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Pregnancy Of A Woman by Nobody: 4:50pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
A constellation Of beauty ; a womanhood Into traditions Guilty of childbearing and Voiceless at decisioning Adorned creature Receptive to compliments Subjection's love Sorrow is pleasurable The voice of misogyny Married to then love Packaged for a husband's wish Restricted desires When her eyes are on fire Then plays the song of the mute For her nine months Congratulations is dished A Kingdom welcomed Despised for a woman child Avalanche of sudden tide Caressed with loneliness Consoled with deep emotions The gods' emptiness Her tears, far North and far South Of a river, overflow More than pregnancy Pregnancy of a woman From her infancy For her yesterday's future A tomorrow starting now. joseph1832, Dklef, gracile ,speeder 2 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by Nobody: 5:08pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
My first Renga Analysis The Renga centers on the almost extinct case of the situation in which a woman doesn't marry for love. She might just be given out to someone she never knew. The birth of a woman child only doesn't really mean anything. A woman who bears only women children seem not to be applauded and therefore despised. All these and more thus the pregnancy of a woman. (My reference to infancy is not to be generalised though as not all family or traditions loads all the work (at home) to the women (from childhood) .) |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by joseph1832(m): 6:09pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
Nice. But a Tanka poem is suppose to comprise of 31 syllables, written in five lines with the syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7. This form looks like that of a Renga. But nice work all the same. |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by Nobody: 7:35pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
joseph1832: You're correct. It's actually a renga. A renga and a Tanka are kinda same. That was where I got confused but now I'm clarified. 5-7-5 then 7-7 for a renga but 5-7-5-7-7 for a Tanka. Thanks. Let me do some modification(s). Please, I need your critique(s) on my work. Let me know how to improve more. |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by joseph1832(m): 7:43pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
TheAgba:Okay. But I hope you know Renga's are suppose to be written by two or more people, not one?. |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by Nobody: 8:03pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
joseph1832:I'm aware of that. But there are cases in which one person writes it. I read some from the poetrysoup website. |
Re: Pregnancy Of A Woman by joseph1832(m): 10:34pm On Apr 20, 2016 |
TheAgba:Okay. |
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