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[quote author=AG.gal]No insults intended,but its ppl like u dat do not embrace developments. I've been following this thread for a long time now but have refused to comment because of ppl like u. U may be reading this story just for the fun of it n prince may be writing for fun too. But in case he decides to take it to anoda level,u don't expect him to continue his errors,so pls allow him to accept his corrections.

@Prince,I want to commend u cos u're doing great. Apart from the wrong use of tenses n wrong spellings,u're good.
My advice for u is
1. After typing,read ur work aloud to urself to know if it sounds correct
2. Look for sum1 who u're close to who has a good command of English to proofread it for u
3. Always use ur dictionary to confirm words u're not sure of
4. Do not listen to praise singers who do not want u to accept corrections,they will destroy ur career.

I'll start pointing out ur errors whenever I can and nobody should quote me to say rubbish!




Merry xmas[/quote]it wonderful havin you comment on my story with so much advices and encouraging words. I appreciate the fact that you followed this story without giving up because of it errors and all sort.

Am just a learner here and this is my first time of writing any story, critiques are welcome but they must go with corrections because i cant know it all.

I would welcome your corrections in order to improve my writing skills and enlightening me about ways to write.

I checked your statue because your advice pinch me.. My sister you are welcome and pls as you promise for God will grant you more acknowledge.

Criticism isn't the only rightful thing here,but critiques and corrections are the best two thing or idea to improve me

stardragon: ok...... We dey ur back!

ok sir

Chai, The rock so you see my text and you refused replying me, abi?

Sha still nl son

Les: which exmaxx again?? I did mine yesterday bro. Just surprised you are yet to do yours.
you corrected only that of miss grace I cited as example, there other similar ones also like" did he instructed everybody" no need correcting them, just whenever you use the word *did, don't put your verb in past tense.

i shall take note of that from now henceforth

philtrum: prince its good to have you back...... still praying to God for ur full recovery... #Happy

thanks bro happy new year in advance

Happy xmas!

Happy xmas!!

Happy xmas!!!

May i use this very wonderful opportunity to shout out to everyone wishing "The rocky" fan new year in advance.

Oga the rock me never come back villa because i still de kano state but i hear say you share alomo bitter here, na him mak i come. Where mine de ?

you don forget me but God never forget Prince, say amen.

THE ROCK no matter what you do in this life i still remain Prince and am gonna see you as my papa.

Happy xmas and new year in advance

Oga good afternoon to you 00oo. I swear your story is interesting but first where my alomo and xmas meat?

Happy new year in advance

Les: Welcome back prince, I'm very happy to see you. I pray you recover and I wasn't disappointed by " Baba On Top"
but for the record, something has been bothering me and I wanna say it now. See prince, did* signifies past and whenever you use it, the following verb should be in present.
Eg. I went to see miss Grace.
. I did* go* to see miss Grace.
2; did I *go to see miss Grace?? And not. Did I went * to see miss Grace.
I hope you understand me and accept in good faith. #soma

thanks for the corrections bro. I modified it as soon as i saw your comments, if you check now it no more there.
Perhap, I was controlled by alomo

happy xmas in advance

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I waited in the sitting room patiently awaiting my mother returned.
Many memories and thoughts leaped to my head as i thought about the protocols involved concerning the 3days fasting and prayers which am about starting the following day.
I sat down on the couch looking up the ceilling while heavy thoughts occupied my heart, sooner the parlour door adjusted opened swiftly and my mother walked in with her little basket which she uses in her farming.

"welcome mum" i'd greeted as soon as she approached me.

"how are feeling?, why frowning your face, is anything the problem?." my mum quested

I quickly collected the farming basket from her arm, dusted the small stool which she collected to sit beside me while i started explaining the events of what happened in the church when she stayed absent.
My mother was very happy hearing what the pastor instructed that i should do, issue concerning fasting and prayer. My mum added some advices, she also informed me that, since it was the begining of new year and new term many devilish things do happens at school.

"mum it's 3days dry fasting and not 6 to 6 fasting." i uttered

"dry fasting?", did he instructed everybody the same?."

"mother am the only person involved in this special fasting 0oo0.
Can you pls explained to me why he had to option that i embark on 3days dry fasting for no just reason ?. I would rather began fasting for 6 to 6 instead of the dry fasting."

my mother had pity on me after reasonin with the idea i made, she kindly placed her right hand palm on my head encouraging me she would always stay around to check on me.
When i sighted the wall clock it was 2:00 in the afternoon and i was starved since i haven't eaten food morning.
I stood up from the couch immediately moving forward to the parlour door, pull it opened before dashing towards the corridor which leads to the kitchen. After eating my afternoon meal prepared of salad rice, i decided meeting with my friends.
Uduak was my first choice since she was closer to my resident environment and same was Samson.
By the time i arrived Uduak's compound that very moment she wasn't around, all the doors where locked
I stood there for sometime thinking of another place in mind to check, perhaps meeting with Samson was the best option.

Samson was suprised sighting me approaching from far. He stood up from the small size stool he sat

"Guy how body naw? " i'd asked the moment i clime the varanda.

"menn! Am glad to see you look smarter today 00oo, but firstly, bring my new year food here with a bottle of bitter." i uttered and bursted into laughter, while Samson waved smile on his lips.
I spent some hours with him before leaving for Precious houses, but when i arrived her place her parents informed me that she travelled and would be coming back next monday when the school resume.
I exhaled and kindly turned round and headed back home.

The following mornin was chilling by the time i moved outside the compound, it was dusty, wetty and the sun was just hiding it face behind the cloud. Perhaps, that very blissful moment was the day i started my dry fasting and the instruction the pastor announced was, i should be in church for 3days.
I kindly rejected the idea of sweeping the compound that hour, and hurriedly ran into the house to change my cloths in order to prepare for the 3days fasting.
Lateron, i rushed out from the compound with force heading towards the direction of the church but as soon as i arrived closer to the church premises my pastor called me.

"pray in the alter and dont sleep there while praying, okay."
Pastor instructed and i nodded my head but my heart was in deep troubled concerning the fact that all this fasting stuff would be fake.

"Why would he send me on 3days dry fasting ?". why would he say that i should do it in the Lord Alter ?"
i'd wonder to myself before leaving his present.
The church hall was quiet and open large, benches filled all gaps, yet everything that made sound in it echos louder when I slowly tumbled on my knees and started praying in low voice without ceasing. I started the prayers not less than 5munites when the pastor intruded...

"Prince i want to hear your voice from outside this hall. Pray louder."he mentioned and walked out from the hall

my head sparked and i was angry physically and provoked why everything concernin this fasting result to commands.
I stood up quickly, walked towards the hall door exist to check the pastor, but by the time i peeped he has entered his apartment.

I returned back to the alter immediately and concluded my prayers without seeking the present of my pastor.

"E be like say this pastor wan kill me o00o.
This fasting is terminated for now henceforth."
I made a cross sign on my forehead, chest and off i left for Grace.

Did i actually go for miss Grace?


To be continued.

eazylifer: Well, I've being reading the story for some time now. You are doing very well except for the errors people have pointed out.

If all these are your true experiences, then you sure have a very good memory which is quite incredible.

Concerning your health, get well soon bro. I'll come back at the end of the story. Stay blessed!

happy xmas and a new year in advance.

Thanks for reading my story starting from the first page to where i stopped. I promise to do something about my errors.

lanreabbey: Abeg ooo...na d grammatical Errors una won chop ni...person no dey %100 Ok....Put urself in his shoes en know ow its feels

menn am learning many things from them o00o...

I know it hard and i believe with their critiques and advices will surely change me to better writer tomorrow.

AOR D MAYOR: Master Prince: Amidst the fact that you are not feeling too well, Which we pray that God should grant you quick recovery. Pls no matter what try to take cognisance of your Diction's. Your grammatical blunder's were just too conspicous. The worst episode i have read so far. Pls remeber that when a Dog fails to bark as at when due it is sometimes mistaken for a Goat. But all thesame nice Job bro. Cos e nor easy to do Efizyy. MERRY CHRISTMAS BROTHER

thanks my oga for everything. Your points are well addressed and i appreciate them.

Happy xmas to you sir.

lanreabbey: Prince abeg just ignore sum fools...its not easy atall....Merry Christmas

thanks my guy. Happy xmas to you and new in advance...

tochstorm: since prince feels that those correcting his mistakes are "haters" so that includes I am going to stay out. You know what they say, you can have plasma, hdtv sorround sound, but if it's not put in order, they are just there only appreciated by few, who have that extra energy to flip it. happy xmas ya'll am out. Oh and by the way. You may have a vigorous, imagination. That'll commend. But you sir. Need to go and pick english project ss2.

Are you claiming to be my hater?
I wonder why you got angry easily after reading what i replied.
Perhaps i didnt mean to hurt anyone,i was just angry because some of us hardly noticed i was sick and nobody cares.

Sorry sir

PrinceAdepoju: the LORD is your strength bro. . .
Happy Christmas And Merry New Year In Advance.
https://www.nairaland.com/1565352/short-poem-christmas#20392878

good morning sir happy xmas

LogoDWhiz: Get well soon bro... Merry xmas

good morning sir, pls just keep on praying for my health.

Happy xmas

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Monday morning of that new month was annoying as my mum wouldn't permitted or allowed me sleep longer. She pinch me to wake up from my sweet, peacefull and sounded sleep.
Meanwhile, She had hurriedly woken up very early by 4:30am preparing herself for church activities that early hours of the morning. Perhaps, that monday morning assemblying in the church was particular set aside, announced and organized by the senior pastor for the gathering together of all youths to embark on fasting and prayer concerning the newly begining year. The precious time i spent with Miss Grace had caused me sleepless night. I was hopefully thinking that mornin will be my relaxation day but my mother would certainly not ceased pouching my back.

"mum, please just let me sleep to relaxed for sometimes.
I'll be at the church when the run comes out!" i'd uttered.

"Prince by the time i come to your room again, it wil hash for you" my mother mentioned and left the room.

I reluctantly woke up after contemplating and hissing about the fasting and prayers issues.
I moved into the bath room the moment i stepped down from the foam,i hurriedly dashed to urinate and to watch my face, before i walked slow towards the parlour.
I later prepared Myself and headed to the church for the morning fasting and prayers, but When reaching the church premise i could heard loud voices of people praying unstoppably.
The whole hall was occupied by strangers ,youths from other churches and that of the church had occupied all the seats from the back bench to the front bench when i entered. Perhaps, By the time i found a comfortable place to sit, i swiftly look all congregation searching for nothing in particular when i sighted Uduak sitting far from the section i sat.

"So this babe arrived and she refuse informing me." i muttered as i faced the halter.

When Uduak sighted me from the place i'd sat and she stood up walking outside to await me. I had no intentions of meeting with Uduak outside the church premises, except after the fasting and prayer period. Uduak was outside waiting patiently for me to meet with her but i refused changing or making any decision of chatting with her outside.
She later came inside the church after waiting, she walked towards where i stay and sat beside me.

"hey..Good morning Uduak. See as you fat now when you came back." i'd teased and she smiled.

"how are you feeling and how was everything moving when i left?" Uduak asked

"what do you hope for when you left me without replacing someone else?" i uttered nonchalantly.

" well, i expected you to feel happy since am here with you."
Uduak mentioned.

Meanwhile, Uduak had rapidly changed in her body stature within few months she travelled.
Uduak attractiveness and renewedness was vibrantly shown on her,has everything enlarge abundently from her breast, face, cheeks, ass and other parts. I complimented her sarcastically and she started laughing while throwing her head downward. Sooner, the senior pastor announced seeking the attention of Grace, instructing her to lead in praises and worship.
Miss Grace leads in praises and worship songs untill when the pastor took charge while shaking in the mood of Holy Spirit and prophesying.


"san-tro-bra-ka-ta!. Mi-ko-shera. Sunda bro tom,. sun da bro0. Chai, rima katua.. Shekini, yakini makus centro brata.. Roomy roomy.. Hey! Eyen mme wow. I see dead happenings this moment, bra- so muta, pray now that every bad things of the evil ones to go back to sender. Rana- kiso- yena senta min tro boss- sheri kaka !" pastor began to pronounced in differ tongues


I was at my seat listening attentively while trying harder to comprehend what he was uttering.
Many prayer points raised concerning someone that will fall victim in school.
I actually barraged prayers when i heard the pastor uttered but after the closing time pastor called me privately to a corner and instructed that i go on 3days dry fasting

"chai.. But sir i thought we just dismissed from the fasting now?" i'd asked worriedly while looking at him.

"yah. That was for all youth but right now you are attending on yours only."

The following day of my fasting started but something bad happened.


Brb...

ybahrbz91: i hope u r feeling beta Prince....cwiously! Av missed ur update....but ur health is d priority here oh...get well soon bro.

am glad you happily waited for my updates after all the delays, more are coming your way soon.

Happy xmas

ybahrbz91: i hope u r feeling beta Prince....cwiously! Av missed ur update....but ur health is d priority here oh...get well soon bro.

am glad you happily waited for my updates after all the delays, more are coming your way soon

#cough# abeg mak i say something...
i've just got to correct all my grammatical errors, change my writing skills, and improve wonderfully. Meanwhile, prince shall create a mighty history that everyone will be surprised.


I feel devastated by unreasonable people critical comments on my thread which cause nothing but pains. I have been seriously sick for over 1week, lying in hospital bed day and night and all some of you guys could do is complaining about my late updates, my irresponsibilitys, and my errors.
Perhaps, I already had this feelings that non of you haters care about my health.

As for your critique comments concerning why i refused fucking Grace, it not my fault.
Som ppl tink say na every guys go de bang girl ?, if na so you tink say every guy be, then you just lose.
Na wa oh..

BEAUTY JACOBS my one and only dearest thanks for your care, love, help concerning my health. I salut sweetty

updates comes up tomorrow because am here to stay with you guys.

Mak i go sit near christmas tree pray mak God heal me wella.

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Lateron that evening, breez blew harder and the weather started becoming chilling outside the school compound premises.
I wasn't comfortable staying out that late looking at the moon and the stars which shines in the skies. I decided moving into the house after contempting about changed of the night breez.
Grace instructed that we should stay out till when it time for sleeping. Miss Grace later entered her bed room and sooner, she returned back with two sweaters, she gave me the small one while taking the other bigger size.
From where we sat, we heard the sounds of loud musics singin from the directions of the staff quarters.


"wont they allow us hear again?. I guess they are celebrating about something, because it been long since they played musics."
i'd asked no one in particular untill Miss Grace answered me


"it not your business Prince. You either go inside the room and play your, instead of complaining about what they are playing ,In fact, lets find a warmer place for our discussions."Grace instruct


After she had gave orders about where to stay in order to get warm, i patiently told her to follow me.
Grace and i entered a particular classroom to relax there to chat. The conversation between the two of us took time as we realized it was 11:00. pm.


"Am going to bed now now because my eyes aren't function anymore." i stood up from where i sat heading towards the door.


"hey. Prince Wait for me." she instructed as she stood up quickly to meet me at the door.


It was obvious that by the time she met me at the door entrance, she began to leave trails of kiss on my lips. She placed her hand around my neck and we headed towards the hostel block.
That night we slept on foam without having any emotional feelings for each other. Although Grace tried making silly movement against me,but i shifted away from her body.
Miss Grace and i slept like babies without being disturbed, as sweet dreams took over everything till the next morning. I woke up very late the following morning by 6:30am, as soon as sighted sunlight ray which bored through the window spaces. I greeted Grace when i woke her and she replied my morning greetings. She later stood reluctantly and dashed to bathroom to urinate, while i stood at the little floored spaced room exercising myself.
I informed her of my leaving when she came out from the bathroom, and she was suprised hearing what i uttered. Grace was bitterly sad in her heart because she never wanted me to leave.


"my mum will be waiting on me, if she doesn't see me this morning. I've got to leave." i mentioned and headed towards the door..


"okay.. But i hope you will come here in the evening to check on me?" Grace question me impatiently.


"i promise to come here, but now i need to take my leave. Bye." i mentioned


Miss Grace sincerely asked if i wouldn't mind staying to take morning breakfast, but i refused because my mother might have prepared hers already. Grace walked me down to the school gate and i moved towards the location of my home. I reached home that very morning hoping that i needed giving explainations concerning why i had to sleep outside.
I greeted my mother the moment i barge into the parlour but she stood muted. She asked me why i had to disobey her instructions.
I pleaded for pardon before she allow me rest that morning.
I relaxed myself for sometimes, while in my bedroom before i made plans concernin checking up my best friend Samson.
By the time i visited Samson his health was getting worst by the day. I guess it was due because of thinking about his eye conditions, more problems which would seemingly reduces his body weight.
I sympathized with him before leaving their house that afternoon with grief about his present situations. Later on that afternoon i prepared meeting Miss Grace since i didnt have anything at home handled. I moved into the bathroom to take a cool shower, dressed in my christmas flirting cloths.When i reached the hostel room where Grace accomodate.
I knocked lightly on the door and she quickly instructed me to enter.
We chatted and laugh while watching the movie that displayed in the television screen. Grace would jump on me anytime she advanced closer to me whenever she moved away from the television set. I kindly reminded her about my condoms, yet she refused givin me back.
Indeed, Miss Grace was the happiest lady that very moment when i stay with her, cracking funny jokes that would made her laugh her lungs out.
We spent time together whenever i had the chance to come see her.
Suddenly, that xmas month slowly passed away and a new year approached which lead me to embarked on different thing i wouldn't like doing, not considering the particular person instructing me.



Brb

Good evening pals...
Chai... I never knew ppl luv prince 00oo
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+ LABASKI: dear am not a thief oh. I just wanna mak you guys update now..
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+PRINCESS.B: wow! Abeg mak i carry matchet enter bush cut firewood to keep the fire burning
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+SANNI BOI: good evening sir. Thanks for commenting on my story and thanks for reading too. Since you intend commenting, i give you space
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+AJAXTEA: hmmmm, you are really confessing here and you are now exposed. Chai... You get mind o by fvckin your landlord's daughter.
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+USMANSPHIN: abeg anythin were happened to anybody here no be my fault.
if you break my legs, your head go surely de my hand
chai... You see that babe?. If you, i say if you dear touch her, hmmmm we go creat room for fighting
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+YBARHRZs: my main guy pls wait no more because update is coming..
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+PHILTRUM: lwkmd menn you get luck say you run hid for back sharperly with crat of kunu...
Thanks sir
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+NORKSES: menn let them cry for more and more as if na vampire them be " more blood, more blood"
and thanks for your pix. The toy the guard my story
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guy na now i just de think of eating since morning, but i go update first before eatin the food i kept since morning

LoaDING typiNg...

The rock5555: My pikin make u no vex abeg.

Na only the man wey get sickness nai know the kin medicine he wan take.

I go show for ur thread soon, sorry for my absence, i hope you no miss me too much...

oga i missed you oh. I tink say you don forget about me now

your story just the sweet me for body like caress

Beauty Jacobs: Now i knw ur a big enoh

am doing it for you

giles14: man prince,duo u dey try but abeg increase d number of ur upload(stories).na beg i d beg

. Ok sir.
Am gonna give many updates, thanks for reading this story

Beauty Jacobs: Enoh o enoh

not like dat baby....

I de wait for you to send me card

matson247: This is my first comment. My Guy Please just believe in yourself, if you dont believe in yourself no one will believe in you. I love your mysterious piece of work and i love the vibrant spirit you have. Keep it up. Continue rollin am following. I love ya Bro

thanks man, and thanks for your encouragement.

Jumizie13: if he catch you

he don catch me sef and the money i no transfer

My pals update comes up later.

Mak i try weda i go fit transfer money from pops fone