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..... Double update tomorrow guys, savour this

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..... People that can see far should be able to guess what will happen after today's update

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Ohibenemma:
I see, but there's also a danger there. Because of this story, I went back to read the first (sex-ridden) part and I saw lots of such clues.

BUT...

The result wasn't always as potent as prescribed. E.g. You replied a comment with a boast that Madison's coital episode would be NOTHING compared to Bukky's (in the future). I PERSONALLY don't think the latter manifestation actually trumped the former. And I had had some gigantic expectations on account of your boast.

At the end of the day, it is YOUR STORY, your boat to row as you please. And from the feedback, you don't need anyone to tell you you are doing a great job. All things aside, I'm wowed by your attention to little details. You even took us into the world of an average private school teacher (you done do the WERK before?)

Keep up the good work, sire.

.... Lol. Alright, I understand where you are coming from. I will calm down a bit on those so as not to cut your expectations.

... Didn't know you went for the first story too. They are not similar in anyway though but the idea is the same. Thanks for the heads-up and keep the comments coming in. I also appreciate the kind words sir.

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cidcidx:
oya lemme comment, nice story.
I no dey comment for any story but this one sweet me.

... Thanks for coming out bro...

Ohibenemma:
Solomonbrown64, nice job you have been doing. Others before me have aired their views about the Alex character, with the commenter above me even requesting that you 'allow' him fall into one or two temptations... I wouldn't say that exactly. But....

If it isn't deliberate and purpose-driven (only you know where we're going to with this story), I will advise you loosen him up a bit. Right now, he's too uptight, temperamental and mostly rude. If the whole aim is to present him as a no-nonsense person, I think that aim is failing. He's rather beginning to appear haughty, inconsiderate and rash.


Laslas, na your story. Carry am anywhere you want.

NB: Before I forget, I also think you give too much away concerning the way situations might end in your stories. It's like seeing the end from the beginning. That could kill suspense. E.g.

He saw the girl walking towards him and decided she must become his next girlfriend. If only he knew that her boyfriend, only a few metres away, will stab him in the neck for his daring, he might never have said hello...

From the point of their meeting, no matter the twists and turns, the reader will simply be on the lookout for when the boyfriend will stab the guy in the neck. The conversation that will ensue between them suddenly becomes inconsequential; that the girl smiles and exchanges numbers with him won't matter; the reader will simply await that moment when the stabbing prophecy will be fulfilled.

.... I like your comment as I love fair criticism. My style varies depending on the kind of story and genre I write. I feel at home when I write fantasy and supernatural tales more than any other story. It's a pity I can't post my Werewolf story anymore on Nairaland but if you can access it, you will notice the slight difference in style when compared to other stories I have put out.

... I wanted to make this story a bit more conversational along with being a first-person narrative. I want to connect more with my audience because I am actually trying to pass a message or two across with this story. So, it's not your normal fiction tale but I know what I am doing with the subtle clues as you guys have no idea what I intend for the tale. Lol, so I am not really giving out anything, it's just a ploy for suspense.

... Thanks once again for your comment.

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Omittesb:
Well, the main point is that the character Alex is becoming way too uptight, flaring up at little things.. in the beginning of the story, he was fun and easy going.

Solomonbrown64, your indeed a good writer... kindly readjust Alex a little bit, am not saying he should fall for every woman that comes his way o, but he shouldn't be rude all the times and he should be jovial when the need be.

Thanks

.... He is reacting like this because his nature is clashing with his principles especially regarding Mummy Michael. Ms. Anita's own is self explanatory. There is no man that won't lose his temper around such a woman. Ellen's own was deep pain. Cheating is a wound that never fully heals especially when you were faithful.

... Nothing is wrong with Alex, it's just circumstances that is now bringing out his worst side. Nothing to worry about Bro.

... Sorry for the late updates today...

.... Waoh! I am loving these comments here but I won't lie, some of them dey make me weak.

.. A woman undermines you and everyone else she works with because she thinks she is better than everyone else. How will you respond to such a person? By smiling or what?

.... Your destiny's flow was blocked because of a woman and an activity you never carried out. The woman you loved and who you didn't want to sleep with till marriage cheats on you and then later confessed to have been keeping a grudge towards you.

... A woman who you should have stayed away from earlier but your demisexual nature was working against you and made you go against your principles until a slap reset your entire system is now making u-turns towards you. You then remember how you got into this mess in the first place. Honestly, una go still commit?

.... An introvert who is also demisexual might desire sex but cannot get it not because of unavailability of women but because of his nature. Until there is a deep emotional connection, there will be no sex. To make things worse, Oga Alex is still technically a virgin.

.... Abeg, make una dey read between the lines in this story because I dey take style drop clues here and there. Sex will surely enter the story but it's not the major part of it.

.... Thanks for the comments all the same.

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Omittesb:
baba and mummy Michael na bird of the same feathers


thanks for the update

.., You get am .... Dem dey call them modern couples ...

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.... ..... Brother Alex is slowly falling for the oldest trick in the books..... Poco - a - Poco

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izaray:
This mummy Michael self

Alex be very careful oo, make you no go rape person wife one day abeg

..... Lol.... Abi o, in this century wey touching sef na rape

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Omittesb:
Why Alex dey dull na.. see as women line up dey wait make he kpanshi dem lol...


nice update

... Thanks bro. I made a mistake, you might want to read today's update again.

domido:
What promise will you find hard to keep?/ the link between when Mummy Michael came and when you swept your room is not clear, or am I the only one not seeing that clearly?

.... Thanks for pointing that out. I uploaded a page twice. It has been corrected.

..... Sorry about yesterday folks but I was really busy with a lot of stuffs including the Last Wolf Series. The latest installment which was just finished today. If you want a copy for my usual fee, send me a mail.

.... Happy new month folks. You have seen the last month of the year, you will see January of 2020 in Jesus name, Amen.