₦airaland Forum

glowingscenes: Awww, thanks so much dear @Toeyean! God bless. It's an honour.

You're welcome to my thread. Please can I get a link to any of your stories? The one I found isn't complete. Thanks

Spongia1: Please follow me back!

I've done that

Spongia1: Beautiful Beautiful work of art! Held me spell bound from its first line. AudreyTIMMS, you are destined for the top!

Thanks dear. Amen!

Toeyean1507: . I know u are. Some wouldn't agree easily especially with a write up like dis. Keep it up,Ma'am

Thanks dear.

LarrySun: I'll gladly help if I can.

This is to tell every writer giving lectures in the workshop that I've volunteered to become your nemesis. So, you should write something you're willing to accurately defend or I would crucify you with questions. You are warned! And those of you who would be writing about 'Grammar', you better be grammatically upright, or else...

Oh, this will be fun, fun, fun!

LarrySun as nemesis? Ahhh.....Divepen, I give up. LarrySun has volunteered to take my spot. Amma sit back and watch.

LarrySun: I'll gladly help if I can.

Okay. I have a problem with will/would and can/could.

LarrySun: You have about two weeks to prepare; I'm sure something will come up before then.

Thanks dear. I hope I can come to you for help.

AudreyTimms: *scratching her lice-free hair* emm, Divepen, I'm kinda getting confused with all these comments. Are we expected to bring a write-up or something? I thought it was going to be a question and answer session. Please clarify. Thanks

Sorry, I just saw the other thread. Article? Did you say article? *crying like a baby* I hate writing articles! Especially not now that I'm having writers block.

Writers, I need your anointed hands on ma head o! Nothing is inside right now.

Divepen, no word limit? Alright! God help those of us who get carried away while writing.

*scratching her lice-free hair* emm, Divepen, I'm kinda getting confused with all these comments. Are we expected to bring a write-up or something? I thought it was going to be a question and answer session. Please clarify. Thanks

This is beautiful! I love it!

Mj45: My special girl, AudreyTimms, we meet again.
U are right. Very unfortunate there are a zillion ladies who really don't know that what dy want is exactly what dy DO NOT need. Insecurity has many "shades". Guess Deji is Bimbo's weakness which I prefer to call "stupidity". There isn't really anything like a weakness. What we call weaknesses in life are rather our stupidities- when we see PITS before us but choose to continue on such paths with our palms over our eyes hoping d pit would disappear when we get there, when there is a good path just staring @ us but which of course we usually choose to ignore. Anyways, I think women are more to these "stupidities" than men. Just my opinion though. This Bimbo gal annoys d hell out of me but then that's what makes MidieMeliss a good writer like u- the Ability to make ur readers fume, rage, smile, whoop, cry over characters on d pages of a book.
Hi 'Meliss, permit me to call u that, good work.

Very true my dear

Ehn? *gives Deji a back hand slap* Nonsense!

Weldone dear

alomosweets: Hey Audrey...gimme a hug, girl.

*hug*

Kaycee7: Wetin dis one dey talk?

Please help me ask her 'cause I've got no idea

alomosweets: *clears throat* Been all praise and no criticism, so here i come. *rubbing hands together* Ehen...

You are an amazing story teller, Audrey. I liked the fact that you used Oleng for the main character too. #Roots.

But...

I think the plot's vain. Got me thinking you were some spoilt ajebutter like that. Ok o. Bite me later, but wait. Hehe. Persian rugs, Armani shirts, gold-plated wristwatches, bugattis(ok, that's my own addition ); they didn't really seem necessary IMO.
And, taking you back to the fp, don't you think six years is too small an age for em...
I'll complete this post later. Lemme git my facts right.
Good job, tho'. Love you. And your work.

I got criticism too and even opened the door for more.

Thanks.

I'm not trying to diss you or anything but in all sincerity I really don't get what you're saying. The plot was vain? I'm a spoilt ajebutter? To mention those things didn't seem necessary? What are you talking about? Do you have anything against rich people?

Fp? Six years too small an age for what? Now, I'm totally lost. Please come and explain yourself.

Thanks dear. I love you too

eunisam: Honestly,i was here.and i enjoyed what i read.more inks to your pen.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks dear

Toeyean1507: yea, glowingscenes deserves to be looked up to. She knows how to mix a litlle bit of this and that and @ d end, u have a romance, morally inspiring and above all, the teachings of dah Most High all in a novel. Check out switched, chocolates and sushi and u'll marvel. She's more than good,ma'am. I'll keep saying this, I love ur person. With dis wonderful piece up there,u still saw urself as upcoming,still wanna learn. Chai! I dough my heart for u,ma'am. May u grow from strength to strength #byHisgrace

Okay. I'll check them out as soon as -km through with the ones I'm reading here. Thanks. I'm still upcoming o! Amen! Thanks dear

Mj45: How's d honeymoon? @ Eric n Olen, just make sure u don't come back pregnant again.

Lol!

noble4d: Wow here is beautiful ...wazup Audrey its my first time here. No doubt, you are magnificent... Roll up da good work.

Noble cares

Hmmm. I'm good. You're welcome. Thanks dear

Divepen: When I was trying to re-edit this story...
I was like *Gba gaun* see english ooo...
Is it that Audreytimms did not see it or she is just keeping her fire?...

My dear, I saw them o! I decided to keep quiet for awhile since I'm just starting the story. It's interesting!


I think the note under number two in your L.I.T.E advert needs reconstruction. Thanks

PrettySpicey, can I hire an assassin to take of Daniel-the-idiot-Wigwe?

You write so well girl!! Still searching but I haven't seen anyone better yet.

Hmmm......@Divepen, you have tried. Kudos to you.

@Dorisbest, I really don't know where to start from 'cause there are like a million and one things to correct.

I was telling my hubby yesterday that there's more to being a writer than just having an interesting story.

I'm going to start with your strengths. I applaud your courage in writing such a story. I mean a spiritual story if I can call it that. People might not really fancy such stories that have something to do with things like marine spirits and all but me, I see it as a plus for daring to be different.

I also like the way you introduced other characters and their lives though an inattentive person might get lost in them. I also love the twists. For example, how you made Daisy to be the sister of the adopted daughter of the hero (forgive me, I have forgotten their names. It's from reading so many stories here)

Now to the flaws. My first observation is from the very first episode. Why would a girl go and bathe in the house of a guy she just met? I can understand going home with him but I surely can't understand bathing there?

I'm so sorry to say this but your use of grammar is all wrong. You use past tense instead of present tense and vice versa and some inappropriate words. Divepen brought out a few of them but the truth is that the entire story needs a lot of grammar correction. E.g She gave a sigh of relieved instead of- She gave a sigh of relief.
The best I can do for you here is to edit your next update for you to see what I'm talking about.

You said the story is coming to an end soon. I hope you don't mean the hero, UBA and the heroine will get married so easily. Can't there be a new twist or something?

Besides, these marine spirits don't give up easily especially due to the fact that she was actually one of them and not just possessed by them. While the devil knows God's powers are supreme, that doesn't stop him from trying. I'm talking from experience, not mine but from a friend.

I rest my case for now. I hope my criticism will be taken with love. Thanks

My dear, you don't have to explain yourself to anyone. Who no wan read again, make e carry e ghana must go dey go! It's not by force!

A lot of people just refuse to face reality. There are like a thousand and one Bimbos out there. Girls who keep going back to one useless guy again and again due to one reason or the other.

I'm actually enjoying the story. Even if it's just fiction, it has a ring of reality to it.

So please ride on, dear!

Oowwkkaayy! I'm here. It sounds interesting. I'm game!

@Divepen, do I need to come as a fire breathing dragon or should I reserve that for your thread alone?

Divepen:
Mayb may u go wait till November 1 when I go start 'I need to know'... Keep the fire

Dude, I've already started. I started reading it when you told me about it!

*Rolling on the floor weeping profusely*

You've ended the story? Now that I'm here like a dragon breathing out fire through the mouth? Amma beef you till next month. No fair!

fhunkhy: Any forthcoming story....

My dear, I'm on writing leave o! I wanna learn some things from other writers first but if I'm given the unction to write, I will. I'll keep you posted.

Queenxstar: I once told all that I went to write a specialist course exam, remember... . Guess what guys, all your prayers and best wishes paid off!

For two days, I'll be traveling to pick my admission letter and finalize other things.

Thank you for your patience and understanding.

Congratulations, my dear.

Sorry I'm late coming here. I've been busy. I'm still on page one much to my chagrin but I believe I'll join you guys soon.

Loving the story so far. Weldone dear

fhunkhy: Has someone ever told u u are an awesome and incredible writer sent down from heaven...
You are too much...
You shall grow in wisdom.
Please don't forget God who is d source of ur inspiration.

I pray u get the best in life from writing... And don't forget to get this published or converted to a movie.
LOOKING FOWARD......to more from u.
Yours Sincerely
FHUNKHY....

Lol! Well, thanks for telling me. I'll try my best not to because I'm nothing without Him. Amen! I'll try my best. Thanks so much dear

Solphiequeen: Ohhhhh audrey,ur story is extra wonderful. It's actually been long since i felt deeply engrossed in a novel like ds. U are a talented writer. Just finished part 1 wish i'd seen it earlier.
One thing i observe is dat d story is morally sound and nt sexually explicit. After glowingscene u are my best writer here on nairaland. Can't wait to finish part 2

Hmm. I'm glad you are enjoying it. Not to worry, when I start posting here again, I'll let you know so you can follow us all the way. I'll check out glowingscene 'cause I'm looking for mentors. Thanks dear.

*And my jaw drops* Bimbo don fall my hand! Weldone dear for the twist. I didn't see that coming!

Hmmm.....me I no c update 4 night o! As I tire reach last night, I on fone 2 check bt I no c anytin. Evn dis morning! We go fight o!

I'll communicate the rest on whatsapp. Weldone dear