Like the topic says m 16..a science student and not a writer just trying new things so pls try to drop your reviews


Of the many I've been seeing
I was told to sit, you know nothing
In me I know :
The ones we feed till we're thin
The ones that steal
That make us work-off our skin
The ones we've turn kings
Instead of the leaders they're meant to be
The ones that have hidden all our wealth
That care less about our health...

On everyturn a thief..
That doesn't care about the kids he's met
Greed is the belief

The president in whom we've lost faith
We doubt he still bares his face
He promised fame, good name..
And to tame
The wild beasts in the north
The Uncontrolled kids in the south
The greedy in the East
And the corrupt in the middle
But no.. All are still in play
Time's on its way
For the travelling leader we still pray
Cuz to the rest we're not but prey..

The peom is good; I tried reading it aloud, and it sounded really good.

The one thing the poem lacks though, is coherence of words, it would have been so much more impressive if it had stanzas and a leg (iambic and the others)

Overall, you've done well, giving us an insight into what life looks like in the eyes of a 16 year old.