excellent story

ncess:  (singing) Secondary school exams, goodbye!  University entrance exam, goodbye! College, welcome!

college,university,college

Thanks a million, Orikinla. I have discovered the importance of characterization and my next story will have all the characters fleshed out in advance. Then I will make sure they never act out of character.

I agree with Orinla. I think the story is good. As an experienced writer his opinion might be a bit more valuable. I think Damsal's criticism should be taken seriously as they represent what a section of your audience will think. However since they will be probably be in the minority maybe too many changes should not be made but rather something else should be written to meet their requirements.

I join the bandwagon in asking for 'God's errand Girl' be continued.

I'm not a natural writer; for me it takes more effort than other tasks.

If I post something of a lower standard, people will be more unhappy than they are now.

But I'm working a nw story that borrows some ideas from this one. Stay tuned.

i like the story its funny. i want more

Fun story, cant wait to read the rest.
Dont know why some o' y'all are taking it so seriously,it's a story and it's meant to be enjoyed as a story, dont know where all the religious controversy is coming in. Seun thanks jare,maybe it's because I'm a teenager but your story is hilarious!!! CeeCee's just like my lil bro!

Not too bad either. Can be polished, used as the basis for a short film or series pilot.

Nice story . .good play of words . when are you going to end the story?

seun stay focused ,leave the distractions ,you shlould expect different opinons, they should count too,but please i like this one with the general ,so what happened to the general ?