It hurts (me) like a bee sting
stings (me) as salt on a wound
What a hell on earth?
this idea of you leaving, bring-forth

You may have suffered here
but I suffered most
What if you stay tonight
In the morning there shall be light.

hey people aren't you checking out this poem. let me have your judgement of it.

its cool keep it up.
i post a few of my own

hi,reallyt am new into the deal of nairaland's fun humm this cool
pls keep it up!!!

hey, pple are viewing ur poem, just not posting reply, u already have 337 reads,
methinks its quiet short and i dont get he context as in, what are u addressing, i'm really thinking of more than one topic right now, but its a good piece short, sharpa nd rhymes

yes quite short but I thought it's precise. just talking about a lady giving her guy a red card cause she no longer can cope with the harsh situations. So the guy now trying to plead with her to stay, that things may be as they are now but there will soon be soccur. "in the morning there shall be light" I appreciate ur critical comment

nice, keep it up, watch the use of lang. though,

good work