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Collection Of My Rants / Welcome To My World Of (poems). / “iyi Oma” By Chidi Anthony Opara (2) (3) (4)
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 5:00pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
noble4d: I have 10 syllables on each line with a rhyming couplet abab, cdcd, efef, and also it's iambic pentameter. Thanks...cares received! |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 5:02pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
noble4d: Thanks bro...looking forward to seeing you on this thread |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 6:23pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
OMA4U: Hmm! 10 syllables agreed...but u did injustice to flourish sonnet . In sonnet, we don't only pour out our thoughts or ideas but we also communicate... hope u know what I mean. your writeup is matched up, I think you should re-write...thumbs up Noble cares |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 6:31pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
noble4d:Thanks I got it! How about others I've posted so far? |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 6:38pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
OMA4U: they are alright... you are good bro...thumbs up Bro. Noble cares |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 6:44pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
This is for you Bro... Two rhyming couplets (abab) making a quatrain Naira! oh what a joy you me find here Oma4u thee that heads the great deeds Full of poems, ideas and happy cheer Hopefully it will make thy readers gleam Noble cares |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Nobody: 6:53pm On Aug 29, 2014 |
noble4d:bin good oh dearie |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 10:00am On Sep 28, 2014 |
IN MY HOME In my home I hear the awful news Shooting out of aggrieved lips Like a dozen of stray bullets piercing into our feeble hearts Clans sob with heavy breath Chanting canticles- manacles of death shackles him In the throes amidst of unbearable agony Myriads of pains serenade the air Blowing every mournful head My feeble heart splinters into little fragments Like the crumbs of broken clay pot Tears wander through the aisle of my cheeks When eyes witness you in cluttered garment In an icy form of numb frozen body My home That was once a mansion of smiles Is now filled with baskets of sorrow As you vanish like rose that vacates the bouquet To reside in a lonely vast of small mug Tag: Larrysun, timpaker, noble4d, firestar, texanomaly, princesa, stormybucci 1 Like |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 3:47pm On Sep 30, 2014 |
OMA4U: IN MY HOME Honestly, I love your use of words....but, what type of poem is this? |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 3:50pm On Sep 30, 2014 |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 10:01am On Oct 02, 2014 |
A DROP OF INK Silence smothers the speaking pen Words muffle in your itching throats But you've got a lot to tell the world If no one ever reads your words How do we hear your speaking heart? Your heart, a barrel of plethora tales Mind, reservoir of ruminating bales But tamed voice keeps them crude If you've never paint the pictures How do we see your winning world? Why stuck and struck in lifetime silence? When your pen wants to elude your cage Whip out your silent loquacious pen Glide and slide it over the needing page While you write in utmost ambience You've got the light to bright the shadow Sonorous voice to sing for us the blues Through the flying words of your mouth Changes may arise like phoenix from the ashes And You too may be remembered in this axis Series of stories standstill, and still Waiting to be put in a pending paper That lies fallow on the four-legged mahogany Scene to scene; chapters to chapters living world arise from the dead of white paper Kiss your silent warrior with thunderous voice Let it swoop like an eagle to your world Let it peck words with its fluent nifty nib And stream them down to its eloquent tip A drop of ink makes a mighty word For the sake of this seminar/workshop I'd like to add analysis to this poem BACKGROUND OF THE POEM The idea behind this poem is the 'rephrasal' of the common phrase - a drop of water makes a mighty ocean. If a drop of water could make a mighty ocean, definitely a drop of ink could also make a mighty word. This shows that the poet does not undermine what words can do. He knows the power of words and how its effects could summon a change. 'In the beginning was the word….." THEME/ANALYSIS This poem opens with the poet asserting that 'silence smothers the speaking pen' and goes further to show the image of someone who is willing to speak, but words disappear somewhere in his throat. In stanza two, thus: the poet tells us that we have a lot of stories in our heart we wish to tell, but quietude makes those stories never heard. The poet uses 'comma' to relate heart and a barrel of plethora tales as metaphoric or simile expression. Same goes for mind and reservoir of ruminating bales. The poet selects the word 'bales' which means 'suffering or evil'. Sometimes evil or sorrowful thoughts which might cause depression or inhumane actions flash through our mind, but if these thoughts could be written as stories or painted as an artwork, they may be jettisoned as they have found a life in art. "Most artists/poets in the world may manage to get through life without little or no violence, because their works provide means for them to express themselves" In stanza four and five, the poet encourages a singer with sonorous voice to sing and a writer to start writing. They should allow their thoughts to be penned down as the drop of their ink makes a mighty word which may inadvertently change the world. POETIC DEVICES STRUCTURE: The poem consists of six stanza of thirty lines that flow like a gentle river continuously, with an end-rhyme as in 'word' and 'world' of lines 27 and 30. DICTION: The general language of this poem is direct, precise and simple. Through simplicity the images of pen that glides and slides over paper is clearly conveyed. ALLITERATION: This is the repetition of 's' in line 1, 'silence smothers the speaking pen'. Also in 'series of stories standstill, and still'. PARADOX: In line 2, 'words muffle in your itching throat', it is paradoxical to say that words do not come out of the mouth that is eager to speak. PERSONIFICATION: The poet uses a lot of personifications to enhance the flow and beauty of the poem. The attributes of human beings are given to non-human, like 'silence smothers the speaking pen'. The poet portrays it as though silence suffocates the breath (speaking) of the pen. Also as if pen could speak. In line 5, 'speaking heart' and in line 8, 'voice keeps them crude' in line 12, '…pen wants to elude your cage' and in line 13, 'loquacious pen'. in short personification is ubiquitous in verse 3 and the poem as a whole. METAPHOR: 'Tamed voice keeps the crude' line 8. The use of metaphor here gives us visual sense of the stories and thoughts that are like crude diamond, drab and dull, but after it is refined, it becomes shine and glamourous, same as the stories of a writer may become an award winning that would be read for centuries. Just like Shakespeare (Over four hundred years) . Metaphor also gives us the visual sense of 'table' in line 23, 'four-legged mahogany' SIMILES: In line 19, 'changes may arise like phoenix from the ashes'. Also in line 27, 'let it swoop like an eagle to your world.' IMAGERY: 'Your heart, a barrel of plethora tales, in line 6 . Also line 7,Mind, reservoir of ruminating bales' and 'When your pen wants to elude your cage' in line 12 RHYME: There are tales/bales, cage/page, silence/ambience, paper/paper, world/word. Rhyme added to the flow of the poem. ENJAMBMENT/RUN-ON-LINE: This is employed in stanza five in such a way that the idea of line 21 spills over to the next line, like that. 'series of stories standstill, and still/waiting to be put in a pending paper/that lies fallow on the four-legged mahogany.' OXYMORON: In line 13, 'silence loquacious'. Two opposing words are placed together to create a sharp contrast. It portrays a garrulous pen that is kept silent by the user. ASSONANCE: There is correspondence of vowel, 'struck and stuck', 'glide and slide', 'light and bright' and 'standstill and still' REPETITION: 'World and word' in verse 1 is repeated in verse 6 and 'How do we' is also repeated RETHORICAL: How do we hear your speaking heart? TONE/MOOD: There is a general tone of motivation and inspiration. The mood of the poet is that of sympathy and emotion THEMES 1. Motivation 2. Inspirations 3. Hope and Optimism 4. Clarion call |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 10:06am On Oct 02, 2014 |
noble4d:Elergy or dirge. Thanks, noble4d. I appreciate you, sir. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 4:38pm On Oct 02, 2014 |
OMA4U: Elergy or dirge. Thanks, noble4d. I appreciate you, sir. yap is a dirge |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by noble4d(m): 4:45pm On Oct 02, 2014 |
OMA4U: A DROP OF INK The poem has six stanzas each in cinquain... I love the input of analysis...thumbs up |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Chuksemi(m): 11:04am On Oct 03, 2014 |
I wish to start something like this very soon, though I am officially a big learner. But I would appreciate your blunt criticism when I start. Of course I would tag you. I admire your write up, you are indeed, a good poet. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Bamibor: 3:06pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
OMA4U: Pregnant Future OMA, this is beautiful. I really enjoyed reading it. It's well delivered, simple yet not lacking in depth. I'm not an expert in prosody but I must commend your intertwine of alliteration and assonance. I really think this is one piece that both young and old can enjoy reading (infact I think it can be used in schools). |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 11:01pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Chuksemi: I wish to start something like this very soon, though I am officially a big learner. But I would appreciate your blunt criticism when I start. Of course I would tag you. I admire your write up, you are indeed, a good poet.Everyone is learning, bro. I can't wait to start reading yours. God bless you |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 11:02pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
noble4d:Sir noble4d, thanks. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 11:05pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Bamibor:Thanks Bamibor, I appreciate your comments sir. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Chuksemi(m): 5:50pm On Oct 04, 2014 |
OMA4U:I am thirsty sir |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 6:35pm On Oct 04, 2014 |
Chuksemi:thirsty of poetic juice or what? |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Chuksemi(m): 6:49pm On Oct 04, 2014 |
OMA4U:Aha, a new one. Poetic juice it is then |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 12:46pm On Oct 25, 2014 |
THE MAN BEHIND THE MIRROR When rain and sun, drops and shines When flowers and thorns grow in the same bouquet When love and hates cloak under a garment When light and darkness appear in a partial shadow Then how do we separate evil from good How do we see the man behind the mirror? When life and death hover around a hanging breath When countenance of smile and hiss grow on a face When good and bad amalgamate as a ruler When the infallible judge sits on a fence When a coin stands on its rolling edge Then how do we know the side it shows? when water and fire well up in a well when heaven and hell have a single passage when magnanimous teeth furtively bite Then how do we see the man behind the mirror? Who reflects to us our needs in every way But hides behind, watching as we waste away When dirge and ode rhyme in one verse When the holy go on pilgrimage in a cesspool When wine and venom mix in a bottle How do we see the man behind the mirror? Who reflects to us our needs in every way But stand behind, leading us astray Tag: Timpaker, deflover, Firestar, amiablejay, princesa , Divepen, texanomaly, noble4d , badmusace, Chuksemi, royver, iyabodeh, laykorn, lordthunderbolt, philtrum, JigsawKillah, kagari, krystalxxx 3 Likes 1 Share |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by Nobody: 2:11pm On Oct 25, 2014 |
OMA4U: I'll be grateful. Only if you would analyse this. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 6:11am On Oct 29, 2014 |
laykorn:It's very direct and simple. Every stanza portrays the same thing. The man behind the mirror is a phrase that turns to poem. It simply talks about some people we have in our respective lives, they act as if they are the best, as if they love us, as if we are all. They even go to the extent of praising us, telling us that we are talented, we are this and that. They make us see and believe in ourselves. They are like a mirror in which we find ourselves. But no one ever sees what is behind the mirror, we only see ourselves. So these kind of people may stand behind the mirror leading us astray. Let me stop here. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 6:15am On Oct 29, 2014 |
to take a slow walk down the aisle (Kyrielle) We can't keep living in shadow Enough! this mirage we wallow It's dead! A promise a long mile To take a slow walk down the aisle It's high time old sun went to hell Let's be our past fearless farewell The feelings burns slow, no more high To take a slow walk down the aisle An end has come to wayward way A new day booms like buds of May No more passions unless I lie To take a slow walk down the aisle Now it's real; no more lies and fears O' Ye new bride, shed your sweet tears I heap fortune to live on isle To take a slow walk down the aisle |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by LarrySun(m): 11:43am On Oct 29, 2014 |
OMA4U:Wow! Where wasI when you wrote this brilliant piece? What a beautiful piece! What an amazing poet! |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by daveP(m): 12:00pm On Oct 29, 2014 |
OMA4U:I WANTED TO FIND A BETTER WORD FOR SOME PARTS, BUT ONLY ONE I COULD CHANGE. THE 1ST VERSE. Nice poem. (rushes back to 'office work') |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 12:13pm On Oct 29, 2014 |
daveP:Come back here to complete it, now! How far, Dave? How is work going? Thanks |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by daveP(m): 12:20pm On Oct 29, 2014 |
OMA4U: (shoes skids to mimic a car that just breaked like in Scrubs) im good o. 'office work' dey fulenty. The files of applicants on my desk are much, i havent go thru atall. Yes to the poem. Either u change 'sad' or 'saddened' in the 1st line. You get! Describe the morning another way. "so sad that friday morning' (it makes sense in terms of time, even if d days of d wekk have nothing to do per se) that would do yeah (mimics car ignition and vroooms off. Turns back to give a wave) |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 1:03pm On Oct 29, 2014 |
LarrySun:Thank you, sir. Did you read the erstwhile ones? Sir Larry! smiles grace my lips. |
Re: OMA Collection Of Poems by OMA4U(m): 1:05pm On Oct 29, 2014 |
daveP: Thank you, sir. I was creating a kind of Alliteration there. I will amend. Read others and let me know your take |
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