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I
must commend you for the good job you have done here so far. I noticed
some loopholes and if you won't mind. I'll point them out to you.
1. Is the story a short story or what? Even though I love the way you
made it brief and understandable.
2. Is it a fiction or a life story.
3. Try paragraphing your works or is it my phone?
4. Your spellings are also very important. I can see some mistakes in the names. You wrote Tokumbo and somewhere you wrote Tokunba...
Though this is not a well constructed criticism but we are both
writers and we understand better. I don't need to write thousands of
letters before you understand my points.
There is also another thing I want you to stop. Don't beg readers to
comment, if your story is worth it they'll coment. Mind you its not your
begging that made me comment. So note it!
Above all, you are heading for the top with this wonderful piece. See
you later at the top.

Thank
God you have commented. Now it is a great story.[quote
author=JigsawKillah]it isn't a great story if Jigsaw hasn't commented on
it
so d9ty7 if u don't update before noon what happened in 1923 will repeat
itself[/quote]How I wish I haven't updated. But all the same let that
thing that happened in 1923 repeat itself.

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Good morning guys, how was your night?
@hameenat94, Tolulopegeorge, labaski, Princessusan, seanixking, skono, onosj, Temmytayo20, PrinceAdepoju....
Check back in an hour's time. You'll have something to read.

Now I can see you have a mod behind your back..... Good job.

Thank Jah larrySun is here. Texanomaly is here too? DaveP? This is gonna be fun.

Divepen, remember we're on Nairaland. And you choosed not to work with a mod on this. They should get the main event's thread locked until the D-day.

Lets kip our fingers crossed d story z starting soonest.

good morning guys, hw was your nite?
@seunviju, onosj, skona, tolulopegeorge, temmytayo20, labaski, vibra, seanixking, PrinceAdepoju.... Hope y'all had a nice night rest?

Oluwafumilayo95
Ytee
Queenxstar: Its been a while.
tohero: Long time.
Temmytayo20: Longest time.
JesDivine: How have you been?
Mzmira
irene14
Tolulopegeorge: I saw you viewing the thread.
enemercy
bussyzionite.
I CALL ON YOU GUYS TO CHECK OUT THIS STORY AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK.

sleep well

seunviju: Thanks 4 the update,goodnight

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Abeg no vex... Things can only get better. [quote
author=seunviju]Well a broken introduction is better than a broken
marriage and abeg o shey na just intro dem wan do wey dem dey travel out
go buy tins?Orisirisi huh but D9ty7 dis update no do me o,haba since
all did while but thank you for the updates[/quote]

We'll get update before 12midnight or early tomorrow morning.

I can see rollytee viewing this thread. Waiting ofr your comment.

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Are you a short story lover? Have you checked out this story? If no why don't you check it out now and tell me what you think.
Ayobami195
AliyuOzioma
Aish800
Titiyella
Wizard007
Bhummieluv
Slimmygee
Nnoly
Tescoleps
MuniratAbolani.
Check it out!!!

Cheryluv! That name rings a bell even tho am not sure. I've see your comment once in my thread and that's why ve decided to follow your story and pay you back but don't starve those reading your story.

I can see you heading to the top with this story. With the backing of Kingzpen, PrinceAdepoju and Temitope Daniel and a few others. They have backed some writers here on Nairaland and believe me these writers are topping the chat as I am typing this.
Prince will encourage you with comment so you can update, T.Dan will make your story known and correct your grammers, Kingzpen will tell you all it takes to be successful here and d9ty7 will be here to read your story.
See you later at the top.

I should thank you for being with me.

Vibra: Thanks so much boss

@Seunviju, uthman51, ThaRuthlxx7, Darus5, Trusted, Vibra, Heemah, PrinceAdepoju, Dammygoody and others.. I don update o...

Thanks for understanding jare my sisyer.

Flakkydagirl: I'm vexing with A̶̲̥̅ capital V.But all D̶̲̥̅̊ same i know you've been busy and the phone issue too.


It's good that you're back,i can't wait for you to commence work fully on All in A̶̲̥̅ Circle..

I'll find time to finish REBBECCA nd SIBLINGS...

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Flakkydagirl I can see you viewing this thread. Good morning to you.
But seriously I don't know how to beg you cos I know I didn't make some things right. Sorry for not being on your thread to read or comment. I'll make amends.

Its likely we get up to three updates today but first I have to charge my phone. Lemme drop one update before I charge.
Battery: 55%
Let me use 5% and update then I go and top it up to 100% before we get the third update.

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Abeg no vex with your boy. My phone is the main problem. But no worries am taking the two of them out for repair today, so we'll get more updates.

seunviju: D9ty7 wetin u dey do us no good o,huh

Lets just manage and finish this story with inconsistent update. By the time ALL IN A CIRCLE begins we'll get about four updates per day. Good or bad?

did you send a mail message to me?

Divepen: .
Nothing to say...Oga mii...Tanx for showing up...

A, if you'd remember me saying something about meeting you at the top. Now we are at the top.
Sorry for my absence but I think it is good, reading everything at once is good for a reader like me.
Kip it up. We'll be at the top for a long time.

Divepen: Thanx boss...
How I wish.....

Go on sir.

Waiting for those days, so I can lear new things.
Nice innovative @Divepen

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