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There is only one way to pull the crowds to your thread. REGULAR UPDATES.
I know you are trying because your updates are well lengthy but with the space of time between them, its just like you updated just once today.
Try it when you are less busy, drop 2-3 legthy updates and sit back and watch. You'll see the result.
I know you have a life outside Nairaland and you can't be online everytime but you've started this and you have to finish this or your followers go on rampage.
By the way I love your last update.
See you later at the top.

@Kingzpen: This one that updates rolls in tomorrow. Am begining to wonder. How many updates are we talking here?
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I can see Flakkydagirl viewing this thread. How you doing? Folake, Foluke... Which of the two is your name?

Hey guys, tell me what you think now that we are successfully through with Chapter 1.
Chapter 2 starts tomorrow morning.
@Eniqurl and others: The last update is now lengthier than what you saw last.

--continuation--
TIME: 9:05AM
VENUE: OPPOSITE THE ENGINEERING DEPARTMENT BUILDING.
_________________________________
Gradually, the crowds started dispersing after the policemen had
successfully transfered Dayo's corpse to the school's teaching hospital.
"Chioma, what is there for me to do in this life? Chioma answer me
nau." Dolapo wailed as the three friends were trekking back to their
hostel.
"Dolapo, you have to be strong. Afterall, Dayo is our friend to
but our wailing won't bring her back. I know how close you two are and
the relationship that you've built but God knows the best and I know
whosoever that did this won't go unpunished." Chioma replied in a shaky
voice as she tried to hold back the tears that threatened to spill.
Just then a cream couloured Toyota Camry parked beside them.
"Hello ladies." Inspector Clement greeted.
"Hello." Chioma replied rudely.
"I understand what just happened to you guys but I think I can be
of help in a situation like this. Let me give you a ride back to your
hostel." Clement offered.
"We appreciate your kind gesture, but our hostel is only a
stone throw from here." Chioma replied.
"If that is the case lets go there together. Am the officer in
charge of your late friends' case." Clement introduced officially.
"No problems." Chioma replied still holding Dolapo firmly like
she'll fall if left to walk on her own. That moment Chioma is her pillar
of support, how enemies become friends during trying periods. The two
of them never seem to agree on the same thing but the friendship cord is
still there waxing.
+++++Inside their room+++++
Chioma offered Clement a seat just outside their room very close to
the door on the corridor.
"Am sorry my friends won't be able to talk to you. We are all not
feeling too well, am forcing myself to talk to you." Chioma said as soon
as she sat down opposite their guest.

"Tell me the things I need to know about Dayo." Clement requested.
"She was my friend and we've been living together from the time we
gained admission. Everyone of us here met while we were in the secondary
school. Late Hadiza has lived all her life here in the south-west even
though she is from the north, I met her when I came for holidays in my
aunty who live in Lagos. I had my holiday lesson in her school. Dolapo,
Tolani and the late Oladayo all attended the same secondary school. And
the two schools are neighbours." Chioma replied.
Clement jotted somethings down.
"Tell me, when was the last time you girls had a misunderstanding?"
"We have misunderstandings alot but it is bound to happen between
friends. We can't reason alike you know?" She paused.
Clement nodded urging her to continue.
"The last misunderstanding we had was on the day whe Hadiza was
killed. Hadiza accused Tola of misplacing her eye pencil. Girl's fight
sha. You understand what I mean, don't you?"
Clement nodded.
"No matter the misunderstanding, the last thing on our minds is
getting one another killed. We don't have such minds." Chioma added.
"I didn't say that. Do you have a boyfriend?" Clement asked.
"Yes, I do." She replied.
"What about Hadiza and Dayo?" He asked.
"Dayo is engaged to a guy who works in an oil company, he do visit her here when he is in town."
"What's his name?" Clement asked.
"Emmanuel." She replied.
"What of Hadiza?" He asked.
Just then his phone vibrated. It was a text message from Sergeatn Mike.
It reads,
Sir, with the help of the school security, I was able to nab the guy whon Dayo said took Hadiza outside before she found her dead. He is our number one suspect. We need you here asap!
Clement smiled.
"I gotta run now. I'll be back later." Clement said standing up.
"See you later then." Chioma replied.
"Your number please, so I can tell you when I'll be coming." He requested. Chioma typed her number on his cell phone.
"My regards to Dolapo and Tolani. You girls have to be strong."
With this he left hurriedly.

END OF CHAPTER ONE

Expect more updates between the hours of 9 and 10.... But before then, let your comments and criticism pour in, they(your comments) are always the driving force that ginger me to update.

@Eniqurl: I don update o.

God will definitely intervene my sister.

princesssusan: Chai! Diz tragedy too much o feeln dolapo

--continuation--

TIME: 8:30AM
VENUE: OPPOSITE THE ENGINEERING DEPARTMENT BUILDING.
__________________________________________
A female body was lying by the tarred road that linked the school
gate to the other parts of the university. Tens of students were
standing by the dead body with pity. Traces of blood were visible from
her pink top and black jean trouser.
"I know this girl now." A guy said.
"Shut up jor. Which girl do you know? You just like setting pace
in your family sha. Don't tell me you want to be the first person to be
arrested by the police in your family." The girl beside him cut him
short.
"She was the one who screamed at Desmond's party when she saw a
dead body killed by some cultists." The guy said.
"I say shut up. Were you there when the cultist killed the girl.
How sure are you that the girl was killed by the cultist? Kunle, you are
still in 200L for crying out loud, you are two years away from becoming
a graduate. Don't spend that two years in prison o. Lets go." The girl
said holding him by the hand and dragging him away from the scene.
"I saw the guy who killed the girl at the party....."
"Kunle! Are you mad?" She asked.
"Okay o. I've heard you." He said giving up.
The two of them continued walking towards the school gate leaving other
onlookers and sympathisers behind.
Just then a group of four girl ran to the scene wailing.
"Oh my God! Daaaaaaayyyyyooooo!" Chioma screamed immediately she got
to where Dayo's dead body laid. She threw herself to the ground and
laid beside her wailing. The other three joined.
"Dayo! Please don't leave us now. We are three weeks away from our
last paper. Dayo please. We've gone far enough for you to die now.
Dayoooo." Tola cried.
The third girl, Dolapo just stood still trying to relate the scene
before her.
"Noooooooooooooooo!" Dolapo screamed and fainted. Everyone left
what they were doing and ran to Dolapo's aid.
The reason behind Dolapo's reaction was not far fetched. All her
life, she has always known pain, suffering and emotional distress. At
the age of sixteen she lost both her parent at gunpoint when some gunmen
attacked their home one night. Few months later, her father's family
members sent her out of the house accussing her of witchcraft and she
had nowhere else to go except Dayo's house, being her bestfriend. Dayo's
parent accepted her like their own daughter and treated her just the
way her late parents used to treat her. They both gained admission the
same time, all financed by her foster parents(Dayo's parents). How will
her life be now that her friend whom she refer to as her sister is dead.
Dayo is the only child of her parents who at this stage are waiting to
see Dayo graduate and get married to her long term boyfriend who works
in an oil producing company.

When she was eventually revived, she started her own version of
wailing.
"Dayo! wait for me, I must die with you. What's the essence of life
without you? What does the future hold for me. Dayyyyoooooo!
Nooooooooo." She screamed and sympathisers tried to pacify her including
her two friends who were previously wailing too.
Just then the school's security convoy drove to the scene and students
fled for their lives.
"Move back all of you." A man in their usual navy blue uniform
barked at the students.
Chioma succeeded in carrying her small statured friend, Dolapo away
from the scene. Few minutes later, the men of the Nigeria's police force
arrived with an ambulance.
"Welcome Inspectore Clement." The leader of the school's security
team said immediately Clement got down from his own car with Mike.
"When did this happen?" Clement asked.
"I guess it happened overnight." The man replied.
"Wait o! Is this not the girl that came to give us some helpful
information concerning her friend, Hadiza's death?" Clement asked no one
in particular.
"She was the one sir." Mike replied.
Clement kept quiet for a few seconds looking into space. He inhaled
deeply just then he realised he's been shedding tears.

--to be continued--

Hey guys, more updates to come later. Lets say in three hours time, when I must have charged and eaten.....
Kip your comments and criticisms coming.

Yes boss

Why are you like this gan sef?

Eniqurl: Update in a bit abi cuz ur viewinq alrdy.

lol.

Eniqurl: I hope itz minutes

Abi naw.

Eniqurl: I kn u re too nice tu du such

More comments and criticisms.... I'll be back in a few (_) to drop more updates.
fill in the gap.

carry kpomo. No be housefly u dey refer to as eshin shin?

stormybucci: do wetin??

hw e take do am na we wan hear.
[quote
author=stormybucci]oga i see u ooo... **commenting on d last update**
ghen ghen! ghen!! ghen!!! eshin shin carry kpomo [/quote]

No problems ma'am. I upadate regularly because my followers are always on my neck. Am sure you are typing the next update cos I can see you viewing this thread.
[quote
author=candy]Too bad I didn't invite you-my bad. I just edited a mentions list and
posted it. I feel honored to have you here man! You can actually talk
about updating regularly;I can see you update regularly yourself, kudos.
Meanwhile, take all the candy bars you want;it's on the house.



Yea, I live in Ibadan.

Doughnut style: A way ladies pack their hair tightly, first with in a
pony tail. The pony tail is afterwards wrapped in a doughnut shape.
Lovely style if you ask me.[/quote]Now I understand what you mean by doughnut style. Am sure as the story progresses, we'll see meat pie style. lol.

Alma and Ugonna. I won't talk. But I have a feeling Godson is gonna resurface.

@emzypaz: I really appreciate what
you've been doing. But believe me, if this story is good enough people
will vote for me. But all the same, thanks for your contribution.
@Stormybucci, samsondavid and psalmwise: I sight you guys.

Anybody home?

We are still on chapter one. Maybe more killings and more characters ah dun know.

Eniqurl: Beht if all d characterz die, whu wil remain nah ? Dun kil anibdy aqain oh.....weldone sir.

Not bad and yours?

Eniqurl: YH, hw waz ur nyt ?

Snowprince07 I sight you.

I forgot to say this. You are doing a very good job here. Nice story line. You live in Ibadan right?
She packed her hair to a doughnut. That got me laughing. Can you describe it to me?

Even though I wasn't invited and I don't attend events when am not invited but one thing brought me here.
Your name. I hope you'll give me candy while I am here. You see, there is always one way to be successful in story writing here, consistent update is the key. Ask anyboby, they'll tell you.
In other news, d9ty7 was here.

You are doing a good job here but just like someone already pointed out, I can predict what will eventually happen. But you as a writer, am sure you can manouver your writing, maybe bringing in another character(another family) change the plot a little bit but the predicted end will still remain the end but let your readers experience a different plot maybe they'll forget about what they've already predicted. I believe you understand me, you are no novice in story writing.
Just my thoughts tho!

VanTee20 the great. In larrySun's voice; "welcome back."

More updates to come later in the day because I couldn't charge my phone to the fullest. I was updating while charging and so my battery level is 50%.
Let your comment pour in while we wait for the next two to three updates.

Not bad broda.

Onemansquad: ya very wel ,aw wax ur nyt boss

Thank you boss. I really appreciate your comment.
[quote
author=DavidStronger][color=#770077][/color] i av always been b
shadow, but nw i step out following u D9ty7 u r 9ood[/quote]

e tire mee too o.

labaski: ahhh..wahala wa oooo. death here and dere..oga ooo

--continuation--
Clement and Mike hopped into the police car parked outside the CSO's
office and drove off. Things are begining to get complicated and
interesting. First, a certain Mr Kingsley was murdered the previous
week, then some gunmen attcked the police headquarters for reasons best
known to them, few hours later, a terrorist disguising as a bikeman took
Detective Okoro to an unknown destination. The rescue team led by
Sergeant Habeeb was attacked and few policemen escaped the attack, that
same night, a student was killed by some unknown killers.
"Could all this be related?" Clement asked himself as he brought the
car to a halt the moment when the traffic light turns red.
"Seriously sir, the rate at which crime is being committed in this
state is becoming alarming." Mike said to his boss.
"A state which was known for peace is now becoming a shadow of its
former self."
"Which one do we handle first?" Mike asked.
"It is very simple. Kingsley's death and the attack on the police
headquaters including Okoro's abduction are all from one angle while
this student's murder is a different case entirely. We'll start with the
case involving the student, then hopefully it may lead us to the
terrorists. You know we can't do anything concerning the terrorists now
unless Ngozi returns from coma and recounts her ordeal." Clement
explained.
"In few days we'll be through with Hadiza's case. Thank God Dayo is
co-operating with us." Mike added.
Clement only smiled as he ignited the car and drove off. He knew
better than his patner.
+++++++++++++++
Dayo was walking on a deserted road inside the school around the
engineering department building. She could hear footsteps behind her but
she waved off the thougts of it being danger. She was well aware that
every student must have retired to their hostels latest by 8pm for
security purpose because no one wants to be a victim. But the footstep
was becoming stronger and the person seemed to be catching up on her but
she won't stop walking. Just then she took to her heels.
"If you dare take anymore step. You'll have yourself to blame." A
deep masculine voice warned.
She recognised the voice pretty well and so she was less perturbed.
"Deoye. You scared me." She said when she turned back to face her
late friend's boyfriend.
Deoye who stood at 5ft 6inches, well built, fair in complexion wore a
frown as he face his late gilrfiend's friend.
"So you eventually killed her right?" Deoye asked.
"I didn't o. Why will I want to kill my friend who I have dined
with, wined with, suffered with. We've done many thing together why will
I want to kill her?"
"Are you asking me?" Deoye asked brandishing a kitchen knife.
"Deoye, you are scaring me." She complained.
"I don't mean to scare you. I want to kill you." He replied.
"But am not responsible for Hadiza's death." She said. She was begining to raise her voice.
"Fine. You took her to where she was killed."This time Deoye had closed up on her. He stabbed her and dragged her body to a nearby bush where it will be conspicous by daybreak.
He took to his heels since he has accomplished his goal.

--to be continued--

--continuation--
Dayo walked out of the hall and got outside in search of her friend,
Hadiza. She searched franctically for her friend but couldn't find her,
just when she wanted to dial her number she saw a body lying in between
two cars. Curiosity got the better of her and she walked in the
direction of the body.
"Oh! my God." She exclaimed as she saw the body, a girl in a pool
of blood.
"Hadiza! somebody help..... Help." She screamed at the top of her
voice.
Her voice grew so loud that despite the loud music blaring inside the
hall, people still managed to help. Hundreds of students trooped out and
went to check the reason for the screams. What they saw put many away
and they took to their heels while a few who are brave enough put a call
through to the police but they didn't wait for the arrival of the
police because they knew they'll surely pay a price which is chilling in
the police cell for at least twenty four hours.
That was all Dayo saw before she passed out and was rushed to the
hospital by her friends before the arrival of the police.

+++Back in their hostel+++
Chioma was standing near the window tears in her eyes just like
everyone else in the room. They've been mourning the death of their
friend, Hadiza. An easy going girl who hardly talked, she doesn't talk
during lectures, she had no friend in her department neither an enemy.
She was not the shy type but she was an introvert. She only talked when
she is around her friends.
"Seriously, am going home." Chioma announced.
Everyone has been minding their business and silence has taken over
the room until Chioma broke the silence.
"Going home? To do what?" Tola asked.
"Don't you know the school is no longer safe for any of us. Let us
all leave the school for a while and let the police find whoever that
is responsible for Hadiz death. But..." Chioma was saying when she broke
down in tears.
"I agree with you. But its late already. Early tomorrow morning
we'll all leave and attend lectures from home till the time of our
exams." Tola replied.
Just then Dayo's phone rang. Everyone's attention turned to her.
"Hello please who is this? Yes it me Oladayo." She said on picking
the call.
She dropped the call after three minutes.
"The CSO(Chief Security Officer) wants to see me in his office
now." Dayo announced.
"Its almost 8pm." Chioma said.
"Lemme go quickly. I'll be back before nine." She replied as she
wore her flip flop slippers and walked out of the room.
"Dayo wait. We'll all go with you." Tola said.
"Don't bother. I'll be fine." She replied.
+++At the CSO office+++
The CSO, Mr Bankole was seated in his office with the President of
the Student's Union Government and two men.
"Thank God you came. Dayo, I believe this man needs no
introduction." Bankole began. Pointing to the SUG president.
Dayo nodded in affirmative.
"This is Inspector Clement and Sergeant Mike. They are men of the Nigerian police force." Bankole went on.
"Good evening Sirs." Dayo greeted the two men.
"Evening. How you doing Dayo?" Clement asked.
"Am fine sir" She replied.
"We were here yeaterday but we were told you are in the hospital. Hope you are good now." "Perfectly okay." She replied.
"I learnt you are the one who discovered your friend's corpse. Tell us more about it." Clement went straight to the point.
Dayo said all that need to be said about the party, the guy that took the late Hadiza outside to talk but she kept the part when Deoye sent her a message that he'll kill her.
At exactly 9:15pm, Dayo was asked to go. Since her hostel is a stone throw from the CSO's office, she decided to trek down home.
--to be continued--