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stefikal:
Is KingzPen still on here? A guy on my facebook list seems to be plagiarising his story and some other stories.

Stefikal? Where in Saturn have you been? Missed you much Dear...

Happy to have you back... And abeg who is the Baba panelbeating our work? Name pls...

Awesome Boss...

Lakeshizu:
action about to start

Yes Oooooo... Ghen Ghen!

macpetrus:
Sanmi need to come home.. It think salewa is losing it!!!

Yh Yh... Hez back now!

afamjb:
first to read and comment.... make oga sanmi continue d war for im own house nice update mr.kingz.

Loooool... I do appreciate your comment... Next Update loading... God Bless You...

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TO BE CONTINUED...

D9ty7:
...considered a great writer like Kingzpen.

I wish... Abeg drop next update jor...

Write On Boss, But Take Time Off To Better Your Craft...

Keep The Flag Flying...

Following...

D9ty7:
Why should I write something that we already know? I am passing accross a different message.

Boss, there isn't any new story again o... None... We writer must get more creative to weave around the old ones... You can tell the story in another way, and not necessarily everything that happened in the year... Writing about what people know makes them love your story the more cos they will easily relate...

My 2 kobo again...

Missmossy:
Nice work KingzPen, i really wanna know whats gonna happen to Dede, Ireti, Sanni and Salewa.

Oooooooooshey Dearie... More to come...

Awesome Plot! I'm so interested in the story and how it unfolds...

Now, to my little suggestions:
1. Try showing more than telling... Make us see the events ourselves... Let's feel it... Let's hear the sound... Don't just tell the whole story, show it...

2. Use your dialogues properly... It's not compulsory that every persons on a scene must talk... Too many dialogues makes the story wordy and less active...

3. Look into your character development... From the first paragraph, you have introduced three characters, who are already much into the story... Take it character by character so that we your readers can bond with their person...

Those are my two kobo suggestions... And above all I respect your works...

Keep The Flag Flying Boss...

I remain ever loyal...

macpetrus:
Nice Update!!!

Thankz Brov...

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To Be Continued...

EPISODE 26 ON www.kingzpen.com

Would post it here by 7:00 P.M

Been quite busy...

Thankz And Love Y'all...

Awesome Innovation... Love It...

Nmeri17:
Nigga where have u been??

Work has tied me down like a sacrificial lamb...

Lakeshizu:
Some of us still dey loyal oh Jungle don mature

You na sure person na... Just need to know if people still love d story... Been busy like kilode, but once I know dah someone cares then I would look for a way...

I miss my Day-1 fans... Awesome supporters... Pushing me pass my limits...

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To Be Continued...

Happy Vals Day Peeps... Love Y'all...

Fembleez1:
hospital/ˈhɒspɪt(ə)l/


We say 'a' hospital not 'an' hospital



hotel/həʊˈtɛl/

There has been a tendency to write and speak of "an hotel", as if the h were silent, but if you want to write and speak good english, do not be afraid of "a hotel".

Think of all the nouns you can, starting with a sounded("aspirate" h. Do you prefix them with 'an'? Of course not.

Where the h is silent, as in honour, hour, the article 'an' is correct.


Another tendency is to write "an unique article", instead of "a unique article", which most people actually say. This, too, is incomprehensible, for nobody would write about "an unicorn" /ˈjuːnɪkɔːn/.



Stuff46

Move On... Unto the next thing Bro... Stop trying to prove a point... Just swallow the comments, digest it in private and keep delivering...

Keep The Flag Flying...

So enjoying this story... Keep the flag flying Boss...

At this stage of my life, can't imagine me begging or pleading to be unbanned or what-is-it-called sef... NL na my house? Abeggi!

If you're banned for speaking your mind, it only shows one thing, YOU GAT A STRONG WILLED HEART! Take this heart and create a platform for yourself, perhaps Seun doesn't have two heads, you can set up yours...

It makes me wanna puke when I see people begging to be released from NL prison... Mptchewwwww!

Abeg, nobody can stop your shine, not even NL mods nor even NL Boss or even NL itself...

Sure, this little snippet would be tested inside the furnace of NL rules to confirm if I'm also eligible to be ban...

Lmaooooo!

That laugh was in Isoko!

Can anyone ever consume the whole water in the sea?

Nah!

In my little busy mind are loads of characters playing all around wanting to come play on my paper.

Why won't I let some out?

Because you are so rich and scared of thieves, so you will close down your company in order to prevent them from stealing from you? Mbanu!

I believe any story written on NL, fresh from the brain, still needs a second, third, fourth touch to be perfect. So why stop writing your 'synopsis' cos of a mere thief that doesn't know your characters, your plots, scenes and all...

As for me Ooooo, if I get time, I will keep posting what comes to my head as a story on NL.... GOD SEES MY EFFORT AND HE DEFINITELY WILL REWARD ME... HE'S ACTUALLY THE ONE THAT BLESSES BOTH THE PLAGIARIST AND THE WRITER...

ABEG KEEP THE FLAG FLYING!!!

Awesome Work Boss... Following You...

Keep The Flag Flying...

I don't do this, but just have to... First, it seems you have lost track on something, and it all appear to me that you wanna crack your readers only. Don't write cos you wanna make people laugh or just because you wanna write, but write to pass a message...

Secondly, your characters kinda talk and reason alike, which shouldn't be so. Take time to do a proper character analysis before writing. Know each of your character very well, well enough to show us who they really are, their flaws, strength, likes and dislikes, etc.

Lastly, try not to do a direct description, it's quite cliche. Try to be explicit or do your description with the eyes of a character or perhaps your protagonist. The way you described the landlady is too direct and not quite attractive.

Above all, you have really done a nice job... Keep it up...

Still Following...

Lakeshizu:
yes boss I miss you, honestly if i had your contact I will have put a call through. Welcome back once again

Missed you more Pal... My number is on page 0... ;-)

Thankz Bro, Happy New Year!... Itz really been a while... Happy to be back...

Lakeshizu:
My oga Happy New Year sir, glad to see you are back

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TO BE CONTINUED...

I vote Kinwanye...