...no Air - Poems For Review - Nairaland
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| ...no Air by firestar(f): 10:47pm On May 30, 2020 |
Breathe Good versus evil Evil versus good Should Good cheat Good seems evil Should Evil lax Evil seems weak No air in lungs And it’s no virus Kneed to submission Airways are blocked Right in plain sight And held down by four Cuffed and beaten By those who are Law Release I can feel The return of air I won’t bend To your spell I am free Breathe easy Breathe well Face to the Most High Your Time Tells Breathe! #Inhale True Justice 3 Likes 3 Shares |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 10:55pm On May 30, 2020 |
For George Floyd right |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 10:56pm On May 30, 2020 |
Your grammar composition on stanza 2 isn't up to standard . The first two lines are bland |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 10:57pm On May 30, 2020 |
Last and first stanza is dope . I'll advise you use I'm instead of I am It's more mature |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 10:58pm On May 30, 2020 |
Just work on the body of the poem, there are no much Derails there 1 Like |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 10:59pm On May 30, 2020 |
Check Is there lawlessness? Check Is there pestilence? Check Is there outrage? Check Is there carnage? Check Are there quakes? Check Are there snakes? Check Are people cold? Check Are the youths bold? Check Are you in? Check Are you out? Check Are you watching? Check Are you working? Check Are you waiting? Check Are you steady? Check Are you ready? Check 2 Likes 1 Share |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 11:01pm On May 30, 2020 |
PricyTech: Uncut version I am not in the right state of mind. But thanks Bruh. |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 11:03pm On May 30, 2020 |
firestar: Thats best time to write something beautiful instead of writing someone's story write yours . Pour it out through the pen 1 Like |
| Re: ...no Air by PricyTech: 11:03pm On May 30, 2020 |
firestar: I love this |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 11:25pm On May 30, 2020 |
Termite Grub Nibble, the organic dead: ...bamboo ...sycamore ...cashew Pulvérisé the zombie lead: ...glass ...ore ...quartz Flee oh garden bed! Full wiry vines Bloated fruit Needled spikes! Flee oh gourd For termites nibble On pots Made of lead... 3 Likes 2 Shares |
| Re: ...no Air by rentAcock(m): 11:30pm On May 30, 2020 |
How is this a poem when nothing rhymes? |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 11:40pm On May 30, 2020 |
Unhinged My style knows no rules I’ll rhyme when I choose Or not... It’s unhinged It’s raw Be careful Love, I’m a rebel poet outlaw Not a perfectionist But flawed... Haïku or Sudoku Rhythm and Poetry Classical themes All I’ve explored through It’s just being me Balancing on the beams So before you get singed I’m unhinged 2 Likes 2 Shares |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 11:52pm On May 30, 2020 |
How Much Longer? A quarter to midnight Tpp! Tpp! Tpp! I type... What should be inked tonight? Tpp! Tap! Tap! I type... The birds of prey Tap! Tap! Tpp! Tpp! Space... Busy aren’t they? Tpp... tpp... Tap! Paragraph... Flaming up cities Tssp... tssp... Tap! Space... Implicating communities... Tap... tap... tap... Space... Ties are torn Tap! Tap! Trust is shorn Tsppp! Tap! Tap! A monster is born Tap. 4 Likes 4 Shares |
| Re: ...no Air by J2381: 1:47am On May 31, 2020 |
PricyTech:body of the poem? I laugh. If you write poetry or you know about poem you'd have known there's no such thing like 'body' of a poem. |
| Re: ...no Air by texanomaly(f): 5:51am On Jun 12, 2020 |
Hey Firestar. Long time. I love that you have created a poem thread. Miss the club and you. It’s almost midnight here, so I’m off to bed. I’ll check in tomorrow. 4 Likes 3 Shares |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 8:34pm On Jun 27, 2020 |
Rehash and Return Ocean eyes kept her sane... Strong arms kept her steady Even at recess, It won’t be the same... A pocket in time Where one can hide Safely within another being Healings intense and sublime... Till one gets home Home is safe Safe, cozy and snug Safe to brittle completely And heal whole... |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 8:47pm On Jun 27, 2020 |
Do You Know... Do you know, There’s a curse flying... Eager to run its course It’s seen with the unjust dying As iron turns to rust Do you know, It is a form of script On both sides inked...? The size of a stadium And more names ticked? Do you know, It’ll stay, Upon a house, Till desolation~ Have its way? 1 Like 1 Share |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 1:28am On Jul 22, 2020 |
[] Rise Reborn After flames to dust A violent Storm roars A deluge of sulphur A downpour So fearless and boldly: Let’s meet at Skyfall Where the little horn drags the stars, And tramples legions’ shrine... Where filth is scoured Where horrors thrust in limelight Where beloved idols bow Where the roots uproot Where Script is spent Just a little longer A little longer We rise Reborn We’re not beat We will rise again.[/font] 1 Like |
| Re: ...no Air by Galactico4ever(m): 1:33am On Jul 22, 2020 |
firestar:LOVELY!!! 1 Like |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 7:04pm On Jul 26, 2020 |
Like Sea before Earth was birthed: Formless. Like landscape before Man explored: Wildness. Like sky before light shone: Darkness. . . ...mined... And see my limbs unaligned... . ... tangible... As a berg floats and melts... . . ....blind... The Spirit is my guide... I’ve only come this far With crisscross stripes, Raisin skin, And Star crossed eyes... With and without scars. |
| Re: ...no Air by Nobody: 8:33pm On Jul 31, 2020 |
rentAcock:Are u a sci stud or an art stud?Well ,doesn't matter.I just wanna tell u dt is not all poems that should rhyme.And it's not all dt must be written in an Iambicpentameter form.There are free verses,simple words,complex..Whichever way you choose to write. 1 Like 1 Share |
| Re: ...no Air by firestar(f): 1:38pm On Dec 17, 2021 |
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