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bibijay123:
Reach out to them and tell them to take down your story. They ought to have taken your permission first.

i did. it has been taken down.. And im still hunting more. . .


michaelblake40, to connect just reply in-line with that mail. Or reach me here, dwizy.mp3@gmail.com

bibijay123:
Well done bro, you are doing a great job here and I love your prologue.

thanks aunty mi. Im glad you loved it, . God bless you.

MichaelBlake40:
Creeza how fa na i never see am o

bros , make e no b like say I dae avoid u. Bt i sent u an email this afternoon. God bless you.

kennysam91:
9ic 1 kip it up

bless up dear. Tank u

EvaJael:
Whew! That was quite a review and I can assure u I agree with every word. You're right about Mille's bullet. I must admit I was in a hurry to update so I forgot about her emotions.
Thank u Creeza. Your review was timely and helpful

no problem.

Cool

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Congrats Evajael. You just graduated to that zone where 'readers will HATE to Love you' But ' love to HATE YOU, for killing a favorite character.

We've all been there..

Then again...oh she is staring at me to know if Im overwhelmed . CONGRATS! I AM . But dont smile too much, lemme tell you something.

I'm guessing you havent been shot in the arm before( God forbid, neither me!) but that part where mille was shot on the arm, you made it look flat.. Like you dont care.
The character just experienced something painful. Yes show her reaction.
Emotions! Darn, A gunshot will really hurt she is human na.
The unusual feeling alone should be heart wrenching...

The agony, the travails and pumping-adrenaline for survival.

Trust me a bullet is not a piece of cake.
Nice update dear. Im still here.

Just a rough review. Creeza may be Creasy but Not crazy.

THANK u.

I read this to the end. Op did you capitalise , in anyway, that Nigerian Men are sexual narcists who have nothing else to think of, in your view, except quenching their hunger pangs( food and otherwise)? If so, i think you should reconsider.



The story about Temi's ordeal happens in homes where the human nature is a mere mockery of religion, and this I mean practically, and downcasting of the relevance of girl- child in terms of tangible and minute inputs to societal life.



I Know where you got your idea from. '' well I dont know which party my wife belongs to, but I know she belongs to my living room, my KITchen and Zha Oza Room'' @BABA BUBU



Islam pepetrates a system where the opinion of a woman is best to nothing. Watch or stream this video :
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N_h6tSNXgBk


OR READ it up on wikipedia https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Osama_(film). I'd advise you stream it, you will cry for women- its slow and dragged, emotional but you'll wish you could jump into the screen and help the poor girl. (Marina Golbahari)


Either you failed to state that the couple is from a muslim home, ofcourse a third of yorubas are, Or you did not get your fact well, pardon me, before writing this story.
OR yet still, I'm sure this babarism is far gone and erased from our culture as Nigerians. I AM A PROUD Nigerian. A Christain and Indeed a lover of human justice and equality.

Nice piece though. So thought provoking. except for the sadism to men.

The Dead cant speak for themselves , either.

Quoting Ralph's '' I cant speak for him ( Mj)


Bianca be claiming holier than thou. And she had no idea that her man ' slept out' untill he eventually ' passed on'. Eyah! Sorry dear Bi.

SAM WHAT IS YOUR MISSION ABEG.


Bibijay123. Thanks for this. I'll be waiting for more, with my cup of cold juice.

enirock:
Welldone creeza. U did justice to both piece.from the suspense, to diction, to paragraph. It was nice nd also the story line was captivating. Thanks for these beautiful novels or stories. Simply amazing

thank you sir. I appreciate .

Frankenstein:
Good idea. It needs to be properly planned. Especially, the registration fee part.

THIS Guy plays bet9ja. Lol!!

Ive been castd before sha. Divepen1 check well. Thanks bro, knw u're busy and all

SurestG why you come reach my name , you add .... Abi you are speechless ni? Ayam not understanding (where is that frown smiley sef?)

anyways, you rock.. Hope you have not forgoten legal captivity... Am a ghost reader o

DarkRebel69:
Why, this is an "insultive dithyramb".
Insultive because by saying that my ink voice is like that of Prof. Soyinka , you are detracting from my individuality. And it's a dithyramb because by likening my ink voice to that of the good professor, you are doing me a profound honour–one I'm hardly worthy of (For now anyway). Like I said, "insultive dithyramb".

I do love the works of the good professor. I should be able to recall at least 3 of his poems from memory. "Telephone Conversation" in particular is deeply etched in my memory. I couldn't forget it even if I wanted to.

Im still trying to escape the lacunae of mind maps and brain frying bots, yes bots in grammatical equi-sanity his authobiographical account of his stay in kirikiri, has left me. There my friend, is one lengthy and disturbing sentence.

But alas 'the Man dies ' in everyone that keeps shut in the face of tryanny and destructive criticism.

Thank you for standing up for writers on the platform.


The prof indeed, has a student, hopefully, a near future Prof . DARKrebel... In you my friend.

respect!!

Funny

repogirl:
Okay, since Bukky called me, I decided to pass by with my bag of popcorn, it's been really interesting.

My advice to writers is to be like chimamanda Adichie, pay no mind to critics, just do your thing. The more you write, the better you become.

If writers were so awesome all the time, Editors wouldn't make a living.

Kayo80 and Bukky, you guys should ignore attention seekers. They waste your time and get you unnecessarily upset. You only give them credence when you reply them. In the end,you come out looking like the bad person because you are the one who people read and look up to in this section, not the OP who has nothing to lose.

If you have a story and you want to let it out, do so with all confidence and don't be bothered about what some delusional and egotistic narcissist, who can't write a simple story to save his soul thinks.

o wanbe! OYA O. Aunty Repo has finished talk for op head. Oti kun o!! His thread has awoken the Lit. Section Hall of Fame... Legends will come here to chop this guy raw.

See me gawking at him like a goat GAWK GAWK GAWK.

Aunty bibijay123 come o abeg

DarkRebel69:
As someone rightly pointed out, the OP suffers a severe case of superiority complex. A discerning fellow also insinuated that the original poster might have tunnel vision, and I'm inclined to agree with that diagnosis.

I saw this dross some days ago,—this dross which the OP in his warped mind believes to be ''constructive criticism"—but I quickly dismissed it as some rant by some angry, little teenager.

The fact is, if you direct your attention to the top part of the Nairaland homepage on your phone, you would see where it's indicated that there are 3,852,374 topics on Nairaland. (I'm betting the ones wiped out in that year when Nairaland was hacked are not included)

I reckon there are 39 sections on Nairaland. I am meticulous, but not meticulous enough–certainly not lonely nor nerdy enough–to set out counting the number of sub-sections that are on Nairaland.

But I *surmise* that there's an average of three sub-sections for every section. For example, under Romance section, we have (i) Sexuality section and (ii) Dating/Meet-up section.

So, if we were to multiply the 39 sections by 3, we would have an estimated total of 117 sections.
We shall round up the 3,852,374 topics to 3,900,000 topics so as to ease computation. Now, if we are going to get a rough estimate of the total numbers of topics ever created on Literature section, we would divide 3,900,000 by 117, and that leaves us with 33,333 topics.
Of course not every topic is going to be a story, or a novella, or a novel. And so let's divide the 33,333 topics by 2, which leaves us with 16,666 topics. And, of course, not every one of those 16,666 topics is going to be a story worth reading, so let's divide 16,666 by 2 again so as to give us an estimation of the sum total of all the good stories on Nairaland's Literature section. 16,666 topics ÷ 2 = 8,333 topics.

There you go, people. We have roughly 8,333 good stories on Nairaland and yet the OP said he has read only "over 60" stories out of the 8,333 good stories and 8,333 bad stories (He hasn't even read up to 100). And yet he thinks he has made a rational judgement.
Mathematically, the OP is an idïot. Diplomacy wise, he is gauche and lacks crucial soft skills. Psychology wise, he's a narcissist. And linguistics wise, he could do without the unneccesary verbosity.

I know a brainaic when I see one. Fantastastic ! Simply wow! Grand-freaking-deur!

The tone though, I might think it to be just me, giving there are instances- atleast five in ten observations- where people have the same ink voice. And I aptly, but presumably narrow yours to one Nobel Laurette whose works spin and toss me countless times, when I read them : Wole Soyinka

kanayoNickel:
What of the Rat Chef
he became super good.

ratatouille! btw please u guys should stop the debate already . Im begging. Its no longer healthy to be frank

kanayoNickel:
So u were taking the dirt for the great writers huh?

Their official Mud and expletives slinger?

in fact the more sincere critics we have on these section , the more we will get good works.


Mr Kay, Surprise us!

if you had the film Ratatouille, the underated Rat chef surprised the critic.

if not for anything, u won't open ur computer tonite cos you'd be boiling and wishing to cut off my fingers ( for ur great writers) but I am sure that when next u open d laptop and launch MSWord....You must be wary and you must try to come out good.

We are like demons meant to torment . You have the solution . .

ive seen Ratatouille GREAT CATOON. THAT chef died because a harsh critic made him look cheap

queenitee:
Larrysun, he's a boss.I love his work. Just can't get enough of it. His work would make you hate yourself for not knowing how to write

i swear

Pynkylypz:
Lol, so we are both muslims?

no dear. Btw ina ji Hausa kadan kadan. My parents grew up in jos

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Pynkylypz:
I think i know the mystery groom! Not creeza

eeh! Aye mi o! Thanks pynkylypz.. Evajael is not me o. Btw i wish I were the one fa! Insha allah!