janetDurling: Its aite dear........enough of d derailing.......#runsawt

The rock5555: @Janet and Prince-i dey watch una wif my pinocio glasses.

Damlesky: [img][/img]wooow you are killing me Roy with this ur one in a gazillion update. You're the best-est
ps- let no man quote ishilove when replying or else.........







i fit shoot somebody

Ishilove: Great job, Roy! You never disappoint. NEVER. I loved your last update. When men sleep, a lot of strange things happen in the spirit. It's only the grace of God that keeps us in this very strange world.

Your penultimate update, I'm sorry to say, did not do it for me. Now this is strictly my opinion, dearie, so don't take it the wrong way. Jenny's narration seems some how...off... Now I know this story is a supernatural thriller, but then... Jenny's explanation of the origins, deccimation and resurrection of the man-animals just seems incomplete...too convoluted to be exactly believable. There are also some historical inaccuracies, especially in the part where history books were burned and new history written. Africa has always had a unique system of keeping historical records in pre-literate society, even way before the Arabisation of certain areas of the continent, so the 'burning books part is totally off'. Eurocentric historeographers of the 19th and early 20th century argued that Africa has no history because pre-literate Africa had no writing, but they have been disproved overtime by African historians. In other words, we did not write books before the whitemen came, but we had other methods of historical record keeping, like oral tradition. Hence we cannot burn books that never existed. It is for this reason that when I saw 'history books burned', I was sent off kilter.

I am also a bit confused about the man-animal been able to rip mermaids/mermen to pieces (before they were deccimated by the whitemen). The animals you described are land animals vis elephants, baboons, leopards etc, so is it that they could kill the mer-people when they were in their human form, or that they could go into water and kill them in their natural habitat?

Where was this castle that the baboon man was invited to? In the water or on land? Was the baboon man able to retain his power in the water kingdom, where mermaids are the most powerful?

I am left with too many confusing, rather than intriguing, questions, Roy.

All in all, keep doing a good job, Roy, but try not to rush anything.

Ishilove: Great job, Roy! You never disappoint. NEVER. I loved your last update. When men sleep, a lot of strange things happen in the spirit. It's only the grace of God that keeps us in this very strange world.

Your penultimate update, I'm sorry to say, did not do it for me. Now this is strictly my opinion, dearie, so don't take it the wrong way. Jenny's narration seems some how...off... Now I know this story is a supernatural thriller, but then... Jenny's explanation of the origins, deccimation and resurrection of the man-animals just seems incomplete...too convoluted to be exactly believable. There are also some historical inaccuracies, especially in the part where history books were burned and new history written. Africa has always had a unique system of keeping historical records in pre-literate society, even way before the Arabisation of certain areas of the continent, so the 'burning books part is totally off'. Eurocentric historeographers of the 19th and early 20th century argued that Africa has no history because pre-literate Africa had no writing, but they have been disproved overtime by African historians. In other words, we did not write books before the whitemen came, but we had other methods of historical record keeping, like oral tradition. Hence we cannot burn books that never existed. It is for this reason that when I saw 'history books burned', I was sent off kilter.

I am also a bit confused about the man-animal been able to rip mermaids/mermen to pieces (before they were deccimated by the whitemen). The animals you described are land animals vis elephants, baboons, leopards etc, so is it that they could kill the mer-people when they were in their human form, or that they could go into water and kill them in their natural habitat?

Where was this castle that the baboon man was invited to? In the water or on land? Was the baboon man able to retain his power in the water kingdom, where mermaids are the most powerful?

I am left with too many confusing, rather than intriguing, questions, Roy.

All in all, keep doing a good job, Roy, but try not to rush anything.

Damlesky: [img][/img]wooow you are killing me Roy with this ur one in a gazillion update. You're the best-est
ps- let no man quote ishilove when replying or else.........







i fit shoot somebody

Ishilove: Great job, Roy! You never disappoint. NEVER. I loved your last update. When men sleep, a lot of strange things happen in the spirit. It's only the grace of God that keeps us in this very strange world.

Your penultimate update, I'm sorry to say, did not do it for me. Now this is strictly my opinion, dearie, so don't take it the wrong way. Jenny's narration seems some how...off... Now I know this story is a supernatural thriller, but then... Jenny's explanation of the origins, deccimation and resurrection of the man-animals just seems incomplete...too convoluted to be exactly believable. There are also some historical inaccuracies, especially in the part where history books were burned and new history written. Africa has always had a unique system of keeping historical records in pre-literate society, even way before the Arabisation of certain areas of the continent, so the 'burning books part is totally off'. Eurocentric historeographers of the 19th and early 20th century argued that Africa has no history because pre-literate Africa had no writing, but they have been disproved overtime by African historians. In other words, we did not write books before the whitemen came, but we had other methods of historical record keeping, like oral tradition. Hence we cannot burn books that never existed. It is for this reason that when I saw 'history books burned', I was sent off kilter.

I am also a bit confused about the man-animal been able to rip mermaids/mermen to pieces (before they were deccimated by the whitemen). The animals you described are land animals vis elephants, baboons, leopards etc, so is it that they could kill the mer-people when they were in their human form, or that they could go into water and kill them in their natural habitat?

Where was this castle that the baboon man was invited to? In the water or on land? Was the baboon man able to retain his power in the water kingdom, where mermaids are the most powerful?

I am left with too many confusing, rather than intriguing, questions, Roy.

All in all, keep doing a good job, Roy, but try not to rush anything.

Royver:

As usual, you are thorough in your criticisms. Actually for a moment I thot u had abandoned me as I didn't see ur inputs

[b]Am going to tell you a story now, non fiction.
When I was doing my youth service in kwara state, 2004 to be exact, I came upon an article in the vanguard newspaper. A British trained African professor whose name escapes me now wrote an article I'm which he sited something to do with calabar history. I'm not a history student so pls forgive me not knowing the right terms but he described something like 'the calabar scrolls or tablets, or some historical calabar carving sha. It had some inscriptions on it and this professor xlaed he had deciphered the meaning. He said according to this, calabar was the citadel of old civilization before it was moved to Egypt. If you browse it you will see that the calabar kingdom spans thousands and thousands of years. He also stated that there was a great war in which ships were used to cross a sea that if plotted on a modern map is the same location as the sahara desert. That means the sahara was once a sea in the middle of Africa. He also says that there was a great uprising of the slaves then and they won the war. As punishment, they burned all the books that the wise men had and banished them to death if they were caught writing again. Apparently that's how Africa started passing word from mouth to mouth. It is interesting that Egypt is called the citadel of learning but calabar kingdom used documents before then.
I enjoyed that 'story' so much but by the next day a British professor answered him and debunked all his claims. The African's article spanned three pages. The britishman's was only a few lines. Yet everybody believed the Caucasian immediately and the black man's theory was never pursued.[/b]
Anyway, that memory kind of inspired the history of the man-animals I wrote. Remember this is pure fiction and meant for entertainment. Nothing here is to be taken seriously except maybe life lessons you might learn if you read between the lines.

As for the baboon man and the mer-people, you got me there. I was actually very tired but I had promised to update and once again my laptop went into a series of convulsions so I had to use my phone. Those who stayed up And saw the raw footage would attest to the fact that there are a lot of corrections that have been made in the finished product you read. Thanks for pointing it out and I hope to be more explanatory in future.
Ehen. Another legend is that mermaids have the ability to make anybody breathe underwater. So the baboon guy was given this ability and went to visit them in their palace under the sea. Na fatigue cause am Jo, a beg no vex.

Am still looking forward to more criticisms from you oh so that by the time I finish I'll be the best I can be. Thanks much!
[size=5pt](For those of you crushing on ishilove, no assassinate me oh! Na friendly peck/holy kiss o!)[/size]