"DIMPLE GIRL" - A Poem

Fort with came my love my lady,
Coming thru with a dark eye shady,
She steps in with a slow cat walk,
Vanishing past the hot sun sack,
And entering into a room so dark.

Her stare can kill a legion demon,
Cute smile is one in a million,
Soft tender skin like a new born,
Bringing forth angelic light in d' room,
Her presence shatters my despair 'n' doom.

My dimple girl has come to stay,
A lovely duck raising its sail,
Half heart coming to complement another heart,
Our love shall clear a million path,
Growing from tough times to tall height.

Your love never seizes to amaze me,
In anger you left your man to be,
Travelling thru every sea and clime,
And hoping to spend your precious time,
With men of more money and dime.

But come back home my good lady,
Come stay with me your sweet baby,
For that which you sought in vain,
Hides their strong hands with blood stains,
Pretty roses before you, they've crushed in pain.

Come, let us make ours a home,
Where the sun rise and flowers bloom,
Let us turn these huts of ours,
And these harmattan stricken mud walls,
Into a blissful home without faults.

Let our love weather every storm,
Growing stronger like a soft corn,
The treasures of the world bides us,
Coming to transform our dark utensils n pots,
Into the castles of the royalties of yore.

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© Paul Chiwude 2018

Mod please help move to the front page. My first poem on nairaland. Thanks

Wow! What a display of literary prowess
Your fluidity and flexibility with words are commendable. More ink to your golden pen

OK

Nice one

Seems today is a poem day



Lemme start writing my own poems too



I'm cuming through

Nice

Nice but the flow was broken at the 5th stanza. You should have stopped at the 4th.

Lovely

nice one bro,,more grace to you

peacettw:
Nice but the flow was broken at the 5th stanza. You should have stopped at the 4th.

Totally agree with you on that

Ok Op, this is the sequence I presume?
She came back to you and immediately 'lightened' up your world? You recalled how she left you and travelled far for evil men who were rich?
Then you started emphasising on why she should live/be with you, right?
Well, I think all stanzas of the poem are important to the general message you wished to convey.

It's a good poem.

awesome

This is beautiful...

To me this is not a literal work because I can see jargons like 'thru' instead of "through" and 'n' instead of "and"
The op was probably chatting with his babe on Valentine day.

Goodwork

peacettw:
Nice but the flow was broken at the 5th stanza. You should have stopped at the 4th.

That depends on how you look at it. I'd rather say a tweak of the tenses would make the difference

Think :
Now you're back home my good lady
Please stay with me your sweet baby...

I enjoyed reading the poem though.

NairaMaster1:
To me this is not a literal work because I can see jargons like 'thru' instead of "through" and 'n' instead of "and"
The op was probably chatting with his babe on Valentine day.

In a sense you might be right but as a writer (especially as a poet) he's afforded some level of poetic license.
That's not to say he shouldn't check to be sure he's not getting used to using some of the "social media jargons" in formal writing.

Bamibor:


In a sense you might be right but as a writer (especially as a poet) he's afforded some level of poetic license.
That's not to say he shouldn't check to be sure he's not getting used to using some of the "social media jargons" in formal writing.

Ok

When I saw 'dimple'.... I thought d poem was about dimple129.

Nice poem. Why Nigerians don't read. See nice literature yet people won't comment. If its masturbation or sex u see more than 10 pages.

Op, an advice

Let the rhythm of your poem flow
Let it spark like an after sex glow
Or we might hate it like a girl who never blow
Or you might get a comment section that's just slow
Remember let the poem flow.

Thats lovely!

rxmusa:
Wow! What a display of literary prowess
Your fluidity and flexibility with words are commendable. More ink to your golden pen

Thanks for kind words. I'm humbled!

peacettw:
Nice but the flow was broken at the 5th stanza. You should have stopped at the 4th.

I didn't see that. Thanks very much.

Africanbest:
Op, an advice

Let the rhythm of your poem flow
Let it spark like an after sex glow
Or we might hate it like a girl who never blow
Or you might get a comment section that's just slow
Remember let the poem flow.

God bless bro for your kind critique. I will learn from it.

Bamibor:


That depends on how you look at it. I'd rather say a tweak of the tenses would make the difference

Think :
Now you're back home my good lady
Please stay with me your sweet baby...

I enjoyed reading the poem though.

Thanks

Beautiful piece... I love the rhyme scheme

Amazinpeace:
Beautiful piece... I love the rhyme scheme

The rhyme scheme is aabbb. I just wanted do something original, more of a unique writing style. Thanks a lot for your appraisal.

Bamibor:
This is beautiful...

Thanks Bamibor!