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 Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 2:11pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]Nkele let's go to Pride tomorrow |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 2:07pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=nadia_SA]Hhayi asiba sabi Siyaba funa!!! Bobani laba khuluma Nonsense la!!! I dey Vex  [/quote]lol |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 2:02pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Tonylyte: Mumu, allow them to have fun here...the last time i checked, nairaland was owned by seun. No be ya papa get here. bw, u're a lady, ladies dnt behave lyk dat.  Sure you can join. 1 Like |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 1:52pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]But our hip hop is on point[/quote]his hip hop  1 Like |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 1:49pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]Lol Nkele!![/quote]ke tla reng nna |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 1:47pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Chibuebem: LoLI knew it  I aint going nowhere, m a nigerian by default  |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 1:28pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
souldust: how comes SA music isnt too famous in Africa any more. In those days when i was growing up, i listened to Yvonne chakachaka, brenda fasie and mariam makeba. Today, SA musicians arent too famous anymore.lol, I only heard Brenda's song at weddings, grew up in a Christian home. Thanks for carrying the flag with us, God bless you. 1 Like |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 1:25pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]Ong swabisitse watseba!! Didn't expect it from her[/quote]I think I know her problem, but I won't get it into my head. Xenophobia on Nairaland Retla bona |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 1:22pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]Lol okay then! Afternoon sir  [/quote]This is not a smiling matter, you better start packing |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 1:19pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Chibuebem: it means madam...I think. Not sure what language. Remember reading it in a book.so now you guys are going to call us anything you read from the book Make I start packing, Nigerians don't want us here anymore |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 1:15pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=ngwana.mobu]Ja neh!! *claps once*[/quote]eish, ke ntho tse mborang tsago tshwana le tse. |
| Christianity Etc › Re: . by HumbledbYGrace(f): 12:00pm On Oct 04, 2013 |
Mintayo: Please when people tell you that they want to give their lives to Jesus,pls and pls,don't tell them about any church pls.AMEN |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 11:54am On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=1,2]Eitha[/quote]Helo you |
| Foreign Affairs › Re: foreigners chillout joint. by HumbledbYGrace(mod): 11:54am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Tumisang: Thobela ngwana Sekhukhuni. ke rato Motlalentoa, feela fane a swanetse go chenchwa, ebe; Chaka. Kapa joang |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 11:48am On Oct 04, 2013 |
ledafaze: Lesowhat?Gone are those days, we know too much of our country that we do not appreciate it anymore. I had a lovely dream lastnight, I was with a certain Nairalander a valley flooded by summer rains....and I didn't want it to end, I wish I was a prophet lol. Good morning to you and the house 1 Like |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:39am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Dark Chocolate By t-flow You young man, got it all right, except the points you might have scored with madam Ishi. Great piece there, dark chocolata....just the way I like it. The Journey to greatness. By Numero Touching story Numero, however try working on tense and dialogue. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:38am On Oct 04, 2013 |
MOMENT OF TRUTH BY DAMEX333 I see some developments, even better than your current work. But we still have a long way to go hey, remember Rome was not build in one day, you will soon get it right. The plot was catchy, lol and your theme potrait that of a Christian. However, you still need to work on your punctuation, your tense and your spacing. Good use of words too, you played around with them well. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:35am On Oct 04, 2013 |
<Two wrongs > By Sambroose. You know what killed this great African work? You have a great theme, great persuasion and a theme that catched my fancy but your ignorance ruined everything. Please study literary works, that will help in improving and on how to write a short story. I felt like I was reading a poem. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:34am On Oct 04, 2013 |
A JOURNEY TO AKURE By Nastydroid My darling, go and read, actually if you want to make it in this wild, wild west, study literary works. Dialogue, a huge disaster. Plot, you did your homework and so was with the theme. The story was good but an epic failure in english literature. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:33am On Oct 04, 2013 |
PINKY SNICKETS: SERIES OF UNFORTUNATE EVENTS. By Nuges11. Romantic comedies always rank tops to me. Though you followed suit with the dream kinda thingy, which I had to admit got me yawning. You scored points with your prose, and you have already set high standards for yourself I hope you will maintain your position?Please send me a link to your current story if there is any, your work makes me laugh which is good for my health. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:32am On Oct 04, 2013 |
SOON TO BE MRS ADEBAYO Rubyspice Rubyspice: We spend the evening together and I feel so at peace and complete. As it grows dark, I knew she had to go home. I didn't want her to leave but she had to, so I steal a kiss from her lips to keep me going until I see her again.This my dear killed the whole story. You mixed tense in a way that disappointed me, because I loved your work. But you couldn't maintain the tense choice, that's why I advice people to always write in past tense when narrating. Its easier that way. You could have been in my top five but just one paragraph and I couldn't overlook the mistake. Hope you do better next time. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:30am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Search for Mona lisa Sammyhoe Can I call you BigEnglish? Like the one in Iyawo Nylon bag?  Your work potrays what this competition is about, your a great craft-man because you crafted your story well, took your time to give me something that helped to increase the level of my vacab. Good job but bear in mind that most times if a reader is reading for pleasure, when s/he gets too many big words clustered in a paragraph s/he looses interest in reading the whole thing. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:29am On Oct 04, 2013 |
What lurks in the dark WHAT LURKS IN THE DARK! (2,500 words) By kslib... ........ In Africa we have types of scary stories but I am yet to read a vampire story, even if its just in a dream. Pardon my ignorance but your work  All iz not well my brother. Spacing, I was like this before. I submitted my script without spacing and it was among the ones that ended in a trash bin. I was told plainly if I want to make it in writing I should go and read first. I guess the climax is when Mike was bitten on the neck right? Your pesuasion didn't really do it for me. Somethings need to be believeable, how can a guy, go to another guy's house because he couldn't sleep Description; Madam Ishi's lessons have really paid off, I doff my head when it comes to her descriptive prowess. Good job there. Dialogue, please google how to do right by it, you are still lacking. Repetion of words, its a no, no in one paragraph. I believe you can do better if you put effort and READ. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:28am On Oct 04, 2013 |
The haunted road By Royver Boy you are the bomb, I had to check you profile,  but you don't have a lot here on nl right? I am your fan, I was hooked from the starting line to the last full stop. well done.The antagonist got what was coming, foolish idiot, your description of the protagonist and the former was vivid and capturing. Pay attention to how you arrange your dialogue though, because it plays a major part in a story. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:26am On Oct 04, 2013 |
MY TRAVEL ADVENTURE Plainmirror Great story, reminds me of a bus journey to mugai or something. Your work however shows that you do not read. Please read as much as you can because there is potential here. I stopped using the red line but you will see where your mistakes are when you compare your work with the edited one. Your diction didn't catch my fancy, you clustered words together in one paragraph, you failed to put quotation marks in your dialogues, you failed to skip a line or atleast a new paragraph to indicate a change of speaker. Your work was confusing!! One more thing, your epiphany got me, atleast you found a solution. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 11:24am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Ok, Mynd you can copy the Analysis I am going to make starting with this post. THE MAN WITHIN By Miss Fibre Great fantasy piece, but when I read fantasy, I expect suspense, a theme that will catch my fancy. Work well plotted but the climax was not that fancy, it didn't move me at all, though the solution was ok. I guess it has to do with your theme in the first place. A short story has to accomplish its purpose in relatively few words and sister you need to pull up your socks. Spacing is on point, paragraphing is also great and your use of dialogue is superb, you just need to put more effort, and pay attention to plurals and singulars, also work on your punctuation. |
| Literature › Re: Short Story Competition by HumbledbYGrace(f): 8:28am On Oct 04, 2013 |
[quote author=Mynd_44]For the sake of order, I think each judge should finish his/her assessments before I post another. That is a makes the arrangement a lot better. So you should finish yours first and then I will take the next judge. If I start with Mazi then switch to Princesa and then Ishilove then back to Mazi, it make the whole show look confusing. My silly thoughts though.[/quote]Mynd44 |
| Christianity Etc › Re: . by HumbledbYGrace(f): 8:25am On Oct 04, 2013 |
The Christian Ministry is moving, God is great. |
| Family › Re: . by HumbledbYGrace(op): 8:18am On Oct 04, 2013 |
timpaker: I'm sorry about your lost.Thank you. |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 8:10am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Reyginus: Wow! Good for you. The country is 19 or more than?It got its freedom from Britain in 1960, but sadly we got nothing to show off. |
| Christianity Etc › Re: The Christian Chatbox ( sticky) by HumbledbYGrace(op): 8:04am On Oct 04, 2013 |
Reyginus: Lol. I'm not hausa o. I'm an FBI. I was born and bred in hausaland. Good morning everyone. Good morning And Happy Independence day to my country. |
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