Nice story but you need to be consistent. Are you narrating or what? Some places you use "I" some "she or her", I believe if an action or something is being done to the protagonist...it should be he gave "me" a shirt not her since you are using "I" in narrating. And please make corrections on previous updates. I love this story



*hope I didn't talk too much* sabi sabi

kingphilip:
i neva see the reply o

I wonder what could be the problem, send another one pls.
Smoothvee abeg no kill me with laugh




*first lady*

kingphilip:
i'm back again.....see enough cobwebs and cockroaches don full this thread because update no de plenty

BTW fonydear come on go and reply my mail

Yes sir

Nice story...following. But you need to proof-read your previous updates and make corrections

smoothvee:

my 1st lady...baby i kept wondering where u disappeared to ooo.....no commot again oo...show me luv baby!

No transfer no leave, forgive my oga Philip he is giving orders in the kitchen at Preacher's son thread. Am apologising on his behalf, he'll soon be here.



*first lady*

Creativity at its peak, so different from every other on nl. Keep it up

Great work so far Vee, your 1st lady still dey here kampae

This Monday dey slow o, I can't wait to see the end of this lovely piece. Keep it coming Kay, great work.

Uduak u eh, in MS voice, your 1 no dey tire to enter 0

alaafyn:

Na so we see am ooo

Na u know o, luvly piece u have

Wow, your work is great

Hmm this Tunde is bad o

kingphilip:
i'll always be ahead to prepare dish for u now

congrat sha been the 1st lady

Thanks o my oga, now am looking for a P.A

Clemzy16: i hear say calabar girl dey sweet to nyansh wella, no other tribe fit try them. Na true??

Me I don't know what you know o. In MS voice "there is only one way to find out"

smoothvee:

Hehehehehe fony u are welcome...come to the vip stand before they start claiming you...lol
Would you like to dance skelewu with lucas??

Wow red carpet things( walks slowly, swaying my hips all the way to vip stand). Dance sure, only if you are the Lucas.



*am sitting right beside smoothvee, no space for anyother person*

Wait o, am the first lady of this thread dancing skelewu

kingphilip: So wen is da nxt update

Why u reach here before me

kingphilip:
join queue jare wen u turn vip wey i go de serve u personally

Na wa for u o his excellency king philip. Make I join that deparment jare.
Rock accept my application, I go dey cook edikang ikong n ekpang for u. No try calabar girl for kitchen o

I don take front it, keep it coming

Oh I don start late again becos of work load, this part two no shaking I dey follow closely. Oga cook, where breakfast

Wow wish it never ends, pls start part 2 soon and am sure it will only get better. Like I always say U ROCK ALWAYS

Nice writeup Ade, I have been silently enjoying ur story. I think u mixed up something here. "Stop acting as if you are a saint joor, Cynthia rebuked . I thot it shud be Amaka. Keep up,waiting 4 more updates.