semid4lyfe: @ Larry, hope this won't you distract you from updating The Paradox of Abel?

Anyway, good first chapter. . .liked it

brokoto: Ishi can you pls check the date for your update again? If possible write it on a piece of paper and carry it 'everywhere you go'. We wouldn't want you to go on energy saving mode around that time o.

Damex333: i can't believe u asked him dt question, we all knw witout this story,he has already forgotten the paradox.

Mazi_Omenuko: Honestly, the dream part in the first update knocked my plan A off balance. My plan A was simple: when you all complicate this work with your complex settings and plots, I will just wake the main character up from a dream and start the whole plot afresh, with my own style shaa

Mazi_Omenuko: Honestly, the dream part in the first update knocked my plan A off balance. My plan A was simple: when you all complicate this work with your complex settings and plots, I will just wake the main character up from a dream and start the whole plot afresh, with my own style shaa

Larry-Sun:

Forgive me for thwarting your plan.

Larry-Sun:

No, I haven't. I shall update in the morrow.

HumbledbYGrace: u said wen the 10th of february clocks u will be done with the Sequel but it looks like Home @ last will be completed before the sequel. I won't be suprised if you don't update hosane

Larry-Sun:

No, I haven't. I shall update in the morrow.

frank3.16:
in order not to disappoint, i had to update today, cos i might be very busy tomorrow. hope i didnt break the law

frank3.16:
in order not to disappoint, i had to update today, cos i might be very busy tomorrow. hope i didnt break the law

Oahray: Nice one frank. Besides the fact that you didn't exactly thicken the plot (more than it already was), and some irregularity in tense used on some occassions, its a nice follow up. Thumbs up!

Yellow_Mosquito: DId you guys leave me behind... COmmon, make una carry me follow body

HumbledbYGrace: I love your siggy

Larry-Sun:
Let us all remember that he also laid down some pointers for the next writers to work on.

Larry-Sun:

You wanna join in?

Yellow_Mosquito:

Yup... I think so... I will join

Larry-Sun:

Okay, I shall include your name.

Larry-Sun:

Okay, I shall include your name.

Rap maestro: nooo.. Lucan qo chanqe 2 mosquito...

Yellow_Mosquito:

Hahahahahaha

Says who... You seem not to have figured out the person behind this moniker abi

Ishilove: Not bad Frank, not bad at all. A few points to note, however. When righting, please ensure consistency of tenses. Larry's chapter one had tense consistency, chapter two doesn't. Let subsequent writers endeavour to maintain consistency because anything less than that will make the whole work read shabby. Frank, I suggest you go back and proof read your work because of the glaring erros, as well as change the tenses to ensure fluidity. Anything worth doing is worth doing well.

Can I suggest something? This work is obviously set in Nigeria, Africa. Let us stick to Afrocentric names, or Jewish names e.g John, Jephtah, Salome, Mary etc. I am saying this from the point of view of the average reader. When I listen to the news or read the papers, I don't come hear names like Jack or Tracy, I see names like John, Toun, Anike, Chilo, Chiejine, Mukhtarr etc Let the reader be able to connect with the story through familiar names and terms. When I read foreign detective novels, the writers infuse their stories with local colour, and so should we, the young, budding writers.

My 50 kobo sha, so its your prerogative to take it with a pinch of salt if you so please. We are all different with our individual styles. I just thought I should make a suggestion.

Ishilove:
Red Moss welldone o. So you want to contribute twice abi? Notin do you

Ishilove:
Red Moss welldone o. So you want to contribute twice abi? Notin do you