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Review My Poem - Making Friends by Janji(m): 8:29pm On Jul 05, 2008 |
Prior To the feeling of being inferior Some may smell so good with "Christian Dior" But they lack a strong interior Against interacting is a sword Held to their throat if they dialogue a word They conclude that making friends isn’t necessary But the way they cry inside is extra ordinary Some would always make friendship tarry Looking for friends to carry And adding more friends to their diary But for some The habit of making friends is yet to come They find it hard to express And this leaves them in depress For they wish they had friends in excess I ask Why can’t they voice out? So that they could sprout And appreciate what friendship is all about This writing is their call out Giving them the right route That to make friends is simple Example Break your inner shackle As you move with your ankle Say "hello" and cause a sparkle But if they return a frown Never loose your crown Don’t let reject make you drown But remember That there is someone in the next town Even downtown That needs you, for they are down So interact and don’t feel inferior For a little confidence Would prove to others, your essence And in the end, magnify your presence Hence Live and extrovert Draw people close like an advert So that your presence creates a concert So don’t let your friend counts go inert But be a friendship expert |
Re: Review My Poem - Making Friends by prophetwis: 2:37pm On Jul 14, 2008 |
that was a fin entry .i enjoyed the rhyme.but please make more use of poetic licence to make it flow more.when writing poetry u are allowed to break conventional english grammatical rules |
Re: Review My Poem - Making Friends by Janji(m): 7:26pm On Jul 14, 2008 |
men, while scratching my head i really dont understand the poetry license thingy |
Re: Review My Poem - Making Friends by blackgee(m): 3:09pm On Sep 01, 2008 |
Your poem is like a wind- Directionless. Try the same poem without rhymes. That would better explain you. Good attempt, anyway. |
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