frank 3.16,
I've read it through now. I can't wait to see how Brenda is going to get out of this. Heartbreakers need to be punished but this is so unfair .

bluespice
definite difference
subtle yet apparent
good or bad. . . .


Even your critique/analysis sounds so poetic . I'm sure you write, you just don't wanna share it with us. Yet .

lol u dont know i write?
i'm just no longer into posting it on nl nymore
i'm shy

That figures! I always know it when I see it--but how come you stopped? Forget the NL gra gra, jare. There's love/joy in sharing .

lemme see if i can dig up some of my old posts

oh, yippeeee .

I can hardly wait but let's take this elsewhere to avoid derailing frank 3.16's thread .

HmmmM. Maedan, weldone. Madam bluediva u'r welcume.

maedan i just resurected a few old topics that have some of my writings in them
and the topic for nanboi n mactao has two links i think to some of my other works
u can search the writers n poems board for topics created by me

minute:

Its not the best(no offence though) but you can always improve it.

i never thought i was the best,
but i will be glad if you specify the areas you think i should improve on, especially in the story (please skip grammatical errors, my editors will take care of that)
i mean areas in the story u think were unnecessary, what you think i should have done.
thanks

maedan:




frank 3.16
How can?? I always look in though I don't read the text itself; you see I wanted it to become plenty(excuse my naija lingo ) so that I can read a long instalment and save myself the painful suspense .

It's plenty enough now so I'll make sure I read it. You know your writing is very natural, one of the most real in the Lit section so I'm actually learning from the experience too. Keep it up, chap. I'm still here .

I glad that you are still with me.

bluespice:

there's a definite difference in the writing styles
its subtle yet apparent
im not sure if that's good or bad. . .

hey bluespice, nice to hear from you.

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ok, @ bluespice
just saw ur post up there. I hardly go to that section so mayhaps that's why I've never seen your stuff. That's a deficiency I'm about to change . You'll be getting some feedback soon, defo .

. . . .Surprisingly Inspector Jack felt a sudden urge to hold and protect her like he would do to a daughter. But he told himself that he wouldn’t allow sympathy becloud his judgment. He looked at his fellow policemen who have decided to remain silent while he interrogated her. The interrogation was getting interesting. There must be something about this girl that is making these men leave her. . . . .

Hmmn, that's true. She's beautiful, she's good-natured and sweet. So why so much heartbreak? Is there something about this Brenda that you haven't told us, frank 3.16? I can't wait to see this story to the end!

i once gave a lady friend one of my novels to read, it was titled "Tenth Generation" (Unpublished). After reading she said that the novel was filled with so much sadness and gloom.

i didnt notice this untill she said it. Suddenly and am writing this one and i remember her words. and i am asking myself ,what is it about me that makes me write sad stories? perhaps i belive that sadness is a reality that we must accept, it comes to us all weather we are rich, poor, tall, short, ugly or beautiful.

naturally, i love watching extremely horror movies, and reading horror novels, thats why i love steven kings.

@all my readers, please dont let the sadness in this story weight u down andmake u not want to finnish the story. I started with love, i will end it with love. And enuf of the sadness (God! what is wrong with me). Lets make it a little tense.

@Maedan, is something wrong with Brenda?. The right question should be: is something wrong with the world?

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@frank 3.16, sometimes sad stories are easier/more interesting to write, than the everyday "happy" stories. One genre I totally wish I could master is the horror story-telling, I envy writers who find it so simple to do. You're good in that aspect, I noticed.

Adam is such an a-hole. Or should I say he was?? . Somehow I liked the way he is being presented: self-absorbed, heartless and uncaring. You've got a way with painting a good picture inside the reader's head, and for that I thank you .

So Adam's victim no. 3 !! I wonder who's next _ I hope not Michael cos he has done nuthin' wrong!!. However, Brenda is certainly going to see the inside of the police cell after this!

Hmmm, just passing by.

oh my God!i hope he doesn't hurt Micheal.

I think I'll take my time to go patiently through your write ups , In the meantime you could visit my poem blog @ http://poeticstreams..com

hmmmmmmmmmmmmmm

^^^You're either "hmmmmmnnnnn"ing or loling or making this face: " ". It's starting to irk .

You've started . LOL .

hey guys, sorry i took an unexpected trip, but right now i am back.
lets finnish up this story.

rayzbay:

oh my God!i hope he doesn't hurt Micheal.

yea that's my biggest fear, i really feel bad if anything bad happens to him.

@poster we are waiting oh

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when am i going to finish this

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Guy whats ur own self?