D9ty7:
Noted sir

I believe u man.

D9ty7: Sorry to announce that i will be unable to post the next update tonight but will make it up to you tomorrow by posting 3-4 updates.
Kip ur comments coming pls.
Signed:
d9ty7

This story na action film oooooooo..keep it up....wa gbayi..ori wa be!!!

No problem.more grease 2 ur elbow,i dey gbadun ur story

I dey gbadu dis story die

Clemzy16: I dey gbadu dis story die

Thankz boss

Olamiplenty: No problem.more grease 2 ur elbow,i dey gbadun ur story

Thanks for understanding and the compliment.

jhidey08: I believe u man.

Thanks sir.

mindfreakerz: This story na action film oooooooo..keep it up....wa gbayi..ori wa be!!!

Am feeling on top of the world. Thank you.

Nice write up mehn....am tasty for another...

can't wait to read the next episodes... I've been following you like twitter from the beginning of your story... more sperm to your d*ck,lol...more ink to your pen...#keep up the good work!!!

D9ty7 u r doin a nice job here...but pls let the story be suspense filled......dts wat ROCK555 dos in his "The preachers son"not that he has a more powerful story line than urs jx that the story is suspense filled and funny!!.....Thumbs up bro.

Confirmed ibadan setting

Diz story looks childish to me
Cox dz days, teenagers don't du dz fuvk that you're writing

Suspense z lackin in dis story dis days.ure tryin anyways

--continuation--
"Good morning sir." they all rose up to greet Mr Adio(the vice principal academics)who was accopanied by Jummy.
"How are you all?" he asked.
"We are fine sir." they chorused.
The students started murmuring some inaudible words. The guys were busy admiring her beauty, while the girls were accessing her base on what she wore.
"Hello class, this is Olagunju Olajumoke. A new student of this school." Mr Adio said calling the attention of everybody.
"Good morning." the whole class greeted her excluding Segun.
"Good morning." she replied shyly.
Mr Adio left her in the class to get acquinted with her new classmates.
She left where she was standing and walked to where Segun was seated.
"Hi." she greeted him.
"Hello." he replied without raising up his head.
"The serious student." she said mockingly.
"Oh! You are welcome to our school." Segun said standing up to shake her hands like they were meeting for the first time.
She took the handshake but not after hitting him playfully. She left Segun's seat and went on to introduce herself better to other members of the class.
"Olagunju. The principal wants to see you." the secretary said referring to Jummy.
Jummy followed the secretary and off they went to the principal office.
"Segun, this girl makes sense o." Wilson said.
"I heard about it." Segun replied sacarstically.
"Can i have her number?" Wilson stressed further.
"You don't know any other thing than to toast girls." Bolanle(a girl sitting in the front said).
"Is it because he didn't toast you, now you are jealous." Segun chipped in and everybody bursted into laughter.
"Segun, i don't like it o." she said angrily.
"Don't mind me jare." Segun apologised mockingly.
Jummy came back into the class and went straight to Segun's seat. They began gisting like new friends.
*CLOSING TIME*
Segun called all the members of the school football team and addressed them on behalf of the games master. He reminded them of the need to put more seriousness in practice, so that they can triumph over their opponent.
Segun left the school compound and joined Jummy outside as they both walked home.
"I never knew we could come back together this soon." Jummy said happily.
Segun was shocked.
"What did you say?" he asked.

--to be continued--

Lol.. Sharp girl... I like this jummy of a girl...

I see Segun's mum @ work

You have the Knowledge of Story Writing, but you lack Style!

An Ibadan based family all tushed with classical English

You are not paying attention to details!

You are telling the story like you relating to pry skul students!

No humour, No sarcasm!

Un realistic plots!!!

Even Secondary skul cultist are wise enough than to start fighting in broad day light with a Dagger!

And lots more

Lan2: You have the Knowledge of Story Writing, but you lack Style!

An Ibadan based family all tushed with classical English

You are not paying attention to details!

You are telling the story like you relating to pry skul students!

No humour, No sarcasm!

Un realistic plots!!!

Even Secondary skul cultist are wise enough than to start fighting in broad day light with a Dagger!

And lots more

I get u perfectly. Based on d tushness of the family, i had to make it easier for my readers to understand my story.
Concerning the humor, sarcasm, nd d unrealistic plot. Am not a writer, am just doing this to while away time.
I guess you don't live in Ibadan, cos if u do, you will know what Secondary school cultist entails.
Anyways, i appreciate your observations. It will definitely make me a better writer.

No matter what, never deny who you are for anything.

D9ty7:
Am not a writer, am just doing this to while away time.

KingzPen: No matter what, never deny who you are for anything.

Okay boss.

I really agree with Kingzpen,D9ty7,you are a writer,because you are writing this,and that's a fact that cannot be changed............you sure can be a great writer in the future...

KingzPen: No matter what, never deny who you are for anything.

How can u say u are not a writer

I haven't read all the stories but to where I stopped I see that u have taken a great deal of time to do this!

That automatically makes u a writer, and you must improve...

For now, maybe when u write a series, Send it to experienced writers to do a review so as to create the suspense, use humour and give your wrting style!

When u write in style it makes your readers get TOO intrested!

For example; In your very beginning, u have done very little to describe Segun to us! His body build, check bone, Height, and so on!

Now lemme give u an example of Style:

****
Walking down the Road, Segun cursed with anger, still breathing heavily: thoughts raced down his mind!
'Will she say Yes?

He still couldn't bring his mind to it!

He had bleeped up, and Yes he knew it: She will probably hate it now!

****

I just gave a example for you to understand what I mean!

__No matter what, never deny who you are for anything- Kingzpen.....
--continuation--
"I never knew we could be back together this soon." Jummy said.
"What did you say?" Segun asked.
"I said i never believed we could get back this soon." she said.
"Get back together where?" he asked.
"Never mind." she replied.
They continued walking until they got to the bus/stop where they boarded a bus home.
They arrived home fifteen minutes later. They entered the sitting room and saw a small basket filled with drugs.
"I think Mary is at home." Segun said.
"Lets check on her." Jummy replied.
They both walked towards Mary's room. They knocked on the door and were told to enter.
"Mary, how you feeling now?" Segun asked.
"Much better. Welcome." she greeted her brother.
"Have you eaten?" Jummy asked.
"Yes." Mary replied.
"Do you mind if i get you an energy drink?" Jummy asked.
"I don't mind." Mary replied.
"Segun where do i get the drink?" she asked facing Segun.
"You first turning by the left in the dining area is the kitchen. So you check inside the fridge you will see there." Segun explained in the best of his abilities.
"Okay." Jummy said and went outside.
"I'll come back and check on you." Segun said and left.
He got into his room, changed from his school uniform to his house wears. He sat down on his reading table and began reading his biology textbook without bothering to take his lunch.
An hour into his reading, his phone ranged and checking the caller, it was Nike.
"Hello." he said smilling happily.
"hello. How are you." she replied.
"Am not fine o." he replied.
"Why?" she asked with audible concern in her voice.
"You are yet to give me a reply based on what i told you the last time we spoke on phone." he said.
"Oh that?" She asked rhetorically.
"Yeah and i have been having headache since then." he replied which made her burst into laughter.
"You are not serious." she said playfully.
"I am." he replied.
"Really?" she asked.
"Nike, i love you what of you?" he asked.
The line went silent on the other end. Segun checked the phone to confirm if he was still on call or she had ended the call. He confirmed it that it was Nike that kept quiet.
"Nike, are you there?" he asked.
There was a sniff on Nike's end.
"Are you crying?" he asked.
"No, am not. Its just that....." Nike said with a shaky voice.

--to be continued--

Yes Oooooooooo... Am feeling you, Boss. Ride On... Am so loving your story.

KingzPen: Yes Oooooooooo... Am feeling you, Boss. Ride On... Am so loving your story.

Thanks boss

Seguuuuuuuuunnnnnnn

Hello guys i have a question for you.
Do you think Nike will give Segun a positive reply? Give ur reason.

D9ty7: Hello guys i have a question for you.
Do you think Nike will give Segun a positive reply? Give ur reason.

no She won't, bt Segun 'll keep on tryin

jhidey08: no She won't, bt Segun 'll keep on tryin

lets wait and see.

D9ty7:
lets wait and see.

O.┈̥-̶̯͡»̶̥Ơ̴̴̴͡K⌣̊┈̥-̶̯͡»̶̥ o, bt u promised 3 updates 2day na

D9ty7: Hello guys i have a question for you.
Do you think Nike will give Segun a positive reply? Give ur reason.

I dont think she will give a definite answer.. She loves segun, but his character and attitude is a turn off for the girl..

--continuation--
"Segun." his mother called from the sitting room interrupting his converstation with Nike.
He slugglishly dropped the call but not after promising to call Nike later. He walked out of his room and descended the stairs into the sitting room.
"Welcome mum." he greeted.
"How are you my son?" she asked.
Segun was suprised because since the issue of girlfriends started his mother has been hard on him.
"Am fine ma." he replied.
"How was school today?" she asked.
"It was fine ma." he replied.
"I learnt you are getting on much better with your wife." she said.
"No wonder, this woman was extra nice today." he thought within himself.
"What will you eat because i learnt you've not eaten your lunch?" she asked.
"What's in the kitchen?" he asked.
"Rice and plantain?" she asked.
"No problem." he replied.
Jummy who overheard the discussion between mother and son left the dining where she was seated and left for the kitchen. She came back with a plate of rice and fried plantain with meat and a bottle of chilled water.
"Segun this is your food." she said setting them on the table.
Mrs Akinola on seeing this smiled at Segun.
"You have gotten a wife." his mother said silently.
Mary came out just then and witnessed the little action put in place by Jummy.
Segun walked past her and she pinched him on the arm. She smiled sheepishly.
Segun sat down to eat and Jummy walked back to join Mrs Akinola in the sitting room. She sat beside her and they began talking in low tones.
Segun could not decipher what they were discussing but he could hear things like "i'll give it all it takes.", "he must listen to me, am his mother."
Straightaway he knew they were talking about him. But he pretended like he didn't hear them but he would occasionaly clear his throat loudly which will make them silent for some seconds.
"Women and their gossips." he thought within himself.
Then he remembered the promise made to Nike. He abandoned his food and ran straight to his room.
He dialled her number.
"Hello." he said immediately she picked the call.
"Hello." she replied tiredly.
"Are you asleep already?" he asked.
"Yes." she replied.
"Oh am sorry." he apologised.
"No problem." she replied.
"Nike, how about my question?" he asked.
"Which question is that?" she asked feigning ignorance.
"Nike, don't pretend now. I said i love you, please give me a chance." he said.
He was met by a ten seconds silence.
"Segun i understand how you feel but please give me time to think about it." she pleaded.

--to be continued--

jhidey08: Do u knw y pple r nt commenting anymore? Well, sumthing is missing in d story, dat's y pple r nt curious 2 knw wot nxt 'll happen. And dat is SUSPENSE, it is nt dere anymore. Try and incorporate suspense and c if ur followers would cum back or nt.

I agree with you...

That last update is the last for today. I think i have fufilled my promise?
GOODNIGHT AND HAVE A WONDERFUL NIGHT REST.....
Signed:
d9ty7