LarrySun:
IamLEGEND1, I love your reviews. You're doing a great job. Well done, sir.

IamLEGEND1:
Thank you, bro.
I'm reading the stories randomly, so i Haven't read yours yet. But I hear say you na boss around this parts.

IamLEGEND1:
Spyked by Chidexter

CONS- 1. Very Flawed logic: your employers had no reason to use your partner as a bargaining chip because as long as your character was concerned, he had no knowledge of hulk's detention. So they could simply have sent Dexta on the mission as he has been a true professional so far.
Then there was the planting of the bomb in plane. I don't know how far away Kirkland was from your base but 2 days seems like an awfully short time to be able to plant a bomb, travel, complete the mission and return to base.
I know it's a 1000 word story and cuts had to be made to fit in a contained story, but that flaw stood out like a sore thumb to me.

PROS- 1. The bits of humor you threw in- Dorobucci Republic and the analogies - the Adele of the spy world etc.

Movie Most similar to- The man from U.N.C.L.E

IamLEGEND1:
Spyked by Chidexter

CONS- 1. Very Flawed logic: your employers had no reason to use your partner as a bargaining chip because as long as your character was concerned, he had no knowledge of hulk's detention. So they could simply have sent Dexta on the mission as he has been a true professional so far.
Then there was the planting of the bomb in plane. I don't know how far away Kirkland was from you base but 2 days seems like an awfully short time to be able to plant a bomb, travel, complete the mission and return to base.
I know it's a 1000 word story and cuts had to be made to fit in a contained story, but that flaw stood out like a sore thumb to me.

PROS- 1. The bits of humor you threw in- Dorobucci Republic and the analogies - the Adele of the spy world etc.

Movie Most similar to- The man from U.N.C.L.E

LarrySun:
Me? A boss? I wish. I'm just a learner. I read the other stories and I felt ashamed about myself. A lot of research works were evident. I just love competitions, and trying my hands with different genres. Don't read my work with a master's expectations lest you end up being disappointed. People exaggerate a lot.

IamLEGEND1:
Don't sweat it. I am not a very frequent visitor of this section so I have zero preconceptions.
I would have loved to have competed in this thing but I can't write a story to save my life...... My own na just reviews.

IamLEGEND1:
The Falconian by LarrySun

CON- No action scenes. I'm starting to see a pattern emerging- There are those who are into massive action set pieces/excitement(Hazel, Esixlove et al) and those who eschew that to have room for more drama (Barrikade and yourself). I liked the minimalist storytelling with most it being set in a single building and all but you still left the overall setting a bit too ambiguous.

PRO- Again, the ending. I can't help myself when it comes to twists and you delivered in full. The premise wasn't original but it was watertight, helps make the lack of action less obvious.

Movie most similar to- Sicario.

IamLEGEND1:
will be back for more later. Man gatz chop.

LarrySun:
Me? A boss? I wish. I'm just a learner. I read the other stories and I felt ashamed about myself. A lot of research works were evident. I just love competitions, and trying my hands with different genres. Don't read my work with a master's expectations lest you end up being disappointed. People exaggerate a lot.

IamLEGEND1:
Convex by Esixlove


CON- Too much emphasis on firearm models very few people care about, wasting valuable word space in the process which could have been used to develop the story further. The tension is also severely lacking. Also, one too many typos.

PRO Supreme attention to detail. Kinda funny how one of your story's most obvious weakness turned out to be it's greatest strength . you took the time to name The type of nerve agents used by your character and even where they were manufactured- North Korea. Which is actually very believable. Awesome action sequences too.

Movie most similar to - Kingsman: the secret service.

kinwayne:

Please judges. Go through the stories and submit your 7 nominations to my mail. "Chikerelance@gmail.com"

Please do this by tomorrow. Thank you

Lleigh
Divepen1
Kimberlywest
Princesa

princesa:


Will definitely send in today, sorry i couldn't make it yesterday..
...reading up...

LarrySun:
Me? A boss? I wish. I'm just a learner. I read the other stories and I felt ashamed about myself. A lot of research works were evident. I just love competitions, and trying my hands with different genres. Don't read my work with a master's expectations lest you end up being disappointed. People exaggerate a lot.

IamLEGEND1:
A story by Laurelyn


CON- The devil is in the details. A thousand word story only has so much room for exposition. Which brings me to my next point- your dialog. You could've used the dialog to drop important pieces of information like who Keith worked for and where they were based, his nationality, where widow's castle was located. Etc. Helps elevate the reader's chrono-spatial awareness Which leads to a more immersive experience. You leaned a bit too much into character caricatures.....evil boss, shady shadow organisation et al. Could've used more drama and tension.

PRO- Your structuring was excellent. I didn't have to try to remember something I may have missed which made the story flow quite well. While The heist nature of the story may not be the most original premise out there, it was interesting to read.

Movie most similar to- Anything for her.

IamLEGEND1:
Coup d'etat by Drlaykay

CON- Inconsistency in your choice of storytelling perspective. You started your story in the the third person then suddenly switched to the first person. And you don't have to always hold the readers' hands, you need to give readers a little puzzle to decipher on their own: "Covert means secret, 24470 represents highly important assignment, gency culled from emergency and 001 refers to the number one boss." you need to trust that the reader can figure some things out without you spelling it out for him/her. This only led to a bloating of your story: 125 words extra. Generic ending. A number of typos.

PRO- I loved the overarching plot lines all building up to the the same end game. too many moving parts for a story this short but you made it work even if your words went above count. I have no idea if it was meant to be comedic or sad but the protagonist having no testicles made me laugh.

Movie most similar to- White house down (with more diabolical goons).