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IamLEGEND1:
Spyked by Chidexter

CONS- 1. Very Flawed logic: your employers had no reason to use your partner as a bargaining chip because as long as your character was concerned, he had no knowledge of hulk's detention. So they could simply have sent Dexta on the mission as he has been a true professional so far.
Then there was the planting of the bomb in plane. I don't know how far away Kirkland was from your base but 2 days seems like an awfully short time to be able to plant a bomb, travel, complete the mission and return to base.
I know it's a 1000 word story and cuts had to be made to fit in a contained story, but that flaw stood out like a sore thumb to me.

PROS- 1. The bits of humor you threw in- Dorobucci Republic and the analogies - the Adele of the spy world etc.

Movie Most similar to- The man from U.N.C.L.E

IamLEGEND1:
Spyked by Chidexter

CONS- 1. Very Flawed logic: your employers had no reason to use your partner as a bargaining chip because as long as your character was concerned, he had no knowledge of hulk's detention. So they could simply have sent Dexta on the mission as he has been a true professional so far.
Then there was the planting of the bomb in plane. I don't know how far away Kirkland was from you base but 2 days seems like an awfully short time to be able to plant a bomb, travel, complete the mission and return to base.
I know it's a 1000 word story and cuts had to be made to fit in a contained story, but that flaw stood out like a sore thumb to me.

PROS- 1. The bits of humor you threw in- Dorobucci Republic and the analogies - the Adele of the spy world etc.

Movie Most similar to- The man from U.N.C.L.E

Lol, he was detained and I was called to look for the chip which according to employers, it contained sensitive information. After being beaten, obviously he told dem d location. While the bomb I planted it before going on d mission. Cos I knew I'd be killed once am back from the mission anyway. But as you rightly said the word count hindered me from explaining in details.

I really need to work on being able to squeeze in enough details regardless of d number of words allowed. I'm glad you found some part funny, lol. I strive to get better. Thanks

Weldone guys, great read.

Wow! I just realised I'm still in. Huge thanks guys.

beylinko:
I appreciate all the judges and kinwayne for this initiative. God bless u real good. I personally would want to know why I wasn't shortlisted. Not to undermine your judgments but to improve. Can you send it to my email or here. I will appreciate it.

Exactly, still waiting for mine. Cos with what he wrote about rules and all that I followed and made sure I adhere to it

kinwayne:
An upcoming writer isn't one that their story is riddled with grammatical flaws and punctuation errors.

An upcoming writer isn't one that doesn't adhere to given rules and instructions.

No one was picked because of their "already written novels". Go through their stories and you'd see why they were picked.

You don't expect the judges to pick stories that aren't worth reading just because the author is known or unknown.

Please, that mentality that the judges are being unfair should be thrown out the window.

This competition is meant to celebrate upcoming writers(writers who haven't made a name for themselves yet), and also to celebrate all the amazing and beautiful talent here.

No story is judged because of the author.

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I would post the nominations of the final judge later tonight coupled with the final list of participants going to the next round.

K

meneski:
.. I mean ur signature... I like it.

Glad you do, stay strong

meneski:
... Every set back.........

I no even consider dis one as setback sef.

Hmm, abeg judges did you guys take upcoming writers into consideration. Cos with what i am seeing Na people wey get like 100 novels Na him una pick.
Anyway, as I was not picked I need you guys to kindly go through my story and tell me my shortcomings. I wan improve abeg.

kinwayne shey u go pick from outside those nominated by d judges??

Please I'd like to know, the stories shared are they from the ones who qualified or each and every story written?