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I Do Not Like The Taste Of Ass... (2) (3) (4)
Acquired Taste by Nobody: 6:56pm On Nov 01, 2015 |
In my own head Edges of my sanity Crawling on a land that is starked barren I don't realise I am to walk this pain alone My heart surge for you But here love doesn't beget love My love in the desert of your heart where you can't love me back Even though you've seen how stupid I stalk In my own head I have chosen silence How I choke on your beauty Causing each day a sigh of sobness I am sick of you Whenever my heart fails Your essence wouldn't let me stay dead How can you not know... ...I am your undead? You have messed up my artery You have messed up my vein functioning the same, one along another electrocuting my heart You have taken me to the waters You have taken me to realms unknown How can you not hate me? You chose silence, measured in my own dose Causing insanity to my mind When I am reading into your stare And see what isn't there when everything is drying up the waters, the air and my will to fight When I endure through to the barren surface Hanging by a thread on your love But just before I am air out Could have sworn... Your tear hit my cheek Your hands cuddle my neck Your vision repaired my heart Your mouth rhythm my beat Your lips plastered my face Thinking maybe it was just a fraction Too Late Or Is it? In my own head You would come to love me back 1 Like |
Re: Acquired Taste by emaculate99: 11:09pm On Nov 01, 2015 |
written:I love the coherence in ur piece. I will also advice you to work on your abbreviation. You wrote 'av' instead of 'have' and also wrote 'stil' instead of 'still'. I will advice you to run through the poem all over again. I must confess, I love the concept in this poem. |
Re: Acquired Taste by JigsawKillah(m): 12:52am On Nov 02, 2015 |
It's all in your head, bro. Spelling in full helps. . . I think you mispelt vain there or is it my eyes? Cool piece cc: Starshyne 1 Like |
Re: Acquired Taste by Nobody: 5:42am On Nov 02, 2015 |
emaculate99:didnt think it matters..done and noted.thanks 1 Like |
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