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Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 8:21am On Dec 22, 2014 |
Good Morning ppl I am kinda new here and I would need your help to improve tremendously... I know I have poor spacing method ...so pls pardon and teach me. My Poem are just drawn from Life experience and Nature...My greatest inspiration is Mother Nature. I draw my strength from its wisdom. .. I want to officially welcome everyone to this and believe it will have impact in your Lives in Jesus' Name! ...Amen. |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 8:27am On Dec 22, 2014 |
pls pardon my improper space method LOVE DILEMMA Looking up to the hill, I can see a hierarchy of molested agonizing souls gnashing their reminiscent of what mother Love has brought upon them. I threaded the same path and got to the top of the depth of the walls of my Profound future with a crown of pleasure. She encouraged me. She gave me a lamp of Faith. A wooden sword of determination and a shield of hope. But how could you be this cruel? you never told me the Enemies had advanced. You never woke me from my slumber. Now the war is over, all that you gave me has been taken away. The only gift the enemies had left for me is the breastplate of pain. The helmet of frustration and the spear of anguish. I just feel like drawing our battle lines and show you how much I literally resent you. But when the warm air of your breath of regrets flourish my nerves I only hear a voice screaming from beneath the tunnel of my terrifying soul "Forgive!!". With a beam of smile I protrude my arm into your warm embrace Listening to your undefined Proof of Wisdom. |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 9:50am On Dec 22, 2014 |
inspiration of this poem is from my nairaland ladies. They too fine Jare ....The likes of misshoree, irerony,queen jennima, misterrious and many more..Actually I wrote this poem to a sweet friend Scholarstica I hope to see her someday in this forum ...its more like a Love letter than poem BT its a poem ..... pls pardon my improper space method..Let's Read together SCHOLARSTICA I have had alot of dreams about Angel but couldn't phantom the reason they resent our planet earth. Well my 19th Life has brought a miscarriage to my thoughts. Look!! Its an angel. The once I have always dreamt of has always been males. Beautiful and wonderful creatures. But My reality tends to be more real than my dreams. The most amazing part is She's a female. Hmm my ought most conclusion is whatever miss led this angel has brought fortune to me. In a voluptuous credited figure she flash her emerald emanating perfume of beauty. I couldn't really tell but it was real.The earth kinda spinned anticlockwisely. Time thicked faster like rapture time. My seal mouth found its place in ajar. But her charming smile gave the earth's its motion back in the right direction. Her invincible diastema kept my eye in total function. With a deep courage I walked up to the Angel and asked what could be the name? In a fanciful automelodious tone she whispered Scholarstica. At that point my heart melted. Oh Scholarstica was Angel from reality of my abode |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 4:25am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Bros Laykorn abeg come preview this poem ooo .....na you I dey wait oo |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 7:06am On Dec 27, 2014 |
DREAMS ARE ILLUSIONS Dreams!! Oh my dreams!! How much gratitude can I show you. My hopes and faith has being compelled by your sweet world. The life I could never live in reality, I have lived and died so many times in your world. Been trapped by your fanciful gifts. But my troubled soul keep wondering, why torture me this way? Haven't you derailed my aspirations enough? Why cover thyself with the veil of Promises? Why drown my reality? But now I have seen how much false you are, I have picked up my self from the ashes, dusted my colourful linens, Put on my shoes of determination. Taking the cart of my tomorrow, and Am going to ride straight to my destiny. Don't bother convincing me to stay cus Dreams are illusions Cc: Texanomaly, Everestdebliu, Laykorn, Donifez, Leki10, Cisse7575 |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 7:13am On Dec 27, 2014 |
Oga laykorn....come and review na ....or are my poems hidden?.... |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by donifez(m): 8:23am On Dec 27, 2014 |
Livingwalker: You are a good writer,i love the way you painted Dream in a good way and also stripped it off all its colours.However i suggest in your first line there should be an interjection sign [!] to show Emotion,and also the line you wrote 'drawn my reality' it should be drown, and the last but not the least...you should crosscheck your spelling..you wrote borther instead of bother. 1 Like |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Nobody: 8:34am On Dec 27, 2014 |
Nice one brother. Just as my boss said, remember to check your work for typos sir. Then sir, do you have a reason why the whole poem is in one long stanza? I believe it would have been easier to read if you had decided to divide it into stanzas. More ink to your pen sir! Ayamlaykorn |
Re: Dreams Are Illusions by Livingwalker(m): 1:38pm On Dec 27, 2014 |
Thanks my Bosses ...I will do as told in the spelling typos hmm as for the lengthy stanzas hmm i think I will try and shorten it but its the way inspirations comes though. All the same thanks Bosses |
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