'Victims Of Circumstances' Story: Novel Or Home Video? Advice again please

your summary is not enough.why not post a chapter at least and let nairalanders give there comments

Chapter Two

Little did he realize that his intense discussion on his mobile phone had attracted so many eyes to him, where he sat in his jeep in front of a branch of the Blue Sea Bank. His left leg was on the car step, the door opened. Amongst the people's attention he had attracted unnoticed was Vero's, as she walked into the bank. She had never seen him, but was wondering who the handsome and definitely rich young man was. Maura, his personal assistant, who was with him in the car, was patiently waiting, as she glanced through a daily newspaper.

   "Let's go baby," Segun said, getting out of the car as he finished.

   Maura followed him quietly, carrying a briefcase.

   "No, bring the briefcase, I have to behave like a gentleman," he said smiling, as he collected the case from her giving her the mobile phone. "Take your phone."

   They both went to the branch manager's secretary's office. They met Vero coming out of the manager's office, and Segun was amazed. "Vicky, what are you doing here?" he asked, moving closer to her.

   Vero looked at him and immediately recognized him as the guy she had seen outside a while ago. She greeted him at once with a broad smile, saying, "Hi." She offered him a handshake. She concluded he knew her sister. She turned to Maura. "Hello."

   "This is Maura, my colleague and good friend," he gestured towards Maura, "and Maura meet Vicky, a new friend."

   "Pleased to meet you, Vicky," Maura said, and they shook hands.

   "What are you doing here?" Vero asked.

   "We're here to see the Branch manager, and you?"

   "I'm now here," she said smiling.

   Segun smiled, taking it for a joke. He suddenly sensed something different about her. She was not as reserved as the Vicky he had known. Besides, Vicky was modest in her dressing, and wouldn't dress in a skirt as short as this not to talk of wearing it to the office.

   She picked the intercom and spoke with her boss. "You may go in and see him."

   Segun looked her in the face, "So what is your own name?"

   Both ladies looked up at him sharply. A puzzle came on, on Maura's face. "You just introduced her as Vicky."

   Vero laughed as Segun too began to laugh. He turned to Maura. "This is not Vicky; this lady is trying to use my head."

   Vero was still laughing. "You're smart. I'm Vicky's twin sister, Vero."

   Maura was now laughing.

   "Vero, I didn't know she's a twin. I'll be right back for you Vero. I am taking you for lunch!"

Vero sat down, trying to concentrate on her work, but her mind was already busy flirting with the handsome, young and fair-complexioned man who was obviously rich.

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She had hands-off the work, buried in the desire to go out with him for lunch as he had said, but she was almost too sure her boss wouldn't allow her, as she just returned from break.

   "So, Vero," Segun said as he stepped out of the manager's office, followed closely behind by his P.A., and the hefty looking manager, Mr. Savage.

   Vero quickly adjusted at the sight of her boss. She quickly glanced at the papers in front of her and in a flash of moment looked back up.

   "So can we go?" Segun asked.

   "I am sorry Mr. Akande, I have loads of work to do and besides ……, " she was saying, smiling.

   "Is it your boss you're scared of?" Segun turned to pat the manager on the back. "Don't worry, I've taken permission."

   Mr. Savage smiled broadly. "You can go Vero, I'll delegate someone else to do the job. Mr. Akande is not someone anyone can afford to turn down, you may never have the opportunity again. Except you personally don't want to go."

   "You sure flatter me there man," Segun said.

Everyone laughed.

   Vero starred at the manager to study him. She knew he added the last clause, to tactically discourage her, but she had made up her mind to go. She knew Mr. Savage wouldn't want her to go from the depth of his heart, he was having flings with her. "Okay sir," she said, getting up from her seat, a glimpse of smile leaped to her face.

   Segun turned back to Mr. Savage. "Thanks so much Mr. Savage. I appreciate everything."

   "My pleasure Mr. Akande."

   They shook hands.

   "I'll expect your call, as promised," Segun added.

   "Sure." Mr. Savage turned to shake Maura's hand. "And nice meeting you Maura. Hope we'll meet again soon."

   "Will be my pleasure Mr. Savage."

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"Just few days back, I saw your complimentary card with my sister," Vero said, picking her glass of juice.

   Segun nodded. "We met by chance, and here I am with you too."

   "Not too nice, though." She looked him straight in the eyes flirtatiously, toying with the glass cup.

   "How do you mean?" He raised his glass to sip at his drink.

   "I wish you had met me first."

   "And what difference would that have made?" He starred back into her face, and sensed the passion that radiated from her.

   "I know…. From your tone, you like my sister, I know you want her. And I want you! That is a whole lot of difference"
 
   Segun knew absolutely what she meant. He smiled. "Could any of you possibly be ready for a heart break?"

   Vero laughed.

   His face, though retaining the smile, was questioning.

   "Segun, I am a very hard lady. I am not in any serious relationship just because I don't believe in it. But I like to take what I want in men."

   "Hhhmmm?" he was surprised. "Vero?"

   "Segun? Tell me about you." She ignored his call. "How old are you? And what exactly is the mystery behind your position at Ivory Tech."

   "Are you now a journalist?" He said jokingly. "Ask your sister those questions, I told her already."

   She was disappointed.

   "Well, let's talk about you and Vicky instead."

   "You'll have to find out about Vicky from her Segun, but about me………, "

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Everyone else is posting chapter one and you are posting chapter 2!  Wouldn't it be confusing to us?

Anyway, I think a story published as a home video will make more money than a novel.

Why?
1)  Many Nigerians don't read anything apart from school books.
2)  A video can be enjoyed by a group of friends at the same time.
3)  A video is more engaging since it has both pictures and words.

vokky,

thanks for the comment. I want to get more response on this before i post the rest of the story. it's quite lenghty though, that's not even the whole of chapter too. but if you want, i can send the ebook format to your email.

Cheers

DevDel,
From both perspective, your work should succeed as a novel and movie.

If you can write the screenplay before 1st of December, do so and let me see what I can do to get you going on the making of the movie.

If the screenplay is not professional, there is nothing I can do.

I love it. 

It is a wonderful stuff.it can succeed anyhow.
please post the rest of it.