LarrySun:
Nice story.

However, you need to interprete those incantations. Your punctuation marks should be carefully chosen, too.

The name 'Orisaye' reminds me of the half-mad woman in the play 'Women of Owu'.

Fatalveli:

Tbc...

Sorry for the short update, I'm not getting inspired to write these days coupled with the incessant plagiarism, but I'll try to patch myself up and be better thanks ya'll


Cc. Candy, harjiborla, Larrysun, StormAngel

harjibolar10:

Oga fatal

Did I see you write die? You won't kuku die
Fear not my brother, for God is with thee


Concerning the plagiarist and you not getting inspired... I so much understand you Bross, just know that it is not how far, but how well and don't let those yeye people tint your talent oo

You are surely the Man. ..
Keep em coming Bross

Fatalveli:
Thanks bro, this is all I need. I'll try to type an update today, but it might be a short one.

One love bro

Fatalveli:

Cc. Candy, harjiborla, Larrysun, StormAngel

candy:

I suggest you type your short updates, pile them up over time then post a lengthy one here as against the five-ten lines you are posting here. Interesting story.

prettydiva89:
wonderful

Cybershow:
U too much! bt d short update z nt beta.. bt tenx..

Cybershow:
U too much! bt d short update z nt beta.. bt tenx..

Fatalveli:
Thanks bro... I'll heed to Candy's advice...

Cybershow:
Alrit big broda/boss

Fatalveli:
Boss keh, you are tha boss ooo

Fatalveli:
Boss keh, you are tha boss ooo

Cybershow:
Say wetin apen.. i b learner o..u b my gr8 boss, i nid 2 learn 4rm u..

Fatalveli:
Lolz, you are a joker. I'm very far from great ooo, the great people here are the likes of Larrysun, Repogirl, Mazi, Royver, Ishilove, Safarigirl, Divepen, Therock555, T.Dan and co. I'm a gracious learner ooo

StormAngel:


tnks op

Fatalveli:
This your smile is capable of resurrecting a dead man, you are so pretty

StormAngel:


now ma head e av big
daris God o

tnks dear

Fatalveli:
Aren't you gonna gimme a peck

StormAngel:

Fatalveli:
That name StormAngel fits you perfectly, you are a replica of Angel holy mary

StormAngel:



fatalveli biko ejor com and update.

Cybershow av left him o. Plz no vex. :p

Fatalveli:
Yeah you know em' maybe I'm probably 'gonna' do something about it.

And as for the tautology, I'd like you to point it out precise...

And tanx for tha comment and em' you know the critics; it seems to be really em' helpful. gotcha

Hawlahscho:




I think I should say my own out too... due to you weren't annoyed when e said his.


when u use d verb "did" the followed verb must be in present tense but you've been using past tense after "did"


same thing applicable to "to"




Iono if it ws error or mistake, just take note and correct them in your next updates.


I am loving the story