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Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 8:28pm On Aug 23, 2012 |
PING ME! Remember the days it took long to reach those fellows And how the days were reduced to hours; You can get them from the distance on the instance Technology shrunk space and castrated time |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 8:54pm On Aug 23, 2012 |
But it has also shrunk something of great value It genius recreates human features-voices and pictures It gathers men and flung them like embers from the bellows Now we talk often and seldom see Maybe there is no need to see when gadgets can do it all |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 8:58pm On Aug 23, 2012 |
It has reduced kin's ties and palm affairs Now it has frozen and muted our voice7 Reduced cherished contacts to symbol and signs We have stopped visiting,soon to stop talking We will be unseeable,deaf and dumb to one another |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 10:06pm On Aug 23, 2012 |
Smileys and symbols are the sounds on our tongue Ask why we do not value ourselves again Human mental alienation,at snail's pace Has turned to physical incarceration It brings us together from far and wide But widens the gulf and kills the essence of our togetherness |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 10:10pm On Aug 23, 2012 |
From visit me . . . to link me. . . to ring me. . . Now! Ping me! What next will you do to me?! Fing me?! Or ting me?! Or no! Don't sink me. . . But what will stop humanity from sinking further The joyous abyss of crass earthly senselessness? 1 Like |
Re: Ping Me!!! by maclatunji: 9:02am On Aug 24, 2012 |
Is this a commentary or poetry? I think you have mixed the two. Your content is good, I am not sure about the form though. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 10:13am On Aug 24, 2012 |
maclatunji: Is this a commentary or poetry? I think you have mixed the two. Your content is good, I am not sure about the form though. Poetry it is |
Re: Ping Me!!! by HumbledbYGrace(f): 12:43pm On Aug 24, 2012 |
Lol |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 1:33pm On Aug 24, 2012 |
HumbledbYGrace: Lol Is it funny? |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Tgirl4real(f): 3:40pm On Aug 24, 2012 |
Well done Damsel! |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 5:31pm On Aug 24, 2012 |
Tgirl4real: Well done Damsel! Tanx tgal. Happy birthday to Tguy,lol. GGMUB |
Re: Ping Me!!! by breathing(f): 5:12am On Aug 27, 2012 |
ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 5:25am On Aug 27, 2012 |
breathing: ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY. Yeah,i wrote the poem hastily because my muse was around to give inspiration. My birthday was 11th june, so you can start saving for next year's STRAWberry breathing: ℓ☺ℓ, this is cool too, you've got humour, though I think your dislike for pinging didn't allow you to perfect this poem, I could hear your anger all over it, and your haste to write absolutely everything you feel on the issue. Btw when is your birthday S, I'd like to get you a blackBURRY. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by breathing(f): 7:33am On Aug 27, 2012 |
ℓ☺ℓ, strawberry? Ok, thanks for making it cheaper for me! |
Re: Ping Me!!! by HumbledbYGrace(f): 9:09pm On Aug 28, 2012 |
Sapphiredamsel:yes it is,I enjoy puttin my thoughts down on paper,and wen I read ur poem It just reminded me hw much I miss writtin keep u da gud work,u gt sense of humour nd maybe ill be PINGIN u soonest |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 9:57pm On Aug 28, 2012 |
HumbledbYGrace: yes it is,I enjoy puttin my thoughts down on paper,and wen I read ur poem It just reminded me hw much I miss writtin keep u da gud work,u gt sense of humour nd maybe ill be PINGIN u soonest I hope i will be pinnging u too 1 Like |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Nobody: 11:20am On Aug 31, 2012 |
@Sapphiredamsel It is poetry. I can feel the piece. It appeals to my emotions as much as my intellect. I was going to point out the absence of punctuation as a failing, but I think it might have made your piece more fun to read. 1 Like |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 12:52pm On Aug 31, 2012 |
Ihedinobi: @SapphiredamselThe lack of punctuation is a ploy on my part. Thanx 4d criticism |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Tgirl4real(f): 10:27am On Sep 10, 2012 |
Which kain ploy be that Sapphire, write proper English jor. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Obinoscopy(m): 11:36am On Nov 24, 2012 |
Sapphiredamsel: From visit me . . . to link me. . . to ring me. . . Now! Ping me! What next will you do to me?! Fing me?! Or ting me?! Or no! Don't sink me. . . But what will stop humanity from sinking further I love this part. Love the rhymes and its content. The rhythmic progression from 'visit me' to 'sink me' got me enthralled. Nice piece hon. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 11:41am On Nov 24, 2012 |
Obinoscopy:Im soo glad you love it. Poetry is capable of saying so much by just saying little. It economizes words and thats one of its aesthetics. Thank you obino. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by chronique(m): 9:46pm On Nov 24, 2012 |
Sapphiredamsel: Wow! You're my birthday mate! That's cool... |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 11:13pm On Nov 24, 2012 |
chronique:you dont mean it?! |
Re: Ping Me!!! by chronique(m): 11:26pm On Nov 25, 2012 |
Sapphiredamsel: Serious. I hardly meet pple born on d same day wit me. |
Re: Ping Me!!! by Sapphiredamsel(f): 4:17am On Nov 26, 2012 |
chronique:Thats true. Im quite humbled. Dont wory, we will celebrate it 2geda |
Re: Ping Me!!! by chronique(m): 12:23am On Nov 27, 2012 |
Sapphiredamsel: Not a bad idea... Sounds like a plan. |
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