emperorfidel:


Another boss breezes by. Kit I hail oooo .... bros.

Lmao...boss keh? btw,i'm a girl. Nice story, scratch that, great story,save for a few errors. i'm so followin.

Hmmm.....

toluwanmi:
tnx for d update.too short sha

I know! bt jux manage it

Onemansquad:

oga/madam oya go redraft dis into a blockbuster we are waiting

*sighs* i've been super busy tho...i wl continue,bt patience z d key.

LarrySun:
One of the shortest stories I've ever read.

Wow! Look who we have here!
Bless my soul!
Thanks for stopping by!

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D9ty7:

I am good at ignoring such comments.
How have you been? And are you still up to date with your story?

I trust you nah..
I haven't lost interest yet sha..You've been incommunicado...like very much....

tecno4life:
This thread, D9ty7 fans and friends, and even this story is losing it. I dunno what happened but I'm not just feeling it anymore normally I refresh this page up to 200 times a day but now I can go a week without opening it. Maybe it's cause of you D9ty7, I know you are kinda busy but c'mon what's this all this days I missed only to meet two pages more and two updates, if it were to be all in a circle o would have met up to the pages with up to 8 updates everyone is losing it
Lemme go back to my Dan Brown collection just remembered it's been a pong time I read Angels and Demons.

Hey,the story hasnt lost its touch... its very intact and watch it,comments like yours goes a long way in discouragin the writer...

Divepen1:
*she would had died- have died



You are joking about that being the end. If you stop there we will sue you to Ikotun( court)

Thanks......its now modified.

PLs, don't take me to court ..........tnz for stoppin by!!

kingphilip:
Few drinks gone down, if only she knew it would be her last.She was tipsy and pressed at the same
time

Hmmm that last part is making me to fear for ha but it should serve as a lesson to somebody out there that you shouldn't change or trade ur good morals for gossips because some people out there are striving to be like you and are regretting the past they have lived and are looking for second chance of make right there wrongs

And also we should watch our jokes too because if not for the expensive playful joke amaka made to uju she might not have slipped off

Kitme I love this piece
Keep it coming

Thank you King!
It means a lot...I appreciate

TrishaP:

Writing is not my thing. I'm just giving it a try...that's why.

Its good tho'
Is this ur first time of writing? If yes, you're on the right track....
Following tho

KingzPen:
How could that be the end? No possible! Unfair to live both the character and we the readers hanging on the thin rope of this story's suspense.

Nice story you've got... Love it...

The great king commented on my story ......I'm honoured...Boss!
Actually, I was tired of the mushy mushy romance I was writing and decided to delve into something like this.......
Your comment means a lot...Thanks a bunch!!

Its noon, already nah..

Following....... but you're swerving between tenses sha, it's all good tho.

Skimpledawg:
More!!!

My newest pal on here is asking for more updates.
Hmm*scratches hair*
Truth be told, I have no intention of turnin it into a story, but at your insistence, I will build it up in a day or two...
Thanks!!!

Skimpledawg:
Wat da heck!!! Like cwiosly, d end? after blowing my mind away wt palpable tension.... Damn, i expected more...
Onemansquad n stuff46, coman read dz blockbuster
D use of 'mum' would av bn better dan d 'mummy' u used.... #my2cents

Thanks, i'm modifyin it right away..

Onemansquad:
I hope this story has part 2

I hope so too.

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It wasn't everyday that her River of joy splashed bountifully, infact it doesn't happened often.
Especially when her mum had commended her on based on her culinary skills. She had been bugging and pleading with her to allow her practice what she had learnt over the years, but her mummy had refused vehemently, but today, her mummy gave her the 'go ahead'.
Giddy with joy, she strolled into the living room after escorting her parent out. They were going for the monthly Night of praise in their church.
To her unutterable amazement, She saw two hefty looking giant men. They gave her the impression of gentleman. They sat contentedly, they looked so homely, one would mistook them for the house-owner.
'Erm-what do you wa.....
She was interrupted with a wave of hand from one of them, She stared at them with great terror, bundle of shivers running down her spine.
She looked at them again, One had this fearful impression written on him, an old red rag was tied round his head, He had a big scar that ran from the back of his ear to the side of his mouth, He seemed to be cut by flints and briars, as he limped and shivered, glared and growled menacingly towards her. His teeth chattered and rebounded in his head, while the second guy was bald-headed, he looked so innocent, but she knew he was evil.
'What do you want?' She asked fearfully.
After darkly looking at his leg and at her,several times, he took her by both arms and tilted her back as far as he could hold her, her eyes looked most helplessly up into his, while he looked most powerfully down into hers.
'We have a job for you' He said and released his grip on her arm.
She cautioned herself, She meant to say 'I don't need your job, just let me go', but what came out was 'A job?'
'Yes, Silly' The bald-headed guy shoved her against the wall angrily and exhaled some puff of smoke directly into her nose.
'But we will give you the details on our way out' He said with a naughty smirk.
'Our way?' She asked with some kind of unknown boldness.

The air of her boldness caught him offguard, Unable to arrive at any satisfying corporal punishment to send a message to her, that they were not joking. He suddenly had a brain wave and strangled her roughly. She was frozen with fear.
He let go of her and she dived into a cough fit, she was suffocating, she would have died if she had spent a minute more in his hands.
'What do you want?' She asked, pitifully
She was kept quiet with a strong tilt against the wall. She was dreadfully frightened.
With a threatening shake of head, they held her and left. She knew that minute that she was doomed.

---The End--

HBD LARRYSUN, Finally i've seen d face behind name...good!

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LarrySun:
*Chapter Three - I (Continued)*
"See yourself as the tyre of a vehicle. It rolls and spins, it gathers moss and dirt in its teeth as it moves, but it still arrives at its destination in the end. Never mind the dirt and suffering that would stick on you along the way, just be focused

Word of life!!!
Let's not get carried away by the plot only, let's endeavour to sieve out the underlying life message, it carries.
Nice one, Boss...........Ride one!
More intellects and wisdom.

Still no update?? It's well.....