Madonna, Madonna

Madonna, Madonna, my dear alma mater
Still round about with chatter and clatter
Sandals that squeak and shoes that groan
And senior students of whom juniors moan

Madonna , Madonna, my school home of past
How the times have passed, and so very fast
The mistakes and misfortunes we all passed through
Forget any one, we never will do

Madonna, Madonna, my minds’ training ground
Where teachers amaze and turn lives around
Where every mistake feels like flesh taken pound
Yet leaves us more righteous and ethically sound

Madonna, Madonna, my dear alma mater
Still round and abound with chatter and clatter
From all the ex-students, there’s only one matter
You’ll sorely be missed; from the first through the latter


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Okay, this is a poem I wrote for my sec school in Imo state. I just want some feedback as to the poem in general. I appreciate it a lot. Thx in advance.

timpaker:
Hi Boss,

Your poem is awesome.

Your poem is almost similar to the poetry form of a Kyrielle
Your lines are in rhyming couplets or quatrains and has a refrain.

Your personification in line 3, stanza one is mind-blowing.


Note: The refrain of line 2 in your last stanza is what made me use the word "almost".



All in all, bro, you did a very good job.

Wow. Thank you . I actually have a lot of poems like this. I'm glad to see I'm making some progress though. I appreciate the vey detailed analysis you gave. Thank you very much