PING ME!




Remember the days it took long to reach those fellows
And how the days were reduced to hours;
You can get them from the distance on the instance
Technology shrunk space and castrated time

But it has also shrunk something of great value
It genius recreates human features-voices and pictures
It gathers men and flung them like embers from the bellows
Now we talk often and seldom see
Maybe there is no need to see when gadgets can do it all

It has reduced kin's ties and palm affairs
Now it has frozen and muted our voice7
Reduced cherished contacts to symbol and signs
We have stopped visiting,soon to stop talking
We will be unseeable,deaf and dumb to one another

Smileys and symbols are the sounds
on our tongue
Ask why we do not value ourselves
again
Human mental alienation,at snail's
pace Has turned to physical incarceration
It brings us together from far and
wide
But widens the gulf and kills the
essence of our togetherness

From visit me . . . to link me. . . to ring me. . . Now! Ping me! What next will you do to me?! Fing me?! Or ting me?! Or no! Don't sink me. . . But what will stop humanity from sinking further
The joyous abyss of crass earthly senselessness?

Is this a commentary or poetry? I think you have mixed the two. Your content is good, I am not sure about the form though.

maclatunji: Is this a commentary or poetry? I think you have mixed the two. Your content is good, I am not sure about the form though.

Poetry it is

Lol

HumbledbYGrace: Lol

Is it funny?

Well done Damsel!

Tgirl4real: Well done Damsel!

Tanx tgal.
Happy birthday to Tguy,lol. GGMUB

ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY.

breathing: ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY.

Yeah,i wrote the poem hastily because my muse was around to give inspiration. My birthday was 11th june, so you can start saving for next year's STRAWberry

breathing: ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY.

ℓ☺ℓ, strawberry? Ok, thanks for making it cheaper for me!

Sapphiredamsel:


Is it funny?

yes it is,I enjoy puttin my thoughts down on paper,and wen I read ur poem It just reminded me hw much I miss writtin keep u da gud work,u gt sense of humour nd maybe ill be PINGIN u soonest

HumbledbYGrace: yes it is,I enjoy puttin my thoughts down on paper,and wen I read ur poem It just reminded me hw much I miss writtin keep u da gud work,u gt sense of humour nd maybe ill be PINGIN u soonest

I hope i will be pinnging u too

@Sapphiredamsel

It is poetry. I can feel the piece. It appeals to my emotions as much as my intellect.

I was going to point out the absence of punctuation as a failing, but I think it might have made your piece more fun to read.

Ihedinobi: @Sapphiredamsel

It is poetry. I can feel the piece. It appeals to my emotions as much as my intellect.

I was going to point out the absence of punctuation as a failing, but I think it might have made your piece more fun to read.

The lack of punctuation is a ploy on my part. Thanx 4d criticism

Which kain ploy be that Sapphire, write proper English jor.

Sapphiredamsel: From visit me . . . to link me. . . to ring me. . . Now! Ping me! What next will you do to me?! Fing me?! Or ting me?! Or no! Don't sink me. . . But what will stop humanity from sinking further
The joyous abyss of crass earthly senselessness?

I love this part. Love the rhymes and its content. The rhythmic progression from 'visit me' to 'sink me' got me enthralled. Nice piece hon.

Obinoscopy:

I love this part. Love the rhymes and its content. The rhythmic progression from 'visit me' to 'sink me' got me enthralled. Nice piece hon.

Im soo glad you love it. Poetry is capable of saying so much by just saying little. It economizes words and thats one of its aesthetics. Thank you obino.

Sapphiredamsel:


Yeah,i wrote the poem hastily because my muse was around to give inspiration. My birthday was 11th june, so you can start saving for next year's STRAWberry

Wow! You're my birthday mate! That's cool...

chronique:

Wow! You're my birthday mate! That's cool...

you dont mean it?!

Sapphiredamsel:
you dont mean it?!

Serious. I hardly meet pple born on d same day wit me.

chronique:

Serious. I hardly meet pple born on d same day wit me.

Thats true. Im quite humbled. Dont wory, we will celebrate it 2geda

Sapphiredamsel:
Thats true. Im quite humbled. Dont wory, we will celebrate it 2geda

Not a bad idea... Sounds like a plan.