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Poems For Review / Bird I [haiku] by Aiyamrex(m): 9:10am On Jun 03, 2020 |
Sitting on a tree tuning her favorite song woolen made nest house #Folorunsho_Iyanuoluwa 1 Like 1 Share |
Poems For Review / Re: Snow [haiku] by Aiyamrex(m): 9:06am On Jun 03, 2020 |
joseph1832: thank u sir you said kevin who lectures people on poetry knows little or nothing about haiku. . . I concur, it may be true. but u got all wrong when u called a 'mora' syllable |
Poems For Review / Re: Snow [haiku] by Aiyamrex(m): 6:48am On Jun 03, 2020 |
joseph1832: i posted this same poem in allpoetry some minutes before i did here without the inscription 'HAIKU' Kevin himself and 5 others made a comment using the word haiku. . . same applicable when i posted it in FFP forums, Davidf and 2 others used the word haiku to compliment the poem. so to your question. . . its an haiku because it follows the mora of 5-7-5 phrases. howbeit, nt all haikus follows the 5,7,5 procedure, nt all. . . So can u tell me why its nt an haiku please? |
Poems For Review / Snow [haiku] by Aiyamrex(m): 5:44pm On Jun 02, 2020 |
Winter whelming breeze postboxes covered in white flowing rivers freezed #folorunsho_Iyanuoluwa |
Poems For Review / Re: Quarantined Words by Aiyamrex(m): 9:37pm On May 29, 2020 |
"but, the sun switched duty with the moon" my fav. Line; tis well personified. . . Am at u bro, keep it coming 2 Likes |
Poems For Review / Re: Ultimate Cede by Aiyamrex(m): 4:12am On May 29, 2020 |
Imagine coming up with Espanol at the last line to spice up the pieces, only my memo knows how much inspiration this poem birth in me. good work the rhetoric aspect of the question aimed the pieces to the blues of paris tower. . . keep it up 1 Like |
Religion / Re: Listen To Satan's Story by Aiyamrex(m): 4:04am On May 29, 2020 |
some kind of broken pieces of mismarged tales, said to pass hell to the veins of the lost fools? don't you know satan your father is a good tales man? man, you are the hundredth lost sheep. . . Its not too late for you to come back to the herds now and join the 99, the shepherd is out there in search of you among these hungry wolves of sin that cobwebed your body with illuminated foolishness and free mind of trial and error thinking. Well thank Satan you are endowed with some tons of stupidity in his kingdom, and your own TALES isn't true to your own self, even they are not meant to be true. . . PLEASE COME, TOMORROW IS TOO FAR TO WAIT FOR, COME, COME HOME |
Poems For Review / Re: Distance Whispers by Aiyamrex(m): 3:46pm On May 28, 2020 |
Kiddogarcia:Thanks boss |
Poems For Review / Distance Whispers by Aiyamrex(m): 8:31pm On May 27, 2020 |
“Where’s your boyfriend?” “It’s a long-distance relationship,” she replied. He smiled down from heaven a celestial witness. Amid fragrant pens and pink papers four years had passed their love etched in secret. Only the dustbin knew the depth of her devotion. “What if he isn’t waiting on the other side?” She lacked the strength to bear because his heart was too heavy to carry.. ✍️IYANUOLUWA MIKE FOLORUNSHO
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Literature / Re: Lets G○ P○eming (a P●etry Class) by Aiyamrex(m): 6:02pm On May 14, 2020 |
this is a very nice piece. ..
"when tears drop from my eyes..."
good imagery but you should have shown instead of saying |
Literature / Re: Lets G○ P○eming (a P●etry Class) by Aiyamrex(m): 3:11pm On May 13, 2020 |
welcome to class! LESSON 1 THE FIVE SENSES first of all I would like to clarify what poetry is and isn't. Writing poetry is best described as a composition that uses literary techniques and is not prose. Writing Prose is best described as writing that uses ordinary speech or language, such as a story or letter. However, there is such a thing as prose poetry that does use poetic devices, but it is still written in journal, letter or paragraph or story form. Poetry is written with a certain poetic structure of line breaks and stanzas. We will get more into the structure of poetry later in the course. Now that we have that cleared up, let's forge ahead. 1. Before writing a poem you should have an idea of what you are going to write about. Capture your muse on paper before starting, and build around that as a central point. You should know if you want to give imagery to provoke the senses, the emotions, or both before all other things. Once you have that decided, every word becomes a brick in the wall until you have built a solid poem. The concrete use of the senses makes a poem come to life. 2. What do you want readers to feel? Do you want to put them at ease, make them irritable, make them cry, confuse them, make them laugh, make them think, excite them, put them in a dreamy mood etc...? Figurative language controls not only emotions, but the five senses. Well placed figures of speech are the very essence of poetry! For example, the use of simile is a good way to bring in the senses without having to use them directly if the senses are not being used directly. An example of this is, 'the anger within her churned like a thunder storm rolling in." This is using the sense of sound, as well as imagery, to give a metaphor to how someone feels. It is giving a concrete use of a sense as a comparison to something more abstract. 3. Which senses will you need to focus on? To get the emotional response you want, will you appeal to any or all of the reader's 5 senses: sight, sound, taste, smell, or touch? The five senses: sight touch sound taste smell We are going to use two of the senses for the assignment below: touch and sound. Examples: Touch -- She runs her fingers through the dog's coat, as static electricity tingles her hand. Sound -- Music floats from the meadow; soft flute notes, carried by breezes ... Notice that writing in the present tense makes the scene more real and vivid to the reader. Try to use tangible and concrete examples either through the use of the senses directly or through simile, which is comparing something to another thing. In writing your poem, please be sure to show not tell, through the use of the senses. For example, you could write about how a rose smells, but never use the word 'rose', or, how something sounds without saying exactly what it is. You are showing the reader what something is through your describing of it through the senses in this lesson. Goodluck! ASSIGNMENT 1 write a new poem of 6 - 10 lines in any style using both touch and sound in a concrete way somewhere in the poem. Even though you will be focusing on touch and sound, don't forget to use some imagery to set the stage. Don't worry if you go a little over the line limit. Please state after your poem what you have used for sound, touch and imagery. Remember to show, not tell what you are writing about and try to write in the present tense. Try not to use the words 'touch' or 'sound' directly in your write, but instead describe these senses. SUBMIT YOUR ASSIGNMENTS HERE OR ON THE MAIL GIVEN ABOVE THANKS FOR COMING |
Literature / Lets G○ P○eming (a P●etry Class) by Aiyamrex(m): 2:51pm On May 13, 2020 |
this is to help we poem beginners. .. i think we all can gain from this ... if there is questions, suggestions or enquiries aiyamrex@gmail.com is available for mail . . . good luck! |
Poems For Review / Latest Poems By Aiyamrex by Aiyamrex(m): 2:41pm On May 12, 2020 |
Poems For Review / Someday by Aiyamrex(m): 1:38pm On May 09, 2020 |
Someday you will cry for me like my tears broke loose for you. Someday you will miss me like my existence longed for you Someday you will need me even my presence now is unwanted Someday you will love me again but i will be long gone farther across tomorrow Someday you will call me but the black bats will join the air for chasing them from my grave #Folorunsho Iyanuoluwa 1 Like |
Poems For Review / Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 10:12pm On May 08, 2020 |
Yes sir, i dnt think i get the haiku concept clear, can you make a constructive example using that poem sir. . . i really need to improve that is why we need someone like you to come review our junks and give it a good look |
Poems For Review / Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 7:33pm On May 07, 2020 |
Well sir, according to the haiku. . . Syllables is different from the calculation of 7-5-7 moras. . . in my lessons. . . Moras ain't syllables and at least if you can help in any way. . . Let me in please |
Poems For Review / Re: Purpose Of Life by Aiyamrex(m): 3:38pm On May 07, 2020 |
Aiyamrex: I Think life is just here to play with our mind by unfoldings misteries on how to make it in life and even adding to the mistery when you are dead. the living wonders what happens to you when you die (part of the mistery). the poem is open to critiques |
Poems For Review / Re: CORONAVIRUS BY KARISPEN by Aiyamrex(m): 8:33am On May 07, 2020 |
Nice piece amigo. i felt your imagery . . i dnt knw hw you will feel about this. . . But what if you use a different poetry style rather than making it a blank verse. . . why not re-construct the poem by spliting it to different parts of lines and stanzas to make it more clear and kill boredom. . . this is a nice piece. . . I love how you used your apostrophic words keep it up |
Poems For Review / Re: Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 8:18am On May 07, 2020 |
Aiyamrex: looking deeply at this poem, u can have many interpretation as u read, but majorly splitted into trio-parts THE POND old and silent unti the fish stop it's peace in entrance. THE FISH finds joy in its new habitat leaping out for fun but ndt its end when human intervene so sad THE HUMAN finds his meal a delicacy when he caught the fish with his hook. . . the poem is open to any kind of constructive critique |
Poems For Review / Re: Fears by Aiyamrex(m): 8:10am On May 07, 2020 |
This poem is just a fight in my head, scared of what to befall humanity after death. some maybe help or input fears into our minds telling us about hell and paradise. my fears erupted when i knew what hell does to the dead. . . So i prefer being dead and have no more afterlife experiences this poem is open to critique |
Poems For Review / Re: O Death O Death (an Elegy) by Aiyamrex(m): 8:03am On May 07, 2020 |
Aiyamrex: this poem is nothing but a kind of fiction which your mind made real to you. just about a kid who died, maybe a boy or a girl who knows? the first stanza talks of the lost, and how earth painted the kid in dust (buried) the second stanza however, talks of the funeral, of the kid so loved by everyone. the last chapter talks of the life after death where death has no power over life. the poem is however open to any constructive critism. your critiques make a better me |
Poems For Review / Re: Fears by Aiyamrex(m): 11:08pm On May 06, 2020 |
Every poet is a dumb as' 'round here. . .
i doubt our moderators exists. . .
no single encouragement |
Literature / Re: "My Mother; My Demigod" A Poem By: Sammy Opeyemi by Aiyamrex(m): 10:06pm On May 06, 2020 |
Nice work amigo, I really like the imagery even though the use of cliches pinched the work. . . why not break it into shorter stanzas to prevent boring readers down. Inserting more rhetorical devices will spice up the piece. . . *show readers your mind rather than telling them literarily e.g ( if i get soaked by the rain ). . . Why not use a rhetorical phrase like (when the hit of the weeping clouds drowns my cloak) just an advice* even though there are many more, I dnt knw how you feel about the critique, but its a nice work once again! it touches my heart and build in my mind some images |
Poems For Review / Old Pond (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 9:04pm On May 06, 2020 |
Silent old pond sad fish leaped in silence again! #Folorunsho Iyanuoluwa 1 Like |
Poems For Review / O Death O Death (an Elegy) by Aiyamrex(m): 6:47pm On May 06, 2020 |
Of ones on Earth with joy resides; where sands write dust in the Earth besides. six feets under s'where your beauty lies saved out from pains and the world of lies. O, Death! O Death! poison is thy sting! Decaying body down down the earth. oh! Gloomy grave! What a dreadful death! why pluck not the old but the unripe one? a kid in shroud mourned by eveyone O, death! O, death! you child of hell! sound now the horn of gates unseen of nature's abode truly free of sin let the mellow wind carry out the tone "from dust we come and sure hence we tune" O' death! O, death! Ados to see us no more. #Folorunsho_Iyanuoluwa |
Poems For Review / Purpose Of Life by Aiyamrex(m): 5:54pm On May 06, 2020 |
Misterious Purpose of life is to cause misery to those who have it when you have it and even more misery to those who have it when you lose it . #Folorunsho_Iyanuoluwa |
Poems For Review / Ghost Of Me (a Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 5:05pm On May 06, 2020 |
White as melting snow Heart goes numb and legs fades They see my ghost . #Folorunsho Iyanuoluwa |
Poems For Review / Re: Inspirational Poem On Cruelty Of Life by Aiyamrex(m): 2:49pm On May 06, 2020 |
Great job amigo, your work is spiced up with enjambments which rhetoricaly long me for the next line. well, twas kind of a song to me with the rythm i created reading this piece. i feel your pains and how f*cked life is. my fav. Line "making me to appreciate sweet harshness of mistery" (sweet harshness) i love the use of that oxymoronic device. . . thank you keep it coming 1 Like |
Poems For Review / Re: Hunger (A Haiku) by Aiyamrex(m): 6:19pm On May 05, 2020 |
Well originated from Japanese poems tho. . . Just following the 7-5-7 moras. . . short phrases with deep hidden meaning. . . read again and again to get new messages each time |
Fashion / Re: The finest Guy Of 2020 (images) by Aiyamrex(m): 5:02pm On May 05, 2020 |
ThatKING:thanks bruh, sometimes, tempers built for you by some anonymous ill savagers who can't mind their broken business can make your day go hot |
Poems For Review / Re: Not The Way It Was. by Aiyamrex(m): 4:55pm On May 05, 2020 |
Well, what will i say than, it's a de-wonder-luxe-ful write up spiced up with some imagery you forced into my head. . . That orange the field the birds and those stuffs. . . How i wish you break those pieces into stanzas and put in some more rhetorical devices. . . once again de luxe write up! |
Literature / Legit Freelance Discussion by Aiyamrex(m): 4:47pm On May 05, 2020 |
Who knows any legit and paying freelance blog or web we writers can work for |
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