I stepped out for some much needed fresh air. Being indoors all day can make you forget that you're not alone in this world.

As the outside world and the chaos of the Nigerian society came into view, I staggered. Those blasted gates almost chopped off a foot.. then, something caught my eyes.

Wrapped in a tight fitting skirt that barely allowed movement, were the endowment of an attractive woman..

It wasn't long before my eyes started following her steps, the bounce of her ass, the strain on the skirt, and the confidence on her face..

Truly, she wasn't shy to show off what most men want..

At that moment, I knew that she was already getting a thousand and one compliments from admirers, pick up artists, and aspiring boyfriends.

It's hard not to get cocky when you have an ass like that. Definitely it will be soft to the touch and smoother than what most ladies show these days.

These things kept running through my mind until a moving car jolted me back to reality..

I never knew I had been lost in those smooth, spotless legs, certainly her ass must be spotless too..

Damn, fair girls are glorious..

If you're an average Nigerian guy and a girl gets you tripping this hard, you'd probably want to bang, date or just get a chance to spank her ass.

Or maybe you would prefer to do a Pastor-David-Wilson on her....

Her pussy will surely be elegant and inviting, probably she shaved and smells like pineapple down there.. Haha.. kidding..

If you've been on this road before, then maybe you've come to nairaland to seek for advice..

You probably came to lay down your troubles, hoping that someone could give you that pick up line, advice, strategy, idea, or scope that will sweep off her feet and get your lips in between her legs...

Unfortunately, nairaland is filled with guys still struggling to get laid. Guys that don't know how they ended up with the angels they have and the ones that have had their hearts run over, disemboweled, crushed, and smashed by the ladies they offered it to... Life is tough..

As you scroll through the thread with the hope of getting that advice that will help you get her ass to your room. Already you're imagining her in her panties or maybe she doesn't wear panties. I bite my lower lip to that...

Shockingly, you find these words repeatedly on the thread...

Guy, go and hustle and forget woman... When you make money, woman will come

It's quite true, women are attracted to money. Like Tasha once said "my eyelashes and nails cost money, so ladies get yourselves a boyfriend that has money"..

However, it makes me wonder, is a man's worth only the cash in his pocket?

And...

What do broke guys look for in a relationship?


Please all I need is for you guys to grade the writing style and use of grammar. Grade it over 10.

E.g. 10/10

You can also give reasons why you graded it so and point out areas that need improvement

Cc
Pocohantas
Ilegendd

4/10 no more no less.

7/10 the story line is captivating if you're a guy.

Birdeyeview:
4/10 no more no less.

Maybe it because youre a girl...

Why did you grade it so high.. 4 / 10..

Lightway:

Maybe it because youre a girl...
Why did you grade it so high.. 4 / 10..

i'm LADY not a girl.

Birdeyeview:

i'm LADY not a girl.

Are you over 80?

Lightway:


Are you over 80?

What does that got to do with the fact i prefer to be called a lady and not a girl?

Birdeyeview:

What does that got to do with the fact i prefer to be called a lady and not a girl?

You re a naughty girl to me.... No more no less

Lightway:

You re a naughty girl to me.... No more no less

Little boy don't you have homeworks to do? or better still go to bed.

Birdeyeview:

Little boy don't you have homeworks to do? or better still go to bed.

Come and tuck me in

Because you are too rude to us guys, I hereby score you 0/10 for such an engaging narrative.




As a guy who has been broke at some point in my life, I would say broke guys are looking for peace of mind, encouragement and love. They don’t want a nagging girlfriend who reminds them that they are broke. Such a tall order.

AfroKnight:
Because you are too rude to us guys, I hereby score you 0/10 for such an engaging narrative.




As a guy who has been broke at some point in my life, I would say broke guys are looking for peace of mind, encouragement and love. They don’t want a nagging girlfriend who reminds them that they are broke. Such a tall order.

So many truth in what you've said.

AfroKnight:
Because you are too rude to us guys, I hereby score you 0/10 for such an engaging narrative.




As a guy who has been broke at some point in my life, I would say broke guys are looking for peace of mind, encouragement and love. They don’t want a nagging girlfriend who reminds them that they are broke. Such a tall order.

Engaging narrative... Interesting

Lightway:


Engaging narrative... Interesting

Yeah, you did well, just the casual disregard for the curiosity of your male readers. So, yeah, still 0/10. Beautiful story though.

I give this a 10/10...

Nor mind that AfroKnight ... the thing pain am well well

Nice one

foodthought:
I give this a 10/10...

Nor mind that Afro Knight ... the thing pain am well well

Nice one

I won’t lie. E pain me small.

AfroKnight:


Yeah, you did well, just the[b] casual disregard for the curiosity of your male readers[/b]. So, yeah, still 0/10. Beautiful story though.

casual disregard for the curiosity of your male readers... what do you mean by this.... Abi I make you vex?

Approved, but I won't rate.

@lightway, are you trying to make me Hot? if you think I'm jacking off after reading this, you are goddamn right!

nice one,
there is more to it
than u can imaging.
a woman can never reason like a man
Just like a man can never reason like a woman... it's just like the more u look the less u see.

Interesting, for a moment I was with you at your gate watching the olosho passing at ur gate.

Hey guy,
The story is cool. Your writing style is good. I'd rate it 4/10.
Story is good. Punctuation was kinda poor. You really need to work on your punctuations.
Also, you are not supposed to tell us EVERYTHING. You should give your readers room to engage their imagination. Manage your paragraphs better, your euphemisms and sentence structuring can be better.
But the story is cool sha. I enjoyed it. But you can improve.

"Don't tell the reader that the moon is shining; let them see the glint on a broken glass." Anton Chenkov.

All the best bro!

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