Kelblaq:
Hmmm... I'm sure that the Agent is not dead, yes! he will come to rescue Spana and together they will defeat that woman..all this will happen in part 2 of the story..

hajahahahahah!!!!!!! this dude is making me laugh

i like your moral bro,but thats not possible


lets watch and see

honourable356:
You have taken a giant stride in a very short time... you are not there yet but your last two updates convinced me beyond reasonable doubt that i undoubtedly have no doubt that you get there. The very top!

Your consistency in updating is spot on..
Your story is a beauty to behold..
Putting that very story in writing...not just in any writing but the ability to give the audience a clear picture of the unfolding eventing has taken a giant stride.

Yes..a vast improvement is worth commendation.

He smiled...

thank you sir for your acknowledgement

he ) ......


oga swiz123 abeg i won hear from you before i proceed as my boss don confirm my improvement

Youngzubi:




thank you sir for your acknowledgement

he ) ......


oga swiz123 abeg i won hear from you before i proceed as my boss don confirm my improvement

You obviously have improved.

You just took a step worth too many steps with this twist you just made.

Good job bro

sin of a brother.....hmmmmm money z d root of all evil,,, betrayed by a friend......nice update

Youngzubi i must admit this, when u started this story i thought it was a comedy, a young man dreams of hitting it big etc, i never knew that this story will be a mind blowing 1, for that i say Kudos.
Most importantly you have improved beyond expectations, i remembered when 1 guy was saying your story was unreal and too fictous, now nobody is saying that anymore, i think that ur strategy to attract nairalanders to your story, but there still room for more improvement.
I love this story and I look forward to the next update, keep it coming BRO and thanks for this suspense filled story of yours. Much love here.
YOU ARE AN INSPIRATION TO MANY INCLUDING
ME. YOUR NŌ1 READER.

Baba this story na die. The beat I ever had. More grease to your elbow

WILLIAMSKECH:
Youngzubi i must admit this, when u started this story i thought it was a comedy, a young man dreams of hitting it big etc, i never knew that this story will be a mind blowing 1, for that i say Kudos.
Most importantly you have improved beyond expectations, i remembered when 1 guy was saying your story was unreal and too fictous, now nobody is saying that anymore, i think that ur strategy to attract nairalanders to your story, but there still room for more improvement.
I love this story and I look forward to the next update, keep it coming BRO and thanks for this suspense filled story of yours. Much love here.
YOU ARE AN INSPIRATION TO MANY INCLUDING
ME. YOUR NŌ1 READER.

wonderful!! your thinking is over correct bro,i wanted to do something different original,part of us,beyond and more thats why i decided to use comedy,PIDGIN and sex to start the story,wen that my guy was saying that my work is too fictitious which really made me add more effort,i was only trying to make him understand that the story is yet to end


thank you bro,for the improvement i will still put my head at work

am glad to have you all,you guys are really amazing,surely knew wen to correct and how to correct


youngzubi remains grateful

swiz123:


You obviously have improved.

You just took a step worth too many steps with this twist you just made.

Good job bro

thank you brotherly,i really appreciate this,


we can only get better....

Nice update but I like to be a critical thinker...

You can't say everything was planned starting from the point where he went to buy food stuffs for his new apartment and met Bug mama's daughter in the car. If not, how did she plan that he'll forget to stock his house thereby willing him to go out to get some cash leading to his bumping into them? Fine, let's assume that was a plan that worked, what were the odds that Spanner was going to see the car, turn and see her daughter and decide to approach her? Was he under a spell(I doubt) or was he a robot being controlled? If not, how was it her plan to invite him to the concert since his first movements within Lagos could not be anticipated step by step? Unless Mrs Jolade is a supreme being with all know knowledge, I dare say there are plenty loopholes in this story. Anyways, nice work youngzubi. I do hope you come and answer these questions.

walai if i no comment d gods will be angry

3 gbosa for u nice torry

Spana forget matter you na solid material you go fight for your freedom one thing must kill a man at a time you don know your enemies moreover keep your friends close and your enemies closer I know say you b wise you will scale through cry for one is cry for all I dey feel your yarninsh bros nothing shake your mental

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INDUSTRIALFAN:
Nice update but I like to be a critical thinker...

You can't say everything was planned starting from the point where he went to buy food stuffs for his new apartment and met Bug mama's daughter in the car. If not, how did she plan that he'll forget to stock his house thereby willing him to go out to get some cash leading to his bumping into them? Fine, let's assume that was a plan that worked, what were the odds that Spanner was going to see the car, turn and see her daughter and decide to approach her? Was he under a spell(I doubt) or was he a robot being controlled? If not, how was it her plan to invite him to the concert since his first movements within Lagos could not be anticipated step by step? Unless Mrs Jolade is a supreme being with all know knowledge, I dare say there are plenty loopholes in this story. Anyways, nice work youngzubi. I do hope you come and answer these questions.

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May God deliver us from Monitoring spirits

INDUSTRIALFAN:
Nice update but I like to be a critical thinker...

You can't say everything was planned starting from the point where he went to buy food stuffs for his new apartment and met Bug mama's daughter in the car. If not, how did she plan that he'll forget to stock his house thereby willing him to go out to get some cash leading to his bumping into them? Fine, let's assume that was a plan that worked, what were the odds that Spanner was going to see the car, turn and see her daughter and decide to approach her? Was he under a spell(I doubt) or was he a robot being controlled? If not, how was it her plan to invite him to the concert since his first movements within Lagos could not be anticipated step by step? Unless Mrs Jolade is a supreme being with all know knowledge, I dare say there are plenty loopholes in this story. Anyways, nice work youngzubi. I do hope you come and answer these questions.

INDUSTRIALFAN:
Nice update but I like to be a critical thinker...

You can't say everything was planned starting from the point where he went to buy food stuffs for his new apartment and met Bug mama's daughter in the car. If not, how did she plan that he'll forget to stock his house thereby willing him to go out to get some cash leading to his bumping into them? Fine, let's assume that was a plan that worked, what were the odds that Spanner was going to see the car, turn and see her daughter and decide to approach her? Was he under a spell(I doubt) or was he a robot being controlled? If not, how was it her plan to invite him to the concert since his first movements within Lagos could not be anticipated step by step? Unless Mrs Jolade is a supreme being with all know knowledge, I dare say there are plenty loopholes in this story. Anyways, nice work youngzubi. I do hope you come and answer these questions.

thanks man.


i love this,you said that u like being a critical thinker "thats awesome"


firstly to begin answer your questions

"our people dey yan sey nah the rat wey dey inside house dey waka go tell the one outside sey GBEDU dey inside house"

yes big mama is partially a spiritual person,but thats not the case here


remember in this last episode i said something like "spata made it possible" or something close to that


big mama didnt want spana to get engaged in any outdoor activity at all,she didnt even want him to understand the environment well so that it won't be hard for her to get into his head,thats why she appeared quickly in the story

the show was real but spana meeting and invitation by big mama's daughter was a setup"how?" ok

here.....spata kept on calling spana consistently to know his plans and move which he would give big mama feed back iinstantly,big mama on the other hand would send him a suggestion which spata would arguably suggest to spana his friend,,;;;hope you'er following keenly,

with that big mama will now plan her own moves,Spata new very well and had told big mama that spana can never see her daughter Cynthia and pass by,and that was the reason she purposely parked her car in such a way that approaching spana would see her sitting inside the car while she big mama would walk inside the bank




hope you dont expect me to start breaking thing down like this in the story"if yes" then no no no,i wanted to throw everybody off guard i didnt want you guys to suspect anything at all,and i believed that you as a critical thinker supposed and need not to be told all this before fixing things in your mind,i write to creat images and illusions in ur head,its left for you to also do some thinking so as to get some hidden hints,in as much i try to be descriptive in my story,i also have to try hard not to tell the end from the beginning so as to creat suspense


thats why i would say this...

as a story reader you have to be an actor,a writer and a thinker so as to be able to understand some untold parts of the story

i cant tell u that big mama and spata are co operating wen the story started,that would av rubbish the whole tin



thank you boss!,i really appreciate your time and acknowledgments

Although I was formerly a silent reader but but not anymore bcus if I no comment for this story my ancestors go para for me.

But Abeg update soon before I go report you to your village people oo

chaiii!! my man youngzubi i just pray 4 som1 2 cum 4 ur rescue

Enjoying every bit of this story..... Only wished it could be acted

this story doesn't look like sth that they are writing one by one.. don't tell me you are writing it or I'll say u not the owner of it... from big mama calling the bro name from the beginning and all that.. it showed that the story has been well planned and written not sth u think of and start creating ...i love it though

INDUSTRIALFAN:
Nice update but I like to be a critical thinker...

You can't say everything was planned starting from the point where he went to buy food stuffs for his new apartment and met Bug mama's daughter in the car. If not, how did she plan that he'll forget to stock his house thereby willing him to go out to get some cash leading to his bumping into them? Fine, let's assume that was a plan that worked, what were the odds that Spanner was going to see the car, turn and see her daughter and decide to approach her? Was he under a spell(I doubt) or was he a robot being controlled? If not, how was it her plan to invite him to the concert since his first movements within Lagos could not be anticipated step by step? Unless Mrs Jolade is a supreme being with all know knowledge, I dare say there are plenty loopholes in this story. Anyways, nice work youngzubi. I do hope you come and answer these questions.

guy, dem no de pay am.. know wetin u de tok... if dem wreck u... u go think pass that one

deniguy01:
this story doesn't look like sth that they are writing one by one.. don't tell me you are writing it or I'll say u not the owner of it... from big mama calling the bro name from the beginning and all that.. it showed that the story has been well planned and written not sth u think of and start creating ...i love it though

It shows the level of brilliancy of the writer
It looks so interesting u are wondering if it has bring written, edited before posting

Chai........dis my silence gas end today....Oga zubi.....too much respect for you olohun ngbo........you are just so good at this broos......more ink to your pen

Diz One Wey Big Mama Wan Kpuff U,,abeg Try Finish D Story B4 She Send U Go Wia Dagrin Dey,,,,i Lyk Ur Creativity Bro,,e No Get Second Lyk Okirika For Katanguwa,,.More Updates Pls

deniguy01:
this story doesn't look like sth that they are writing one by one.. don't tell me you are writing it or I'll say u not the owner of it... from big mama calling the bro name from the beginning and all that.. it showed that the story has been well planned and written not sth u think of and start creating ...i love it though

the story is 100% mine i can defend it even in heaven......


2: i started this story without knowing what the following episode would be like

3: i dont write in papers i imagine and write directly in nairaland "reply"


4: i dont even know what todays update would be like but when am ready to update trust me,i will go unto imaginary world


so dont tell me that the story is not mine..

i own this stuff 100% mahn.....

no second party......

UpdatesiOS147:
Spana forget matter you na solid material you go fight for your freedom one thing must kill a man at a time you don know your enemies moreover keep your friends close and your enemies closer I know say you b wise you will scale through cry for one is cry for all I dey feel your yarninsh bros nothing shake your mental

tem!! tem!! brotherly.....

notin do u bro

Beautiful write-up Youngzubi

deniguy01:


guy, dem no de pay am.. know wetin u de tok... if dem wreck u... u go think pass that one

lol.. calm down. Na fact say youngZubi de write die but work wey no get criticism no de better. Youngzubi as writer need criticism(e get wetin dem de call constructive criticism) to make him hand strong. Even Centino wey be baba for writing still de need constructive criticism. No be to kill their morale, Na to help them get better. Na fan I be..

Youngzubi:






thanks man.


i love this,you said that u like being a critical thinker "thats awesome"


firstly to begin answer your questions

"our people dey yan sey nah the rat wey dey inside house dey waka go tell the one outside sey GBEDU dey inside house"

yes big mama is partially a spiritual person,but thats not the case here


remember in this last episode i said something like "spata made it possible" or something close to that


big mama didnt want spana to get engaged in any outdoor activity at all,she didnt even want him to understand the environment well so that it won't be hard for her to get into his head,thats why she appeared quickly in the story

the show was real but spana meeting and invitation by big mama's daughter was a setup"how?" ok

here.....spata kept on calling spana consistently to know his plans and move which he would give big mama feed back iinstantly,big mama on the other hand would send him a suggestion which spata would arguably suggest to spana his friend,,;;;hope you'er following keenly,

with that big mama will now plan her own moves,Spata new very well and had told big mama that spana can never see her daughter Cynthia and pass by,and that was the reason she purposely parked her car in such a way that approaching spana would see her sitting inside the car while she big mama would walk inside the bank




hope you dont expect me to start breaking thing down like this in the story"if yes" then no no no,i wanted to throw everybody off guard i didnt want you guys to suspect anything at all,and i believed that you as a critical thinker supposed and need not to be told all this before fixing things in your mind,i write to creat images and illusions in ur head,its left for you to also do some thinking so as to get some hidden hints,in as much i try to be descriptive in my story,i also have to try hard not to tell the end from the beginning so as to creat suspense


thats why i would say this...

as a story reader you have to be an actor,a writer and a thinker so as to be able to understand some untold parts of the story

i cant tell u that big mama and spata are co operating wen the story started,that would av rubbish the whole tin



thank you boss!,i really appreciate your time and acknowledgments

ah ha.. justice has been done to quench the fiery questions in my head... E gbam as you take de collect constructive criticism with open arms and mind and e go take you far as writer or anything you decide say you wan do. Thanks man for the clarification.. everything don settle like dirty wey de inside water so now I fit see from wells from the corner wey I dey... Na man you be... Fire down bruh...

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May God deliver us from Monitoring spirits

lol.. calm down. Wise people talk :If everybody praise you, know say e get wetin de happen wey you nor know. If you de do work and nobody criticise you constructively, you no go ever grow pass the level wey you dey. E better say I ask question wey I ask so that I for no loss for the torri wey Zubi take de entertain all man Dem. I sure say e get some people wey for no think am but as I ask, Dem sef go wonder and for others wey go like be writers, Dem fit learn from the explanation wey youngzubi don give me. Cheers.

uh! touching. see as padi man fall im own fwend hand

INDUSTRIALFAN:
lol.. calm down. Wise people talk :If everybody praise you, know say e get wetin de happen wey you nor know. If you de do work and nobody criticise you constructively, you no go ever grow pass the level wey you dey. E better say I ask question wey I ask so that I for no loss for the torri wey Zubi take de entertain all man Dem. I sure say e get some people wey for no think am but as I ask, Dem sef go wonder and for others wey go like be writers, Dem fit learn from the explanation wey youngzubi don give me. Cheers.

No b lie bros your observation tight bros and Youngzubi wen b intellectual self don reply wellz I follow this story pass anonymous VPN wen bitcoin boys dey use track website your wisdom no go finish because too much words no dey full basket I swear to Papa K if I fit see this story download for pdf I go dey read am for inside office because hin Genre dey supernatural bros you wise!!!

UpdatesiOS147:
Spana forget matter you na solid material you go fight for your freedom one thing must kill a man at a time you don know your enemies moreover keep your friends close and your enemies closer I know say you b wise you will scale through cry for one is cry for all I dey feel your yarninsh bros nothing shake your mental

Na wah for u ooo...this one wey u jus dey cast like say na KASTINA u dey...I treep oo...too much yan no dey full basket...zip up...Madiba hail

UpdatesiOS147:


No b lie bros your observation tight bros and Youngzubi wen b intellectual self don reply wellz I follow this story pass anonymous VPN wen bitcoin boys dey use track website your wisdom no go finish because too much words no dey full basket I swear to Papa K if I fit see this story download for pdf I go dey read am for inside office because hin Genre dey supernatural bros you wise!!!

lol... Wisdom for one Na wisdom for all... Cheers...

Wow . This is simply amazing. Keep up the good work bro. And more updates please