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TamiOkoroDedeh:
A flashback with Doris' grandma? I don't remember that! She does mention her grandfather several times though; he was inspired by the Mama Joe character in Soul Food.

Pardon me, it was her grandpa; roasting chicken and taking them on walks or something like that. It was towards the end of the book and way past midnight and my brain was almost shutting down lol. Also, I wasn't clear on the kind of STD Jide caught, it wasn't discussed till the end of the story

Lleigh:
Dominque

Please tell her, i told her the same thing. You wrote a coherent piece of work. So please continue...

Glad to see someone else has read it and disagrees with the reviews

TamiOkoroDedeh:
No, you won't find the review there, I asked them not to make it public, but here's what they said.

Their opinion, the book was far from boring to me. I also wonder how you intend to turn Jide's character around in the sequel, absolutely nothing endearing about him that you would want an happy ending for. I maintain there's nothing wrong with Doris' character, neither is the plot flawed. Though, I must say there was a part of the story that threw me off balance. The part where Doris had a flashback about her Grandma. I got a bit confused as I did not realize that present melded into the past and I had to scroll back several pages to read again before I could understand that particular scene. Other than that, I had issue with the story.

The review may be discourag but that doesn't mean you should pull the curtain on the story entirely. Post it here or on your blog to get diverse opinions.

Lleigh:
I have started on an outline for the next book in The Lekki Club series, one of the characters in the book.

@dominique will keep you updated.

Yes the Auction, I was discussing that with a beta reader last week. i.e. tone it down or publish the reality. (As the contents are all things currently happening in Africa)

I have started creating the marketing content for it to post on Instagram, I pray for the courage

Nice but don't tone it down too much. Even with the graphic description in some scenes, the story was still voted No.1 story for about 3 consecutive weeks here.

TamiOkoroDedeh:
I probably shouldn't be saying this, but Literary Everything is the same blog that gave me the review.

Yikes! I read a few reviews on the blog a while back and I thought the reviews were unbiased. I'll visit there to see how they reviewed your story.

Lleigh:
Don't know how it would be received or if Okadabooks will carry it. I think they find The Lekki Club a bit explicit lol.

I am trying to tidy up The Auction and put that there. But i don't know if they will say over 25 not 18.

The ending for The Auction is done�.

I read a book on okadabooks by Unen Ameji a while back and part of the plot was a gay man who proposed to a woman to pose as his wife as a form of cover up. I read a similar plot by TM David West, both were well received and are on okadabooks.

The Auction will come with a disclaimer o. Some people may find some of the scenes extremely disturbing. I don't think there is anything like R25 though, a disclaimer should do. Can't wait to see what becomes of Linda.

Lleigh:
I asked the question too, quite a few of my beta readers want me to expand on the gay guy's story.

I don't know if I am brave enough to do it

That would be cool

TamiOkoroDedeh:
Thanks a million again. I attended boarding school in Aba, but my family lived in Uyo. Girls were extremely jealous because I was born in the UK, spoke better English than they did, and had a father who held a top post with NEPA. They thought I came from wealthy stock, but in reality my folks always taught us humility. These experiences loosely inspired Doris' row with Jide. And I knew people like Mex Orlando - fake people who bring you down, but subsequent parts would have revealed an even bigger secret he was hiding. I'm sorry you found the scene at Mex Orlando's uncomfortable, but that was the whole point. Coronation Street once did a male rape storyline without showing exactly what happened, but the viewer still felt the victim's anguish, exactly what I was going for when I wrote that chapter. The blogger who reviewed my work criticised me for making it sound like a conquest...are you kidding me? That chapter was told for Jide's prespective, and rapists always feel like they've conquered whenever they pounce on a helpless victim. And Jide didn't just hate Doris because she couldn't say his name properly, he just hated her.
Thanks for the review, really appreciate it.

Anybody that attended attended a public higher will come accross different students from different backgrounds and wouldn't find the Doris character out of sorts. I had a former roommate back in uni who was born and raised in Warri but can't speak pidgin English. From her carriage and demeanour, one can tell she wasn't raised in an average Nigerian home yet some people disliked her. I see a lot of Doris in her, probably why found the character totally believable.

I don't see myself a critic, just a lover of well written fiction. What I look for is an enjoyable and relatable story which I got from your story. I've read a lot of bad fiction both on here and okadabooks and yours doesn't even come close. I suggest you post the story here on the thread you created for it and see how it will be received. You can also send the story to the ladies at literaryeverything.com for a more balanced review.

I'm very much interested in how the story ends. How do I get the continuation without going to Amazon?