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RAIN [the Watery Strides] by izzybobo49(m): 1:42pm On Nov 30, 2017
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thudding down the crust like flooding plagues
after the dust and heat that smeared the inhabitants
in the broad and dusty streets
in the holes that thirsts for water
on the isle that longed for a bath
tingle,tingle,tingle
how beautiful are thy strides!
.
the bored duck awaits the drops of instill
as of the yearning milky lane that led to 'sapele'
tingling the textiles of couchy illusions
the cloud presumes the stage play
agreeing to visit the mother earth with suprises
hefty strides bounced to and fro
as the tranquil befell the dusty lanes
.
how it clatters along the roof
like the trump of the greedy tortoise
how it gushes and struggles out
like the milk on the tips of a slumber
across the window glide
it pours and pour
creaming the unclad fronds
&subsiding the angry sun
with clasps of watery strokes
the terrestial swam in its liquid.
the rain,the dreamt rain.
# poetic
# izzybobo
2017

Re: RAIN [the Watery Strides] by noble4d(m): 9:58pm On Dec 21, 2017
izzybobo49:
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thudding down the crust like flooding plagues
after the dust and heat that smeared the inhabitants
in the broad and dusty streets
in the holes that thirsts for water
on the isle that longed for a bath
tingle,tingle,tingle
how beautiful are thy strides!
.
the bored duck awaits the drops of instill
as of the yearning milky lane that led to 'sapele'
tingling the textiles of couchy illusions
the cloud presumes the stage play
agreeing to visit the mother earth with suprises
hefty strides bounced to and fro
as the tranquil befell the dusty lanes
.
how it clatters along the roof
like the trump of the greedy tortoise
how it gushes and struggles out
like the milk on the tips of a slumber
across the window glide
it pours and pour
creaming the unclad fronds
&subsiding the angry sun
with clasps of watery strokes
the terrestial swam in its liquid.
the rain,the dreamt rain.
# poetic
# izzybobo
2017
Splendid brother, how come I didn't see this earlier. I love the language of this poem but not without little flaw. Take note of your punctuations.

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Re: RAIN [the Watery Strides] by izzybobo49(m): 9:40am On Dec 22, 2017
noble4d:

Splendid brother, how come I didn't see this earlier. I love the language of this poem but not without little flaw. Take note of your punctuations.

Thanks bro.
i really appreciate your observation.

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