hey guys,i have an advert i want to run for my program soon,pls criticize and correct where necessary.
1. E-GOLD ON-LINE INVESTMENT OPPORTUNITY
Are you desirous to earn genuine income in dollars here in Nigeria
come and learn about on-line investment portfolios thats has been
tried, tested and proven!!!
Redeem your payment cash!!!
HOW?
call 01, 080,
OR
visit us every Saturday for training(FREE)@ xyz internet resource center
Time;10am -4pm
email;xyz@yahoo.com

Invest now and smile tommorrow, cos a stitch in time saves nine!!


2. E-GOLD ON-LINE INVESTMENT OPPORTUNITY
Get paid in $$$$$$$$$$$$$ 4 real
Earn a guaranteed residual income in dollars here in Nigeria by investing
in these on-line program ;
-$15 (N3000) investment portfolio
-$22 (N4000) investment portfolio
-$25 (N4500) investment portfolio
-$60 (N10,000) investment portfolio
-$100(N15,000)investment portfolio

These have been tried, tested and proven to earn $50-$400 EVERY MONTH

HOW
CALL;01-, 080,
OR
Visit ;XYZ INTERNET RESOURCE CENTER

Time;10am -4pm
email;xyz@yahoo.com
Here you will discover genuine on-line wealth creation formula.!!


so guys!this is it say wat u deem appropriate to better this write up. thanks for ur contributions.

it's gud
u may wanna replace desirous wiv another word
hs a sexual twist to it, lol
apart from dat it's kul
oh and 1 more thing
i think it's too long u know people culd get tired b4 reading thru it
avoid unnecessary repetitions too

thanks angel, i will certainly do that.

u're welcum

an empty "Investment scheme" is not a legitimate business. There are much better ways to make money. You have to generate value by solving people's problems.

hi seun,can u pls throw more light by wat u meant by saying"an empty "Investment scheme" is not a legitimate business" cos some stuffs i do online to generate money is mostly on MLM.Since u said there are much better ways to make money i would be glad if u could give me some genuine links to anyone of these so as to help solving peoples problems.thanks.