosquitoes have in Mynd?
The plot thickens...stay tuned!

white mosquito: Haba, yellow but u know I dont fight.... In the spirit of sportsmanship, if a fight comes, i wouldn want to disappoint. Lolz.........i dont take half of the things I say to hrt, wish oda ppl wud too.

Amusing!
Change yellow's text setting, the style (black bolded) is the same as Reds'...
White is doing well...but needs more 'femnization'!

[quote author=Larry-Sun]You just put a nail in my coffin [/quote]R.I.P

HumbledbYGrace: Pity I don't know Soyinka, do a sister a favour and show her the ropes please. Looks like good criticism comes from nigeria after all.

Really?!
Remind me to send you his books for your next birthday.

SniperInADiaper: "Red[size=16pt]white[/size]Yellow Mosquitoes and Mystkk Iam very apologetic for throwing taundrums at you yesterday"

RedWhyteYhelloMystkk Mosquito...

Oahray: Hmmm...
Ebb and flow...
The chat central saga.

Goodevening guys

welcome..
'time and market come and go'
And so shall we.

esere826: But why would the queenbee be so cruel the 'morning after'
after ensuring that her cookie broke the honeybee into half the 'night before'


not fair

...at least that way, there wont be 'kiss and tell'.

[quote author=Efemena_xy]*** Yawns...***
[/quote]Why do people yawn?
1. Bored
2. Just waking up
3. About to sleep
4. Pissed
5. To get attention
6. Before an impt. Performance
7. Because others did
....which one is yours?

HumbledbYGrace: RedwhiteYellow Mosquitoes and Mystkk Iam very apologetic for throwing taundrums at you yesterday

That's great ....and very big of you.
Now we can move on to others.

[quote author=Mynd_44]I don't burn out bro..... Never[/quote]...will keep it in Mynd.

esere826: Bless you too
You can apply to be the chief usher or choir master

Lai-lai!
Na Snr. Pastor I want...

Cuddlemii: Just a mini advert

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Share the same support you give writers on this section
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Thanks

Sometimes I think you are too 'organised' for your own good!

HumbledbYGrace: hmmmm...interesting. things should get back to normal here, let's all start apologising

u shd start then....
with Redwhiteyellow Moss/Mystkk .

[quote author=Mynd_44]I tire ooo. I just want some Valium and a bed[/quote]Guy, if u need Valium to sleep, there is problem.
Ur chronic insomnia may burn u out...soon u won't be able to write well.