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Re: Red Ashes by comelyJummy(f): 3:25pm On Feb 08, 2017
Johnsown1:


Lol, i haven't seen her today though, comely jummy dear where are u.
I need the introduction of the characters and their relationships for easy understanding.
Thanks prettyhurts for the introduction of characters. Seriously J1 what have you been doing on this thread?

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Re: Red Ashes by motawlahnee(f): 3:41pm On Feb 08, 2017
Mehn! This story is mind blowing... I finally got to page 84.... Madam Chumzypinky #wehdonma

I love your tory well well.... E dey sweet me for body.... Dey totori my thoughts

God bless you and your family kiss
Re: Red Ashes by Nmaglit: 3:46pm On Feb 08, 2017
nice one dear keep it up

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Re: Red Ashes by Johnsown1(m): 3:54pm On Feb 08, 2017
comelyJummy:

Thanks prettyhurts for the introduction of characters. Seriously J1 what have you been doing on this thread?
Noting dear,just looking for u and weting to read the story
Re: Red Ashes by Tpresh(f): 5:13pm On Feb 08, 2017
wizsolzy:


U r welcome. Oya take popcorn
Thanchu jawe
Re: Red Ashes by Tpresh(f): 5:28pm On Feb 08, 2017
Thanks for the update ma
Re: Red Ashes by Tpresh(f): 5:29pm On Feb 08, 2017
Thanks for the update ma
God will continue to bless u for us
Re: Red Ashes by crazo(m): 5:38pm On Feb 08, 2017
chumzypinky I was banned for a few hours so I couldn't respond to the allegations leveled against my humble self. To everyone that joined in the struggle I say aluta continua Victoria ascerta. Back to our able moderator, you said comments now and I gave you comments, you didn't specify the type you wanted but since you've pointed it out, my able office will put that into consideration another time, but you also enjoyed my comments don't lie. And as for those that saw what I did as childish, I apologize even before you air your opinions, we all need some unseriousness sometimes. As regards the story is it really possible for a lady to have kainene' type of temperament??
She is always making dumb decisions IMO.

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 6:08pm On Feb 08, 2017
crazo:
chumzypinky I was banned for a few hours so I couldn't respond to the allegations leveled against my humble self. To everyone that joined in the struggle I say aluta continua Victoria ascerta. Back to our able moderator, you said comments now and I gave you comments, you didn't specify the type you wanted but since you've pointed it out, my able office will put that into consideration another time, but you also enjoyed my comments don't lie. And as for those that saw what I did as childish, I apologize even before you air your opinions, we all need some unseriousness sometimes. As regards the story is it really possible for a lady to have kainene' type of temperament??
She is always making dumb decisions IMO.
lol
Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 7:06pm On Feb 08, 2017
Tpresh:

Thanchu jawe

U r welcome.

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:28pm On Feb 08, 2017
Update comes up tomorrow morning guys. Gudnyt! Time for the oda room
Re: Red Ashes by motawlahnee(f): 9:38pm On Feb 08, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Update comes up tomorrow morning guys. Gudnyt! Time for the oda room

Awhn.... Was really expecting an update tonight.. Anyways,enjoy the oda room but be careful with our baby that's inside of you wink
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:03pm On Feb 08, 2017
wizsolzy:
It was becus of d prayer session we held for jolade to receive sense. Dat was y she had a change of hrt.
grin.Yea we tnk GOD our prayer was answeredgrin
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:04pm On Feb 08, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Update comes up tomorrow morning guys. Gudnyt! Time for the oda room
pls were is d oda rum.
Re: Red Ashes by Rhayne(f): 10:40pm On Feb 08, 2017
boffinjay:
pls were is d oda rum.
It is somewhere in Zamunda grin
Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 10:45pm On Feb 08, 2017
Chumzypinky:
Update comes up tomorrow morning guys. Gudnyt! Time for the oda room

za oza room..i know say u must to born football team.. pls tell ya daughter she is me val grin grin grin grin am applying officially
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:45pm On Feb 08, 2017
Rhayne:

It is somewhere in Zamunda grin
oya abeg gimme a brief description of d place
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 6:52am On Feb 09, 2017
wizsolzy:


za oza room..i know say u must to born football team.. pls tell ya daughter she is me val grin grin grin grin am applying officially
no evil fashioned against my daughter shall not prosper and every tongue that rises against her in judgement shall be condemned
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 7:20am On Feb 09, 2017
NATHAN.
And so i stared at Nene. Wondering what was going to become of our relationship now she knew the type of person i am, or rather the type of person i was. Would she ever believe i changed? Wouldnt she think that i might one day treat her the way i treated Jolade?
I closed my eyes and a tear fell. I couldnt say a word. My whole being shook. I had lost Nene. Forever. Or so i thought.

I felt a hand on my shoulder and i opened my eyes. Kainene stood in front of me. Then she mouthed 'why did you?'

I looked down again.

'why did you do what you did? You ruined that girl's life!'

I just shook my head.

'you're such a heartless person Nathan and you truly deserve to suffer for your sins! Who knows? You might even be the one who arranged for her to be raped that night!'

My brows went up instantly 'what?'

'yes! Because with you all things are possible' she walked back to the couch and sat on it.

'i'm not surprised at all Kainene. Because you always think the worst about me. Why should i try to defend myself when the woman who clearly claims to love me would never believe my side of the story or even try hearing me out' she shifted uncomfortably.

'why should i try to believe you or even hear your side of the story? When all you've done is bring me pain. Why didnt you tell me about all you did to Jolade? This poor girl went through alot in your hands. And i wont be surprised if she doesnt stop fighting for you. Because she deserves you as compensation. Afterall you put her through, you ought to take responsibility for her pregnancy dude. Because whether indirectly or directly, you're responsible for her pregnancy, you heartless beast!'

'yes call me whatever you like! Thats who you are anyway. You never cease to sharpen your mouth at every little problem. You should be happy i love you, i love you so much with all my heart, else, i would have long left you alone. What kind of man is going to tolerate you with this kind of insultive mouth you have? What do you even think of yourself as? Miss Nigeria? You think you're the next best thing to Fried Rice dont you? Rubbish! Nonsense! I've had enough of your shitty and bratty attitude Kainene, i've had enough!'

'are you trying to call me a brat?' she rose on her feet 'if i'm a brat, then what are you? A toothless barking dog'

'i accept. And i wont try to deny it. I wont call you names because i dont deserve wasting my time. I'm leaving. And its completely over between us' i picked up my phone and car keys from the table.

'it was already over even before you said it'

I paused. My heart shattered. I wondered if she wasnt affected at all. Because i was greatly affected. No one knew how much i truly loved Kainene.
I looked at her one more time. And i walked away.

***

A MONTH LATER.
KAKA.
'this one wey you just dey blow upandan so. Hmm, wetin dey sup na? You sure say you never carry?'
I teased Kainene as we took seats in the cafe shop and made our orders.

'rather i'd say its evidence of good living'

'or evidence of good servicing' i teased again.

She slapped my arm 'naughty girl. You'll never change'

'at all. Soldier go soldier come but Kaka remains kakacious'

She started laughing. Just then our orders were brought. Cheese cake and coffee as we had both ordered. I noticed the way Kainene wrinkled her face when she sighted the cake, more like she was puking.

Then she suddenly rose on her feet, hands over her mouth and ran towards the direction i knew was the restroom due to the fact that we frequented this shop everytime.

I went after her.

I found her vomiting in the sink. She kept coughing and coughing and i had to start rubbing her back 'God, what is happening nah? Kainene, are you sure you're okay? You're not sick?'

She rinsed her mouth and face with water 'i want to go home. I'm very tired and weak'

'come oo,' she supported her head on my shoulders 'have you taken a pregnancy test?'

She quickly raised her head and looked at me 'what are you talking about?'

'i am very serious. Because i dont understand you anymore. Infact come,' i held her hand and dragged her out. I met the waiter who had served us standing by the table obviously waiting for her money. I retrieved some naira notes from my purse and handed it to her.
Then i took Kainene to the car and we drove straight to a pharmacy. I bought a pregnancy strip. And then we drove back to her home.

She kept wondering what i was up to. But i knew what i was doing.

'pee on it' i instructed.

'but...'

'come this girl, no waste my time oo. Pee on it jhor! Or does it look like i would waste my time looking at your rotten pussy?'

'you dey craze. My own and your own, which one clean pass?' i laughed and she peed on it.

When i raised it up and inspected it, my eyes bulged 'two strips'

TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by heemah(f): 8:26am On Feb 09, 2017
So Nene don join Mummy Chumpzy's club? Wehdone Ma!!!

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Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 8:26am On Feb 09, 2017
Chumzypinky:

no evil fashioned against my daughter shall not prosper and every tongue that rises against her in judgement shall be condemned

lol... grin grin grin grin eyaf not told me eyaf join celestial church nd u r now a prophetess .....cant a young boy propose again.....my fellow single brothers mk una judge dis matter

Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:28am On Feb 09, 2017
wizsolzy:


lol... grin grin grin grin eyaf not told me eyaf join celestial church nd u r now a prophetess .....cant a young boy propose again.....my fellow single brothers mk una judge dis matter
abeg shift go front because u jst dialled a wrng numba
Re: Red Ashes by Toshiba49ja(m): 8:32am On Feb 09, 2017
Chumzypinky:

no evil fashioned against my daughter shall not prosper and every tongue that rises against her in judgement shall be condemned

Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 8:35am On Feb 09, 2017
Chumzypinky:

abeg shift go front because u jst dialled a wrng numba

did u not read wrong number by auntie racheal? grin grin grin grin i like dis kind of wrong number

Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:55am On Feb 09, 2017
NATHAN.
'goodmorning Nath'

I raised my head up and smiled 'Myra! Welcome dear. And goodmorning to you too. I came to work before you today'

'i'm so sorry boss, something...'

'did you just call me boss?'

'sorry, Nath. Something came up and i had to take my time. How was your night?'

'fine and yours?'

'mine was extraordinarily awesome. I dreamt about you'

'are you teasing me?'

'what do you think?' she winked at me.

Myra was not just my secretary but my friend. She understood me very well and she never judged me unlike Kainene would. Such a beautiful down-to-earth lady. Though sometimes i suspect she had feelings for me. But then i waved it off.

She dropped a flask on my table 'whats in for me this time around?'

'lets just say your favourite. Jollof rice and turkey'

'yay!' i grinned 'thats my wonderful secretary talking'

'should i feed you?'

'no. I dont want the workers getting the wrong idea' she laughed 'anyway, are you free tonight? I wanna go clubbing, been a while and i dont want to go alone'

'i'm free whenever you need me!' she grinned again 'oh boss...Nathan, thank you. But bills on you oo'

I laughed 'of course, bills on me'
I opened the flask and the delicious aroma wafted through my nostrils and i couldnt resist the temptation to eat as my stomach already made a loud noise.

I scooped the first spoon. Delicious as usual. Reminded me of Kainene's food. I waved the thought of her out of my mind 'Myra, wont you join me?'

'nah. I've got loads of work to do'

'well i insist you join me. Because i dont trust you ladies anymore. Come closer, even if its just a spoon, let me feed you so that if its poisoned, we would be rest assured we're dying together'

'lol. Alright' she came closer and i fed her.

'one more time' i fed her again. This time i raised my head when i noticed someone standing by the door.
I opened my mouth when i saw her, the woman that has haunted my dreams. Kainene. But then she turned away and left immediately she saw me.

I quickly stood up and went after her. I finally caught up with her at the car pack. I held her hand 'Nene' i was breathing fast.

'what is it?' she asked angrily and eyed me contemptously. That was when i remembered we were still at loggerheads with each other. I let go of her hand instantly.

'i saw you in my office right now. But you just walked away, what is it? Why did you come? You have a business proposal or something?'

She hit my chest 'you dog! Go back to your LovePeddler you casanova... And leave me alone' she made to enter her red highlander but i held her hand.

'dont you dare! Kainene, i can tolerate you calling me names but i cannot tolerate you insulting Myra, is that understood? Dont call her names because she hasnt done anything wrong to your rude and annoying self!'

'just go back to your lover you sickler! Go away!'

'yes she's my lover! So bloody what? What has that got to do with you? Listen Kainene, dont you ever, ever in your entire life call her names ever again. Its uncalled for, if such a thing repeats itself next time, something really bad and unexpected is going to happen, trust me'

'and i really trust you. Because a guy who can drop a lady off at a cementary at such an ungodly hour is capable of anything'

'thank God you know' i put my hands in my pocket and turned to leave.

'is she better than me?' she asked softly.

I stopped in my tracks. Thoughts of the blood convenant we made the day i disvirgined her came back to me. No, Kainene was better than Myra. Or maybe it was because i loved and still love her. Myra was a nice and a good girl, a good friend, but then Kainene was my love.

I turned back to her and in the coldest tone i said 'more than you can ever imagine' i turned back again.

'what about...what about the oath we took?' her voice was shaky now and i could tell she was crying.

'that?' i turned to her again 'that has been annulled a long time ago'

'have you had sex with her?'

'who?'

'your...Myra?'

I swallowed hard 'yes i have'

'and you love her?'

'yes i do. More than i've ever loved every other person'

'and you're happy with her?'

'happy is an understatement. I'm fulfilled'

'and she's the one you want to spend the rest of your life with?'

'exactly'

At this point, it looked like she couldnt take it anymore. And she started crying. I felt bad for lying to her or making her cry but she deserved it.

'that blood oath was useless! It was useless! Useless! Useless!' she kicked the tire of her car with her high-heeled shoes.

'yes, extremely useless' i said in a cold tone, trying hard not to portray any emotions.

'so i think this is where we draw the curtain then' she sobbed 'goodbye Nathan. Have a nice life'

'and you too'

She entered her car and drove away. I looked at her one last time from her opened window. Then i slowly walked back into the company.

TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:55am On Feb 09, 2017
wizsolzy:


did u not read wrong number by auntie racheal? grin grin grin grin i like dis kind of wrong number
my dear d kind wrong number wey u dial no be here
Re: Red Ashes by ladyverere(f): 8:57am On Feb 09, 2017
Nene, doesn't know what true love is. If she knew, she will understand that you gotta love the good side and bad side. Nobody is perfect, least of all, her. We're all entitled to our past, no matter how murky it may be. True love would have given Nathan a 2nd chance. But then, Nene has a chip on her shoulder the size of Kano so I am not surprised.

But this puking as a symptom of pregnancy is overrated joo. I never experienced it in any of pregnancies, not even the infamous morning sickness. But then, I guess I was lucky.

Well done Chumzypinky you are getting back the vibe but still work on it.

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Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 8:58am On Feb 09, 2017
Chumzypinky:

my dear d kind wrong number wey u dial no be here

lol... auntie chumzy ..eya really stuborn...but i will not give up my proposal grin grin grin grin

Re: Red Ashes by wizsolzy(m): 9:01am On Feb 09, 2017
auntie chumzy update naaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa sad sad sad sad sad sad lipsrsealed lipsrsealed lipsrsealed abi d tori dn fiwis...
i want to see were nathan d keke will say i do...

Re: Red Ashes by abefe99: 9:06am On Feb 09, 2017
this is getting tougher ao I wish dey won't end like dis because true love never die tanq sis ao was ur night
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:13am On Feb 09, 2017
KAINENE.
'what are you saying? So you mean you aint gonna tell Nathan about your pregnancy?'

'not at all' i stirred the tea with the teaspoon having no appetite at all.

'whats wrong with you?' Kaka asked looking annoyed 'Nathan has every right to know you're expecting his child'

'he doesnt have to know anything Kaka. He's happy. He's in love with another woman now Kaks. You needed to see the way he was feeding her and the look in his eyes showed how much they truly love each other. He didnt even deny it when i asked him. So, i dont want to ruin his happiness. I dont want it to look like i tried to tie him with a baby. I'm fully able and capable of taking care of my baby by myself. I'll name her after my mum, thats if its a girl'

Kaka shook her head 'i weep for you my friend. Because the time is coming when you'll regret your actions. Whether happy or no happy, loving someone else or no loving someone else, Nathan deserves to know about his child!'

'and i say no. I dont want him to know. He doesnt have to know. He's useless by the way, he can go to hell for all i care' i rolled my eyes and hissed.

I thought about Myra...the girl i saw him spoonfeeding in his office. His so-called love and i shook in hatred for her. Stupid girl who has come to reap where she did not sow. Then i mentally scolded myself. I had no right whatsoever to hate an innocent girl when i didnt even know her personally. It was wrong. Very wrong. I apologised to the girl. Yes, i apologised to her in my head. And i wished her the very best with her spouse.

'uhm Kaka?'

'yes preggy'

'i...i feel like relocating out of the country'

She looked at me sharply 'no way! You're going nowhere okay? I wont let you run away. Remember you're the reason i'm still here. You wont leave me alone, mba nu!'

'but...'

'but what kwa nu? Come, you just dey force me dey speak igbo, no make me burst your head with this cup oo'

'okay, lets relocate together'

'too late. I already have a reason to remain here'

I rolled my eyes and sipped from my hot tea 'and what is that?'

'actually, the question should be, who is that'

'as in?'

'well, there's this guy. Remember i told you something about a guy preaching to me in a club some months back? Well, Davidson'

'you say wetin?'

'you heard me babe. He asked me out two weeks ago. We're a couple now'

'you dont mean it!'

'i do!'

TBC

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Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:14am On Feb 09, 2017
ladyverere:
Nene, doesn't know what true love is. If she knew, she will understand that you gotta love the good side and bad side. Nobody is perfect, least of all, her. We're all entitled to our past, no matter how murky it may be. True love would have given Nathan a 2nd chance. But then, Nene has a chip on her shoulder the size of Kano so I am not surprised.

But this puking as a symptom of pregnancy is overrated joo. I never experienced it in any of pregnancies, not even the infamous morning sickness. But then, I guess I was lucky.

Well done Chumzypinky you are getting back the vibe but still work on it.
lol

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