Les: Welcome back prince, I'm very happy to see you. I pray you recover and I wasn't disappointed by " Baba On Top"
but for the record, something has been bothering me and I wanna say it now. See prince, did* signifies past and whenever you use it, the following verb should be in present.
Eg. I went to see miss Grace.
. I did* go* to see miss Grace.
2; did I *go to see miss Grace?? And not. Did I went * to see miss Grace.
I hope you understand me and accept in good faith. #soma

thanks for the corrections bro. I modified it as soon as i saw your comments, if you check now it no more there.
Perhap, I was controlled by alomo

happy xmas in advance

360prince: thanks for the corrections bro. I modified it as soon as i saw your comments, if you check now it no more there.
Perhap, I was controlled by alomo

happy xmas in advance

which exmaxx again?? I did mine yesterday bro. Just surprised you are yet to do yours.
you corrected only that of miss grace I cited as example, there other similar ones also like" did he instructed everybody" no need correcting them, just whenever you use the word *did, don't put your verb in past tense.

prince its good to have you back...... still praying to God for ur full recovery... #Happy

philtrum: prince its good to have you back...... still praying to God for ur full recovery... #Happy

thanks bro happy new year in advance

Les: which exmaxx again?? I did mine yesterday bro. Just surprised you are yet to do yours.
you corrected only that of miss grace I cited as example, there other similar ones also like" did he instructed everybody" no need correcting them, just whenever you use the word *did, don't put your verb in past tense.

i shall take note of that from now henceforth

360prince: #cough# abeg mak i say something...
i've just got to correct all my grammatical errors, change my writing skills, and improve wonderfully. Meanwhile, prince shall create a mighty history that everyone will be surprised.


I feel devastated by unreasonable people critical comments on my thread which cause nothing but pains. I have been seriously sick for over 1week, lying in hospital bed day and night and all some of you guys could do is complaining about my late updates, my irresponsibilitys, and my errors.
Perhaps, I already had this feelings that non of you haters care about my health.

As for your critique comments concerning why i refused fucking Grace, it not my fault.
Som ppl tink say na every guys go de bang girl ?, if na so you tink say every guy be, then you just lose.
Na wa oh..

BEAUTY JACOBS my one and only dearest thanks for your care, love, help concerning my health. I salut sweetty

updates comes up tomorrow because am here to stay with you guys.

Mak i go sit near christmas tree pray mak God heal me wella.

ok...... We dey ur back!

lanreabbey: Abeg ooo...na d grammatical Errors una won chop ni...person no dey %100 Ok....Put urself in his shoes en know ow its feels

No insults intended,but its ppl like u dat do not embrace developments. I've been following this thread for a long time now but have refused to comment because of ppl like u. U may be reading this story just for the fun of it n prince may be writing for fun too. But in case he decides to take it to anoda level,u don't expect him to continue his errors,so pls allow him to accept his corrections.

@Prince,I want to commend u cos u're doing great. Apart from the wrong use of tenses n wrong spellings,u're good.
My advice for u is
1. After typing,read ur work aloud to urself to know if it sounds correct
2. Look for sum1 who u're close to who has a good command of English to proofread it for u
3. Always use ur dictionary to confirm words u're not sure of
4. Do not listen to praise singers who do not want u to accept corrections,they will destroy ur career.

I'll start pointing out ur errors whenever I can and nobody should quote me to say rubbish!




Merry xmas

stardragon:
ok...... We dey ur back!

ok sir

AG.gal:


No insults intended,but its ppl like u dat do not embrace developments. I've been following this thread for a long time now but have refused to comment because of ppl like u. U may be reading this story just for the fun of it n prince may be writing for fun too. But in case he decides to take it to anoda level,u don't expect him to continue his errors,so pls allow him to accept his corrections.

@Prince,I want to commend u cos u're doing great. Apart from the wrong use of tenses n wrong spellings,u're good.
My advice for u is
1. After typing,read ur work aloud to urself to know if it sounds correct
2. Look for sum1 who u're close to who has a good command of English to proofread it for u
3. Always use ur dictionary to confirm words u're not sure of
4. Do not listen to praise singers who do not want u to accept corrections,they will destroy ur career.

I'll start pointing out ur errors whenever I can and nobody should quote me to say rubbish!




Merry xmas

it wonderful havin you comment on my story with so much advices and encouraging words. I appreciate the fact that you followed this story without giving up because of it errors and all sort.

Am just a learner here and this is my first time of writing any story, critiques are welcome but they must go with corrections because i cant know it all.

I would welcome your corrections in order to improve my writing skills and enlightening me about ways to write.

I checked your statue because your advice pinch me.. My sister you are welcome and pls as you promise for God will grant you more acknowledge.

Criticism isn't the only rightful thing here,but critiques and corrections are the best two thing or idea to improve me

Thats what am talking about Prince good write up. Now go for the kill Cos it only get better. D Lord is ur strength.

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On my way heading towards the direction which leads to Grace place i was rejoyfully singing fasting songs while walking on the road. My intensions of meeting with Miss Grace was because i wanted eating food since eating the food in my mum's present would baffled her, and that would also terminate my fasting and prayers if the pastor knows.
My heart was gladen when i thought about how i escaped from the church premises without being seen by the pastor, how i would relaxed with a peaceful mind as soon as i will reached Grace place but on my way walking i had no acknowledge that a 504car was following me from behind. When i recognized the car colour, the car sound and the person driving it i quickly jumped into a nearby bush squating down while gazing at the direction where the car entered.
Lateron, the 504 car passed immediately and disappeared out of sight.
After waiting for few minutes in my hiding place i decided leaving that deserted bush but by the time i stood up from where i had squatted i met with my pastor.
I was frightened the moment he sighted me standing inside the bush, he began to beckoned on me and i slowly approached him with fears in my heart. My pastor was standing beside his car waitin patiently for me to start explaining how i escaped.

"Prince what are you doing in the bush?" he asked while peeping to check his wristwatch.

"hmmm, sir i was in the bush urinating."
i replied him quickly.

"you left your fasting and prayers to come here,all the way from the church premises to urinate?."
"it for your own good that you embark on fasting but you ran away. Before i reach the church i want to see your present there."

"okay sir, i'll be there this munite." i'd replied while frowning my face wildly.

Before the pastor left to where he was going he informed me that he wanted refueling his car. He hop into his 504 and drove off speedily towards the main highway road which direct straight to the fueling station.
On my way returning back to the church i met with a friend who had a football in his hand, i exchanged pleasantries before i changed my mind to follow him to the football field.

I was stronger healthy fitted looking guy throughout that evening when i played in the football field, but the problem that later attack me thereafter was the heavy hunger strike adding up to my fasting.
From the football field i headed to Miss Grace hostel block to check her, i knocked on the door and she open it immediately before embracing me.

"you look roughly. where did you go?" Grace asked

"i was at the football field having fun with my friends, anything for the boys ?"

"yah. Pls do come inside, sit and relax let me prepare something special and delicious for you."
Grace instructed and i obeyed her and she quickly moved way to prepare the meal. I asked her if she had purchased any snack, she moved closer to her handbag and brought out oranges in a black nylon. I patiently waited to eat while preserving the oranges but Grace wasn't fast enough to while cooking the food as I passionately informed her about leaving. Grace calmly and passionately sat beside me wanting us chat more. I also made known to her about my fasting issue which i started after ending the group fasting, she consoled encouraging me to stand stronger while she escorted me to the school gate.
By the time i reached home, relaxing in the sitting room watching movies i brought out the oranges to drink, but a knock at the door made me rapidly hide the oranges.
A strange young boy came in and informed me that pastor wanted my present that moment. Before the guy left i followed him from behind till when i finally reached the pastor house. Meanwhile, i couldn't feel myself anymore because i was tired and i felt pains in my bones, perhaps i needed a long resting. Pastor barraged me with Many questions concerning where i had been throughout that evening, he dragged my ears and shouted that i should be prayful and well concentrated..

"chai.. Which kind of fasting be this naw?. I cant do something that is more than my strength 00oo." i'd mentioned silently when i left his present.

That evening i slept in a cold opened long hall, nobody came around to check me, i prayed untill i started repeating the same prayer points while on my knees till the following morning as my energy exhausted i became weak every minutes untill the following fasting day.


Brb

#Gobe

Xo u no va see ur ba3 change since 2 continue d story , no let make i slip wit suspense dis nyte ooo

waiting.....................
patiently

waiting.....................
patientlywaiting.....................
patientlywaiting.....................
patiently

Hehehehe. Una go wait taya.

philtrum: #Gobe

good morning sir

AOR D MAYOR: Thats what am talking about Prince good write up. Now go for the kill Cos it only get better. D Lord is ur strength.

amen but where my xmas cunu and donot

waslead300: Xo u no va see ur ba3 change since 2 continue d story , no let make i slip wit suspense dis nyte ooo

oga sorry na, as i change my battery finish na so money come finish too.

labaski: waiting.....................
patientlywaiting.....................
patientlywaiting.....................
patiently

happy new year in advance.

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am happy you read my story starting from page one to the last page.
Thanks sir.

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Second day:

it was terrible the next fasting morning when i woke up very early from the cold dusty floor, yawning every munites on my way vacating the church long hall to urinate outside the church premise and just then i met with the pastor discussing with my mother.
They were discussing about my fasting and how i carelessly left the church compound for strolling while fasting but i didnt intend hearing their conversation which they issue descended upon me, i only look worried because i knew too well that pastor will report my characters to my mother concerning where he met me inside a bush. Apart from hearing their secret talks somethin special drew my attentions and focus, different thoughts leaped to my head when sighting what my mother brought,
My mother had bak0 bag in her hands and i sighted something like food flake inside the bag, i nearly screamed for joy the moment i realized it was food for me. The urge i was having to urinate disappeared instantly and i quickly jumped happily and ran back inside the church to await the food.
Thereafter my mother and the senior pastor walked towards the church door entrance and i smartly bent my head down near the pulpit pretending to be praying when they fully entered.

"good morning mum, good morning pastor."
i greeted them while stretching my body holding my two hands backwardly, yawning disparately for morning food. My pastor responded my greetings and left immediately to welcome his invited guests who stood outside the church premises nearer to his apartment waitin. I calmly questioned My mother why she refused informing the pastor to pray for my food when the pastor left because i expected them to pray. I wasn't happy has the pastor walk out without praying for the content in the bag before he would leave, It suprises me when non of them did that while i stood staring blankly at my mum beside me before
I later adjusted closer to collect the bacobag from my mother she hesitated, she pushed my hand away before dropping the sackbag beside her while she sat on the bench looking weirdly at me.
My mother replied my greetings before she knelt down to pray for about 15minutes prayers When she later concluded her prayers she stood up and began to barrage me many questions concerning where i went, i told her everything that happened when i did not feel comfortable for the fasting anymore.

"last night i saw few oranges under the couch, who dropped them there?"
my mum questioned like she wanted bouncing on me, but when i sincerely explain to her where i got them from she nodded her head.

"mum i didnt take any orange to my mouth because that will terminate my fasting." i mentioned

"i've heard you but you wont eat today because tomorrow is your last day of fasting. Be patience, ok ?"
my mother said while closing the bag mouth, adjusting it to herself properly.

"mum am hungry and i disparately need to eat, pls call the pastor here make him quickly change this fasting and prayer to 6-12, or Do you want me to starve till my dead?." i mentioned frowning my face, while gazing at the bako bag with it content.

My mother encourage that i should be more prayerful since that day was the second to the last day of my fasting period,
I couldn't shout any longer because i was weak, tired and very hungry i only squeeze my face and slammed my ass on the bench radically.
Lateron, my mother informed me of her leaving but i couldn't pay attention as i planned about how to escape from the church, but the only obstruction that came across my mind was when i remembered the wicked and strict church securityman.

"0ya, how i go take pass that man commot for this empty place?".
"Ahhh that man were the put eyes on me?" i questioned myself silently in my heart.

My mother must have quickly left with the bag she came with but my mind wasn't there, i remained in the church planning how to deceive the church guard for my escaped but when i thought about that a call buzz into my cellphone and when i checked the screen it was Miss Grace calling, i rejected her calls but she called back again and i angryly separated the battery from the phone.

I was provoked when my stomach made an horrible sounds begging for food, i became weak the more whenever i remembered seeing the sight of food but couldn't taste non touch.
I summon courage as i made an heavy sigh laying hopelessly on an empty church bench without involving myself into prayers, or doing any activities till in the evening when i felt sick and finally slept off.


Brb

*Yawns*........ Story twisted. No more mis grace, now s mr pastor! Continr boy we de elders ar listinin

stardragon: *Yawns*........ Story twisted. No more mis grace, now s mr pastor! Continr boy we de elders ar listinin

na wetin happened na.

One thing connects to the other and thats life for you.

Check the story i don complete tam

I de sight my dad below

no one can touch when i have "The ROCK" in the ring

my wife phone don lost because husle boys don carry yam, sorry dear i go buy you phone when i become manager for my own company

Nice write up son. Abeg correct this ur Munites, its minutes

The rock5555: Nice write up son. Abeg correct this ur Munites, its minutes

thanks dad

your son house de free for you

I feel pity for you ooo. 3 days dry fasting

Isedax: ow u?

im okay i just choose to b a silent follower

*kida-berry#:

im okay i just choose to b a silent follower

I still hear you silently speak